Open Mic: A killer you can’t fuck with

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    Posted: 28 October 2019 at 1:51am
My origin alone’s a psychological weapon
Horrifying story unforgettable legend

Derived from a restless demon two decades sleepin
Every 20 years ,Im back for a good reason

Killing spree season setting souls free
bleeding bodies dry let the lord see

Lucifers alive in me with every action
Made a deal with the devil history’s unravelin

writing on the walls ,whispers in the classroom
say my name five times do as i ask you

candyman candyman candyman say it
candyman candyman appears for you to play with

what is blood for if not for shedding
the blood of innocence oh so tempting

pain i can assure you will be most exquisite
bring you to the depths of hell let you visit

be immortal with me die together rise together
our crimes must be retold written on the walls forever

stuck in children’s dreams reason behind the screams
call upon the CandyMan this is what it means

someone searching for fun only trying to frighten
the legend comes to life quick to stick the knife in

twist drag gut skin ,decapitate to your limbs
mutilate your mind with a million different sins

gonna wish you never lived with thoughts so corrupted
the CandyMans for real a killer you cant fuck with
See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so
warn the mother fucking people
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Been a while that I seen your work but this was good! Obviously it’s fitting the whole ‘horror-esque’ theme right now which is stereotypical and expected. But I thought you had some really interesting concepts executed quite originally. You coulda gone with the more typical take on the theme especially with the Candyman segment, but you deviated from it with a more personal, reflective approach. The ‘be immortal with me’ is a strong example of just that, it adds a subtle sense of originality which is pretty well needed in this kind of piece. The entire ‘immortal’ segment is actually my favourite one for the atmosphere it evokes. Your scheme is simple yet smooth. Wished you would’ve been more consistent in that aspect with the patterns as it seems like you were switching it up too often (imho). Other than that I thought this was really nice for what it was.
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