Open Mic: "Bald Spots" Feat CHAIN |
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 24 November 2016 at 1:12am |
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CHAIN: Greys on my lion’s mane, they describe my age If the color white is pure they should’ve been a lighter shade. Look into my eyes, nah, that is not a spiral shape Even though insanity is something that my mind has chafed. Hey… Life has been a tidal wave, that is my entire thang Flowing like venom syphoned through a viper fang. I am sane, I’m just say’n I’m no saint I-M-O My M.O is making sure my mans ain’t in dire straits. Diagnosed with broke-ness…it’s a viral plague I'm telling 'em that cowardice is hoping you don't die awake. Violating no codes, silent on the reg’ Bowing all our heads at the sight of a rival’s grave. Son, just give me your word and let our bond hyphenate… Its self with the truth and let the lies hibernate. Me, I'm on my woke shit letting verbs hydroplane... On a smooth flow...it's like a mental diaper change. Ginsu-ing some game with my guys that’s in an idle state Souls trapped in the 90’s like the Bryson tape. ’98 was 18 years ago, that ain’t the vibe today Vibrate with the current climate, this ain’t the Y2K. Isolate your feelings from the dealings on the cyberspace ‘Death’ is written in graffiti on y’all license plates. I’m Isaac Hayes and Iron Maiden mixed, I am highly praised Man, I’m making up for all that humble pie I ate. Exoduzt: CHAIN might not remember but he looked over & blessed my shit- When I was just a horror core writer & he was Pestilence- He told me test my wits- use my emotion and reflect my grit- be myself, a neglected kid- and it will eventually progress my spits- I confess it did- Expanded my my mind and I have the utmost respect for him!- So instead of being an arrogant prick and making my curtain call- I decided to take topics to the next level & reverse it all- With a serpents gaul- I twisted my writtens and made them personal- I learned to fall- between the cracks- but kept writing & I seemed to last- Even tho my dreams might be conceived as crap- But they were respected & made a mean impact- But I believe my grasp- on LA was I always speak the facts- But certain Egos tried to keep it back- Cus they couldn't get their sleep intact- Had to bite down on bars until their teeth jus' cracked- Shit, do the research I don't need to teach the math- Right or wrong, I'm frowned upon, like a police mans acts- Was I a sheep in masks- Or the actual unity? And the peace at last!- I tried to mentor noobies who's writtens reeked of ass- But they treated me like shit cus their egos are as weak as glass- but bigger than a bachelor party's weekend bash- I never understood it like a mute who's speaking fast- I felt I was jus' leakin' gas- When I was tryin' to teach & reach tha' mass- Of new writers, but they just wanted to shine & chime in without actually writing- Join a crew to start acting cool even tho the site is actually dying!- Mixed with a mod squad who supports gargantuan tarantula biting!- How could we have kept it real? Well that answers enticing- All it took was a bunch of honesty to keep it fantastic, exciting- But theres No hope for the fakes as I use my scope & Advance with the sighting - You bullshit writers think you make thunder, As I dance with the lightning!- This cancer is frightening!- So don't add to it, just expand with your writing!- So acknowledge the truth Cuss this is as real as my stinger gets- If ya want some old school advice keep a grip on the quill in ya fingertips - |
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Jay Homicide
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This was tight, Chain you're right fam, you're older than a motherfucker. Still blessed with the rhymes though. I've always felt you two were both very consistent at a high level, which is actually really impressive if you think about it. Always nice to see old heads still around to.
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Lord Puente
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This was dope. Nice job on this to both chain and Exo. Chain as usual yours was content heavy, albeit not as heavy as usual. There were one or two lines I didn't care for but the rest was dope. The imagery about the lions mane was dope, as well as the venom from viper fangs line was dope as fuck too.
Exo, hats off to you on this one. Your flow was butter, multis strung everything along so fluidly. Your verse is actually the one I liked best of these two. It was just such a smooth easy read with great rhyme schemes and great content. The thunder/lightning lines were my favorite of this whole thing. I like how you went from being the rookie paying homage to it ending with you trying to teach some rookies at some point. Nice progression of your story. Great fucking job to both of you, this was a dope peice. Was excited to see something posted with you two Collabing on it. As truth be told you two are in my top 3 artists on the website. |
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HI-Z
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Fuck my life.... You guys are way more advanced than me with everything.
Multis, structure, concepts everything was on point, you don't have to teach hands on when you post shit like this. Just reading it both inspires and educates newbies like me. Well shit, I gotta dip out I have things to do like read this over and over no joke I'm on my fifth pass right now. Straight up fire but what the hell do I know lol. Catch ya later, I got work to do. |
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Exoduzt
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thanks for the replies on this people its much appreciated. I'll be returning the favor tomorrow just been crazy busy as of late
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SELF ACTIVATE
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CHAIN:
I get it, but then again I don't. Are you saying that you're holier than thou -- more pure than pure can be? Because the only shade more light than white is invisible.
Now that was dope and conjured up some great imagery reminiscent of the cartoons I grew up on back in the day.
The flow and compound couplets were hard body here. I fuck with it. Dope lyrically as well.
Again, the flow is a marvel to read. That last line took a quick second to process, but when it clicked I was impressed by the gem it dropped. Can't be afraid to face your own death or to look the Reaper in his eyes when your time is up. Slick shit.
That was cool. I dug the nuances of the wordplay. For instance "word is bond" bond meaning to join, hyphenate meaning to connect. Clever stuff.
Well, I can tell we're from the same era so I felt all the nostalgic reference and what not. Plus your flow is still cold as ice.
Bro, your wording was pristine and your scheme was mean the entire read through. Dope shit. Exoduzt:
Dope retrospective intro with a nice display of veteran ability.
Exo, this shit is liquid while at the same time insightful and informative. I'm digging the narrative and how it's constructed. Impressive yet humble.
"Conceived" or 'perceived'. Hmmm... I suppose it works either way and changing it to the latter would alter the direction of your statement. In any case, I'm just thinking out loud (so to speak).
Dope mix of wordplay and site history. However, I wonder who it is you think is frowning down upon you. It must be the ghost of yesteryear or eras long forgotten, because nowadays you're pretty much a legend on this site.
Damn, bro you tell a very vivid story while describing your history on L.A. and most impressively your flow stays lit with little to no breakage or hang ups. Also, that last line was nice. Made me smirk.
The flow almost got away from you in this segment but, you managed to keep it all together. I like the tarantula line, the last one not so much. But all in all it kept the "storyline" progressing forward.
Nice way to close it out. I feel like your flow could be used as a guide on how to construct schemes and your lyrics a tutorial on how to convey thought. As a duo you two lit this shit up. It was a great read and a great collab! Peace... |
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alicewonder
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This was a very entertaining read.
Chain - Schemes and flow were classic per usual, incredibly smooth and unconventional in every line while being consistent throughout. There were several highlights, such as your entire opening segment, along with the 'viper fang' and 'Bryson tape' parts. Loved the last line as well, such a seemingly effortless display of a closer. Exoduzt - I really enjoyed the authentic and reflective tone in your verse throughout. The opening segment, in particularly the 'progress my spits' bar was a highlight. I also loved the actual progression of the verse from your retrospective point of view to the projection onto newer writers. A thoroughly good collab, guys. |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Two of the homies came to work on this shit right here. Props on yall getting together and throwing some heat on the OM.
Chain: Bruh, that delivery draws me in every time. You have such a strong ability to keep the interest of the reader as well as create an environment of dopeness around your verse. It is always consistent. Like fr fr you're the Jadakiss of LA. The whole verse was a quotable Exo: What up tho? Bruh you really can extremely clean in that flow. I liked the history in the opener with how CHAIN influenced you in how you create verses. From 'curtain call' to 'reach tha mass' was the flames fr. Always a fan Ex. Ya'll complimented each other real nice, I enjoyed the level of sophistication on this collab. Real, real dope.
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spume corrupt
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I know both you writers
I been one of very few that came through and drop 100% feedback as I see it over the years!!!!😞 I never believe the hype type of guy I called shiz when man said dope!! I risked the hate.... Because you are true writers and I wanted to see another level always..... Thank.me later CHAIN Next level 10th Dan on this of late Exo Massive overall elevation... game is looking mad dangerous Truth Bs feed will follow |
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Exoduzt
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much love on all the responses ....ill be returning the favor today
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