Open Mic: Better Emcee Than You

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    Posted: 22 October 2017 at 4:56pm
Get the fuck out my face!! I'm sick of your opinions!!
Stop talking to me because I ain't fucking listening!!!
Ive had enough of this bull-shit your speaking!!
somebody strangle this bitch my ears are bleeding!!!

Lets take it back to a time as a fella said before me -
to a dimension when music wasn't just about making money!!
Remember when emcee's told jokes? You laughed because they were funny!
I wanna hear Real Hip Hop not this fake synthetic shit shot!!

Comradeship.. where the fuck did that go? 
Uh-oh.. it looks like that went out the window!
At a point in time happened Something unforgivable,
and now the worlds Fubar thats my theory and world view..

Fucked up I know, ..but I'm not religious, 
Hell is a place on Earth to me that is obvious!
I shouldn't need to go into details really its that obvious!
Humanity got problems and its not looking good where I sit

I get angry like anybody else does,
To me music is life..
If you don't like music then you ain't right.. something wrong with you..
Open your heart mother fucker.. and then open your mind..

Listen feel the vibe let the notes travel and ride through you 
flow like a rivers tide every day an night feeling cool n groovy alright
the magic of the music got me feeling cool n groovy tonight
hittin'um with the written i'm spittin and writing more food for thought.. I'm killin'um

Twistin'um with the lyrical roller coaster I'm sitting'um in
Dicey nicely think twicely alrighty ava dab a diss or dat I mighty
cor blimey i'm wiling out all feisty.. 
grab my glock let off a desk-pop jump out the window for an ice cream

As I fall I scream from the top floor balcony,
like a Loony-Toon mischief I get into leads to emergency rooms,
Never grew up when i'm in McDonald's I always get a free balloon!
Call me a buffoon, lock me in a zoo, do what you gotta do - I'll always be a better emcee than You..
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I think not.

if you gonna title your om like this... bring more to table. work on your endrhymes, add internals, add multi's. there wasn't anything special about this piece imo. not to be harsh, im just being straight forward.

keep practicing, keep writing. most importantly, keep reading other ppls raps, that's best way to improve. search thru the site.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Bazooka bastard Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 October 2017 at 9:56am
You seem like an angry dude.

You know when you hear Tempa T on beat, he's hype and that but his bars are really really nowt special, that's the vibe I'm gettin. Angry rappers need to rap on beat not show people their lyrics. And you rhymed obvious with obvious mate - don't do that it's a buzz kill

"I have to punch up guys
Guys try it with me, I don't know why
Bax! Pax man straight in his eyes
They floored me, I was looking at the sky
Par! Now I have to go blind
That boy there I swear he gonna die
You're not bad, you're a mug, don't think you're a guy
When I slap man you won't be alright
Catch man on the field flying his kite"

As an example, Tempz best tune, shit bars on paper, sick on track
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