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    Posted: 17 December 2013 at 11:49pm
Manic
In a manic state,

Half of me's Human
Half of Me's Mutant
All my Fallacies are Lucid
Fighting off
All the cavalries moving
Casualtys, Wounded,
Overcharged Up
Committing batteries to em

I'm so high
I revolve with the planets
So crazy and peeled
My Resolve is bananas
I can feel my mindless chord snapping
And Still I wouldn't get bored laughing
Cracking, All kinds of Stabbings
Right through the core I'm smashing
Causing crimes in traffic
My Manic mind is havoc
So Sharp, and contrasted
I have static swords slashing
and having More Orgasms
Than four whore tappings
I was running a whole empire
and within 5 minutes
I ignited my own trip wire

Depression
In a drepressive state,

My life is a mess, Jesus christ, what I have done with it
Having anxiety attacks, barely breathing my lungs slipping
Getting strife as wonder whirled my deranged mind
Living in hell and the underworld at the same time
I want to take my life, how can I commit suicide
Should I stab the knife through my heart, its do and die
But I'm such a stupid guy, Even satan hated me with cupid's eyes
I'd probably survive and fail all my brutish tries
End up amputated, alone, with a monotony sac
Shitting on myself without a colostomy bag
I'm nothing, I'm worthless, Just am miserable fuck
Just taking razors to my arm to give it a cut
I want to feel pain, I want that portion suffering
It's so sick that melancholy is my unfortunate comforting
So I decided to sit in the bathtub, and drop the toaster in
But I survived it, and the outcome was some roller coaster shit

Mixed Episode
I fucking love it,
Fuck this, I don't why I keep surviving this dumb shit
Everything seems so beautiful
Well thats disputable, on earth I was never suitable
I can be anything I wanted
I'm heartless, glorified, doomed, my mind is haunted
I need my glory to save me,
My euphoria's crazy
Man I'm too lazy, I don't amount to shit, fuck being glorious daily
I can't do nothing but curl up and cry when this dysphoria takes me
I'm so hyped up, I feel evil
I want to pick up my eagle
and shoot all the people
But I will probably miss, to them my bullets wouldn't be lethal
I have to end this misery now, shoot at the steeple (temple)

days later…
A lithium refill.. Got to live through the sequels…










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So beautiful...I love it.
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..fuck i was on lithium...din't work.... 
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Smh @ poet. Aint this piece deserve some proper feed/appreciation and Props? Smh

Law, really impressive. Good work, man.
I really liked the concept.... And it was well executed. Verse complexity was just perfect. Usually, i dont enjoy too complex verses.. I loose interest in them..Verse should not be too simple or too complex imo...
And this one was just on that "perfect" line. Enjoyable read, throughout.
Thr were lots of sick concepts and quotable bars in that...

The best part was the last one, " Mixed Episode".
The way you swung the moods, very intertaining and impressive.
I got interest in "Human Psychology" so i enjoyed it from its first line to the last one.
Lots of props,bro
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.

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Loved the set up and just the theme of it, the rhyme really flowed i liked how you Incorporated the multiple feelings in a "bipolar mind"  the mixed episodes and depression really spoke to me although they where all VERY good The emotion you put into it really speaks out of the text through the words again LOVED the idea this piece really appealed to me so far the best one i've seen from you .. :) have it book marked 
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Solid piece right here, really feeling the concept and you captured the phases quite accurately. The way this flowed in the first set here was so nice. Also ended perfectly, captured the cyclic insanity of the illness very accurately. I really enjoy psych pieces like this.

Skilled drop right here, fam.

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Nice!! Love the way you broke it down into sections of what BiPolar is. Great angle to take. Descriptiveness and word usage was on point throughout, and this line below was A1 ......

Man I'm too lazy, I don't amount to shit, fuck being glorious daily
I can't do nothing but curl up and cry when this dysphoria takes me

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I was reading this in front of the smoke shop the other day. Why don't you do more of this. Your talent for controlling plots and imagery is raw. Shit had me thinkin I was crazy.....cuz we all get in those type of moods where we feel like we dammed if we do or dammed if we don't. Or we just get so fed up with life in general that we willing to entertain the most sinister thought processes. I think this deserves a five star.Bravo Law!

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Thank You, Que. 
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Very well written piece. I think the mixed portion of both states is my favorite area but as a whole I really did enjoy how it all proceeded and came together in the end. I think you got a really good grasp of each state of emotion/condition and detailed each verse on point enough for the reader to feel it. A lot of imagery and imagination displayed here. Good job, Law.
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Damn, quit cutting off your bars! That takes to much away from the first part. That's my only issue. Other than that, very, very well done. That's is until the last part, which was in the scope of your style as presented, fuckingeextraordinary. Respect, I look forward to seeing more of this. Keep elevating.
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sick piece right here. Love the concept of it and how it all goes together with the bipolar theme. Dope af keep it up
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