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daydizzle89
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Posted: 26 April 2017 at 9:34pm |
You know this shit is tribal
I know the history, no bias or blindfolds Its for survival, region tight, small nd primal A cycle, where life holds an eyeful A land of ego where fucking your cousin is prideful You Brits vial, a land full of incest nd psychos Female fanny tossers asking brothers for pipefuls Im right though, you're all smothered in denial you anglophiles idolize history like listening to Tupac on Vinyl You twats dial in the past yet there isn't a dial tone Your society's broke, no red coats,rifles or ethics 1776 was Brexit on synthetic steroids flexing lets not forget kids, Guns gave us our independence You Brittish slaves just can't go on the offensive Freedom of speech oppressed nd so is expression Brittish snowflakes distressed will have ya arrested... for shitting on feminism... thats censorship Ya Americans are aggressive, thats part of this membership Our rights protected with the right to possess weapons You Marxists lit, it's hard to resist the parliament They're more poison than a pharmacist handing out arsenic Prescribed you an armament of narcissists Immodest Brits jerking thier ego off in a water of piss Yeah, you guys harness wits yet that doesnt win arguments When i went to London, i saw a bunch of Rat Arsed kids in Cardigans Flaming retards easy to spark up emotions like ima arsonist Your easy targets, Dizz begs no pardon when he shits on you carcasses Ima end this before they start to bitch that its too hard-hitting Rutter and Robert are examples of the Brittish armory gargling |
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Neek
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Your society's broke, no red coats,rifles or ethics
1776 was Brexit on synthetic steroids flexing lets not forget kids, Guns gave us our independence You Brittish slaves just can't go on the offensive Freedom of speech oppressed nd so is expression Brittish snowflakes distressed will have ya arrested... for shitting on feminism... thats censorship Ya Americans are aggressive, thats part of this membership this was my shit. |
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#Bananas
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rhetorical
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fuck yes to pro gun rights. always like reading you political joints dizz. the wording coupled with those witty internals made the flow and readability butter my man. "Your society's broke, no red coats,rifles or ethics
1776 was Brexit on synthetic steroids flexing lets not forget kids, Guns gave us our independence You Brittish slaves just can't go on the offensive" I put a fist in the air for you at this part hahaha. . i know alot of people dont like the use of multiple images, but it never bothered me as my ADD is mild at best lol . .. good show here fam. |
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daydizzle89
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Thanks for the feedz my peepz
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Rutter knows best
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Since you had me in mind here... As far as content goes, it sounded like you we're going at the regressive left more than Britain. You scattered references but i've never seem someone perceive us like this if i'm honest. I think if you went for a more cultural approach rather than broad political one it would def hit home more with us across the pond. The first section was stronger than the second imo, you kind of had less depth to the second as far as content. The first half i had to google shit like the 1777, even the red coats reference had me stumped at first then it clicked. We don't learn about the empire and shit at school. It's kinda swepped under the rug. You forget these things hold significance to other people. So yeh first half was impressive as far as content, vocab, rhythm n aggression. Second half i don't know, you kinda went a little..you. It got more direct as far as a diss, but your a better topical writer than a battler and this showed here. I was impressed with the first half though. |
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#bananas
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The Rap Daemon
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Well, first off, being British (not Brittish), I had to make a response to this as well this drop was good enough to make me want to.
Anyway, some very solid bars in here: "They're more poison than a pharmacist handing out arsenic" "Flaming retards easy to spark up emotions like ima arsonist" Flow and rhymes were on point throughout, shots were "hard-hitting", even the disses we're good because sometimes you fall off in that department. Like Rutter said - content was strong especially in the 1st half of the drop, did fall off a little bit towards the end but not enough to hurt the piece. Overall - a very enjoyable read that inspired/sparked a response. |
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Faggot
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daydizzle89
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all i gotta say is Merica... Fuck yah for the feed
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Exoduzt
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Well of course you did. That is just how the Dizzle rolls.. The scheme on the opening was great...I'm not sure about the incest but what the fuck do I know. The fact you used the word "fanny" made me lol...The entire shit that Neek quoted was fucking great. That was by far my favorite part. It had to have been some of the best scheme wise shit and flow wise shit that you have written. Even tho I know you RUSHED it. I swear you do it just to fuck with me.... At the end tho you reverted back to your rushed shit...FUCKING STOP IT! Overall one of your better pieces but if you took your time it could have been better....
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Crimson Juice
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Yeah this was nice,you had some really strong lines in this piece,I thought your
opening half was better than you last half,it seemed more fluent,you had that grit in your gut that made this a very directed verse,and although I'm British,i must say i enjoyed your view/slant here,a little rugged but overall it gave the verse more substance,your contents as value word goes was off some,your description of Britain was a typical of what ppl outside the country believe it to be,or want it to be,what i don't get is why include Rut's and the other guy?, when most ppl here are British,i know your looking to do the Dizzle trademark, (ruffling Feathers and shock value),anyways all in all a nice piece that made me smirk..peace. |
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Goryo.
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I like reading stuff like this by Americans because America is usually getting so much abuse from the rest of the world. It's good to see views from the other side. Can't say I know much about American history but I agree with Rutter about this being more targeted at the left. As far as the verses themselves are concerned I liked how you only ran with a few different schemes and transitioned into them. It was smooth, and the internals kept it running without hitting any pot holes. I like how the random punchlines were put in there. Well sort of punchlines more like one-liners. The Tupac on vinyl and arsenic lines for example, they didn't turn it corny or ruin the vibe. Overall I enjoyed it, wouldn't mind seeing more on that tip.
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