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Trizzy Tre
Superior Member Joined: 28 March 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5101 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 30-7-1 Form: WLWLWW |
Topic: [BL3] Arthur/Trizzy Tre -vs- HawkDevil/AxyRocker Posted: 20 May 2016 at 2:37am |
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Arthur / Trizzy Tre VS HawksDevil75 / AxyRocker House Rules 12 barz a team (24 lines) 6 barz per battler Due in 72 hours from NOW ***No extensions*** |
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AxyRocker
Standard Member Joined: 16 November 2014 Status: Offline Points: 1297 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-40-1 Form: LLLLWL |
Posted: 22 May 2016 at 8:23pm | |||||||||||||||||||||||
Hawk They are no big guns, watch us bring down their 'reign'(rain) like its bad weather
sleeping on me and axy just results into these kickbacks not getting together We got the one shot we needed but we brought enough rounds to take out an Empire Got arthur lined up in the sights, but this point aint no blank we brought the live fire You gonna eat a whole clip, open your mouth and let the rocker unload in your face Let the D/A , just state that you fucked with some white cops and they’ll throw out the case And Trizzy, your pic looks like a black gomer pile from full metal jacket With a full of shit G-look and face that says I just took a nasty ass laxative Tre rarey battled any vet, he's tryna hide under the high win percentile And we only see arthur on field to clean it, this guy is practically phenyl Yeah that was a little cold but fuck its on track so its public information Let my boy axe start choppin this ass tre without an authurs illustration Axy How did they become a team, they dissed each other Tre n Arthur so am I to assume that you found out your moms' name was 'Martha'? Tre couldn't write 'D.O.P.E' alone, he ain't that smart This faggot cannot win this one even if presented a 'work of art' Its some shakespeare story, the way 'Sword' ripped 'leader of the empire' This guy 'hides' his name like a 'pussy' on the entire You see Ar't' ends when 'T'rizzy starts, this team up is in shackle I am cutting through 'Art-tri' like am beefing up a cattle (artery) You can teach em 'Art of living' but they'll still be 'dying' Man! after this battle we are gonna see the '2 Kings' crying if I'll ever fear em that would only be cuz I am homophobic and they are gay This team up is funny cuz last time I checked Art's only OM was 'Fuck Tre' |
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Arthur
Veteran Joined: 23 August 2013 Location: London Status: Offline Points: 2310 Text Rank: #5 Stats: 36-7-0 Form: WWWWLL |
Posted: 23 May 2016 at 1:20am | |||||||||||||||||||||||
Trizzy Tre
First off....
Neither of u could find a partner? Ur 2
scrub fools...
So this murder isnt the only time you've
been left in a Blood pool!!
Axe ain't lethal, u can't mirror the
image you've made...
If this so-called weapons puttin in work,
...must be at minimum wage!
U dudes gettin slayed, ur records weak n
not new to the pro's...
it's easier to leave'em face down then
teens viewing their phones!
And Hawks not hell's soldier, but fitting
I'll burn this member...
If the Devil brought'em here, like
unsolicited mail i'mma return to sender!
Ur below par barz tiresome, punches
lackin you two silly hoes..
ur barz more annoying to view than
commercials during YouTube videos!
Listen bro go research my life, same shit
these chumps all dumb...
So bitch now hold those Cliff notes
highly ....then go jump off one!!
You fuckin bums...
Arthur
We the Best I Prove To Ya, there’s no
escape for Devil as if I put a Net To Lucifer
My level of Text Is New To Ya, over in
one when I bring down Ax quicker than Executioners
Y’all Need To Improve, Art n Trizz be
alpha males, ya get drowned out when ya Speak In The Room
Do you find it Easy To Lose? cos I ain’t
seen Hawk with the Tag Belt since the Legion Of Doom!
We at the Top Bitch, you guys only win
35% of ya battles it’s no surprise you’ve already Lost This
With them Soft Hits, watch me prove you a
Punk, Rocker, like you really enjoyed a Mosh Pit
You gon’ Learn Today, Art n Tre stopping all
comers, you guys are just the First To Pay
Watch your Verse Decay, because the only Hawk
above Art is a Bird Of Prey
Y’all know Arthur A Beast, how you had
the nerve to drop in this battle is Hard To Believe
Tre leave Scars On Ya Cheek, in the end you
wouldn’t hear Ax Shone if it was the Start Of A Scene (Action)
Ya Talk Is Cheap, talent from you? I ain’t
sayin blood from a stone but you know Rocks’ll Bleed
Boxin Teeth, when I get the tag belt call
me a Vet the way I put these Under Dogs To Sleep
…When does round 2 begin, get these fucks
outta ere!
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Kiki Spirez
Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4374 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 23 May 2016 at 10:32am | |||||||||||||||||||||||
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. They are no big guns, watch us bring down their 'reign'(rain) like its bad weather sleeping on me and axy just results into these kickbacks not getting together Standard reign/rain punch. Flowed well as a bar. But felt like the punch was a bit throwaway. Like I said in another battle. Sometime a strong opener can hype up the rest of your verse. 2/5. We got the one shot we needed but we brought enough rounds to take out an Empire Got arthur lined up in the sights, but this point aint no blank we brought the live fire Liked the Crew and PB plays, but felt like the end of the bar was a bit sloppy, wording wise. However, you do get benefit for getting more personal. 2.5/5. You gonna eat a whole clip, open your mouth and let the rocker unload in your face Let the D/A , just state that you fucked with some white cops and they’ll throw out the case Why do this, why go all gangsta, in an online battle where you only have 6 bars and none of your opponents act tough. It's just a shame. Don't waste bars in a tourney dude. 1/5. And Trizzy, your pic looks like a black gomer pile from full metal jacket With a full of shit G-look and face that says I just took a nasty ass laxative This was poor. More filler. I'll give you tiny benefit, purely on the premise that even poo jokes are better than gangsta ones. 1.5/5. Tre rarey battled any vet, he's tryna hide under the high win percentile And we only see arthur on field to clean it, this guy is practically phenyl Better. Wasn't hard, but at least it was relevant and personal. 2/5. Yeah that was a little cold but fuck its on track so its public information Let my boy axe start choppin this ass tre without an authurs illustration
Swing and a miss for me. Your whole punchline was based on too much reaching, spelling Arthurs name wrong, etc. 1/5. You showed potential, but then kept giving in to the temptation of filler lines about nothing. Trust me, if you're in a long ass face to face battle, you throw in the odd poo joke to keep it flowing til you think of a hay maker. But in a tourney with 6 bars against two good guys.. Stay away from it! Keep elevating. How did they become a team, they dissed each other Tre n Arthur so am I to assume that you found out your moms' name was 'Martha'? Not gonna front, didn't get the punchline. Not sure if it's a little known reference or a cultural one. But without an expo, i'm just gonna have to go off of flow and how direct it was. You did well addressing the dissing each other right from the bat. 2/5. Tre couldn't write 'D.O.P.E' alone, he ain't that smart This faggot cannot win this one even if presented a 'work of art' Solid. Felt like you maybe went a bit quick fire with the 'art' wordplay, when maybe there was harder and more brutal references - But it was steady. 2.5/5. Its some shakespeare story, the way 'Sword' ripped 'leader of the empire' This guy 'hides' his name like a 'pussy' on the entire Felt like this was badly worded, the set up was too long, and the second line too short and sweet. It was awkward to read for me personally. 1.5/5. You see Ar't' ends when 'T'rizzy starts, this team up is in shackle I am cutting through 'Art-tri' like am beefing up a cattle (artery) Whilst the set up you used wasn't needed, and was a bit annoying to read. The actual punch was a good one in my opinion. Went for something a big different. Good thinking. 3/5. You can teach em 'Art of living' but they'll still be 'dying' Man! after this battle we are gonna see the '2 Kings' crying Throwaway. If you're gonna put stuff in speech marks, make sure you have a good punchline, or it's anticlimactic. 2/5. if I'll ever fear em that would only be cuz I am homophobic and they are gay This team up is funny cuz last time I checked Art's only OM was 'Fuck Tre' This was the most mixed bar of the whole verse. The set up is horrific. From the statement, to the wording, to not even matching more than 1 syllable at the end of the line. However, you did well to point out a weakness in the partnership. If only you'd had a brutal set up, it could've been high scoring. 2.5/5.This was a half decent verse, but it was a 'so near' kinda piece. I could see you had the information and ideas, but not always the skill to make it killer on the page. But keep elevating, and i'm sure it'll come. ---------- Neither of u could find a partner? Ur 2
scrub fools...
So this murder isnt the only time you've
been left in a Blood pool!!
Good start, liked the play. Straight away hyped for your verse. 4/5. Axe ain't lethal, u can't mirror the image you've made... If this so-called weapons puttin in work,
...must be at minimum wage!
Filler, but made sense and kept the ball rolling. 3/5. U dudes gettin slayed, ur records weak n
not new to the pro's...
it's easier to leave'em face down then
teens viewing their phones!
Same as the previous. But this one is lower due to not attacking them personally. You could put this bar to any duo. 2/5. And Hawks not hell's soldier, but fitting
I'll burn this member...
If the Devil brought'em here, like
unsolicited mail i'mma return to sender!
Bit wordy. But solid. 2.5/5. Ur below par barz tiresome, punches
lackin you two silly hoes..
ur barz more annoying to view than
commercials during YouTube videos!
At this point you're just going through the motions. Nothing to crazy, but I think you think that if you turn up with solid enough bars, then you've got this. 2/5. Listen bro go research my life, same shit
these chumps all dumb...
So bitch now hold those Cliff notes
highly ....then go jump off one!! Flowed well and was aggressive, but was hoping you'd go personal on the finisher. 2/5. This was solid by your standards. I know you can come way better than this. But I understand that sometimes you see you're against 2 fairly new or inexperienced members, and you go 'One hot bar and the rest solid will get this' - So I won't judge too much haha We the Best I Prove To Ya, there’s no escape for Devil as if I put a Net To Lucifer My level of Text Is New To Ya, over in
one when I bring down Ax quicker than Executioners
Solid start, flowed very nicely, everthing I expected. 3/5. Y’all Need To Improve, Art n Trizz be
alpha males, ya get drowned out when ya Speak In The Room
Do you find it Easy To Lose? cos I ain’t
seen Hawk with the Tag Belt since the Legion Of Doom!
Wasn't killer, but you get benefit for the social reference. 3.5/5. We at the Top Bitch, you guys only win
35% of ya battles it’s no surprise you’ve already Lost This
With them Soft Hits, watch me prove you a
Punk, Rocker, like you really enjoyed a Mosh Pit
Personal attack, nameplay, flowed good. Keeps the ball rolling. 3/5. You gon’ Learn Today, Art n Tre stopping all
comers, you guys are just the First To Pay
Watch your Verse Decay, because the only Hawk
above Art is a Bird Of Prey
This flowed great, but was a swing and a miss for me. 2/5. Y’all know Arthur A Beast, how you had
the nerve to drop in this battle is Hard To Believe
Tre leave Scars On Ya Cheek, in the end you
wouldn’t hear Ax Shone if it was the Start Of A Scene (Action)
Fantastic bar. Lines like this are the difference between winning and losing. 4/5. Ya Talk Is Cheap, talent from you? I ain’t
sayin blood from a stone but you know Rocks’ll Bleed
Boxin Teeth, when I get the tag belt call
me a Vet the way I put these Under Dogs To Sleep Solid finish. 3/5.This was a cool verse. There was some holding back, like with Tre. But I felt like you brought it slightly more, maybe cos you're ruthless, maybe cos you've got to save face ahead of any title clashes. But it was an enjoyable read. I scored it 23.5 to 34. Keep up guys. MVGt: Tre and Arthur. |
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Droidian
Newbie BIG GAME KILLER! Joined: 07 May 2016 Location: Toronto Status: Offline Points: 776 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 7-2-0 Form: WWLWWW |
Posted: 24 May 2016 at 7:09am | |||||||||||||||||||||||
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So let's get it: Hawk: Bar 1: I think the idea was there, but the execution made it fall a touch flat. I saw it as a sort of stumble out of the gate. Bar 2: The set up here looked really promising, but seemed unfulfilled. Maybe it was because you tried to hit both at once, but the first line looked like it was setting up for a Triz blast. Bar 3: I like the continuity of this one despite the somewhat strange implications of the set up. Again, the idea was there, but the verse was rendered a bit awkwardly. Bar 4: For me this felt like your strongest and most complete bar. It wasn't an overly heavy shot, but but I think it was executed pretty well. Bar 5: Set up line was looking good, but the punch failed to arrive. Bar 6: this read more like a transition from the previous bar into what Axy was about to bring...so it didn't really accomplish much. overall: some of those setups showed potential for a hard hit Axy: Bar 1: I didn't really grasp what you were after here, were you referring to a past event? Bar 2: I liked this one in that it was a complete bar. It tied your two opponents in there. Bar 3: I didn't follow this one. was referring to Shakespeare just there to imply the epic? If it was a direct ref, it didn't come to mind for me Bar 4: I liked what you were trying to do here, but you were asking a lot of your reader to see Art-Tri as artery. I dug the creativity of it, though Bar 5: while not heavy, I felt this to be a complete punch. Bar 6: decent finish. I think you could have tinkered with it so it landed harder. Overall: some good moments with the odd "huh?" Tre: Bar 1: Nice introductory bar to set the tone. Clever wordplay that manages to cut as well. Bar 2: This was more humorous than it was hard shot, but landed cleanly nonetheless Bar 3: I thought the punch made up for the set up in this one. Bar 4: complete bar from set up to punch. the artistry of the wp overshadowed any choppiness Bar 5: the punch in this much stronger than its set up. Bar 6: not a crazy finish, but did manage to punch while predicting and dismissing their possible angles of attack. Art: Bar 1: 2 punches here that were cleverly wrought with braggado included. Punches weren't heavy, but landed just fine. Bar 2: interesting, but a bit of a miss for me despite the retro wrestling ref...though Demolition could have fit nicely in here as well. Bar 3: Strong personal in the setup that landed a bit flat for me despite its cleverness. I think I was expecting something that hit harder. Don't get me wrong, I'm a huge fan of well rendered wp...I guess it was an expectations thing. Bar 4: creative and really well schemed if a bit punch light Bar 5: Bam! the mix of elements really came together in this bar to hit completely. Your best in this I think. Bar 6: strong finish. okay setup lead to a strong punch Overall: showcased a lot here. You're def my kind of technician Decent Tilt, but I give the nod to Trizzy and Art |
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
Posted: 24 May 2016 at 2:08pm | |||||||||||||||||||||||
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Alright, lets get it. Hawk:
No connection between setup and punch, which is a shame because because there is a bit of wordplay in the first line. Not sure what you intention was with this bar. 2/5
This was pretty decent in the beginning but fell off towards the end. I didn't see a punch connect while the start of the bar was actually quite promising. Now there must be a personal between Art and Point Blank and shit but it felt a bit weak. 2.5/5
This definitely needed a pause. Like, heavily. Wasted bar. Remember kids, gun bars, gangsta references don't translate well to text! 1/5
Another wasted bar. His pic is Jadakiss, so this bar didn't hurt him in any way, shape or form. 1/5
This was better. I can't fact check so I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. It had a nice little personal touch too. 3/5
I must disagree with Keekz here, even though the bar is not that very good, it's the best one. No connection between setup punch, but the punch (even though a bit of a reach) was pretty well executed. Wordplay is there with a decent nameflip "axe, chopping, tre (tree), author/arthur, illustration". Guess it's personal taste or something. 3.5/5 Axy:
I had to check the other people votes to see if I'm really this stupid that the punch went over my head and I got my boy Keekz with me lol. Droid did get the punch so I guess we both missed the reference. I will, however, give that benefit of the doubt. 3.5/5
Jumped the gun a bit too quick but still decent nonetheless. 3/5
Not too familiar with Shakespearean references, so I'll believe you on what you say in the first line. The second however... It's so weird worded that I just cant... 1.5/5
I liked this. Nice, easy, simple and effective. 4/5
This was a reach if you ask me. Yes there is a scheme, no it did not connect. Shame because you're pretty inventive. 1/5
No connection bro! I'll be honest, I hate the typical Setup > punch but unfortunately it's the most effective way to win battles in a text format. If you don't want to stick to that, don't but the scheme better be real dope. In this case, it isn't. You could've had a killer closer with that last line because it's 1) facts and 2) a dope personal but you failed to deliver. 2.5/5 I wish the both of you spent more time in writing the bars because honest, the ideas and creativity is there. You guys just gotta put it on paper to be real destructive. 30/60 --------------------------- Trizzle fish:
Well, you certainly set the tone immediately. Dope opener and a good punch. 4/5
Meuhh, it did what it has to do but that's it. 3/5
Not a big fan of this one. I mean, I like the teens bar but it isn't that hard hitting or anything. 2.5/5
I dropped the flow at the second line but the wordplay is there, the punch itself (if we take the setup in consideration) didn't really connect for me. You say he's not hell's soldier but would bring him back to hell if the Devil did send him to murk asses. A bit contradicting. Yeah, I see what you tried to do, but didn't translate well. 2/5
I see a pattern now. You didn't spend a lot of time on this verse and it shows in the executions. It isn't bad but it feels like more indirect punches which you can use against every opponent. I felt like this one was the weakest in that regard. 1.5/5
I liked this. Yeah, I did. 3.5/5 Art:
That flow, though! Real solid and dope. 4/5
Pretty solid, I liked the legion of doom reference but a bit on the weak side as a punch itself. 3/5
This was a dope scheme. No real connection in the setup but the punch made up for that. 3.5/5
Kinda of a reach... I didn't really see a punch connect yo. 2/5
Just had to flex, eh? Wordplay check, dope flow check, punchline check. Bodybag? Check! 5/5
Pretty solid finisher. The vet - underdogs to sleep isn't something new but it worked. 3/5 I honestly believe you guys took it a bit slow. I've backtracked some verses from you and you guys can definitely put in the work. As a whole, the verses were enjoyable and did exactly what they had to do. 37/60 MVGT: Trizzle and Art. All round better verse. As stated before, Axe and Hawk got the ideas but gotta work on translating it onto paper. (disclaimer: gave this vote during work so if I messed the count up somewhere, blame the police.)
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AshleyKaos
Standard Member Joined: 11 October 2013 Status: Offline Points: 2511 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 28-63-3 Form: LWLLNQ |
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HAHAHHAHAHH ! EY ! THIS WAS COOL lol
AXY and Hawk: Your guyses punches were almnost hits but almost hits are not what get you wins my friends. i Think that you guys tried and did okay but it could have been better. HAWK: "They are no big guns, watch us bring down their 'reign'(rain) like its bad weather sleeping on me and axy just results into these kickbacks not getting together ^^ This opener i did not really understand it. whats wrong with a kick back and whats a kick back getting ttogether with? there are holes in your concepts that leave the voter, in my case, scratching their heads. this was a missed punch. "You gonna eat a whole clip, open your mouth and let the rocker unload in your face Let the D/A , just state that you fucked with some white cops and they’ll throw out the case" I thinkk this would have been better if the two bars were flipped and the other was the punchline and set up line either way i feel like the basis of your diss was weak here and could have been executed better but i think that the basis of it as a metaphor was actually pretty good. . "And Trizzy, your pic looks like a black gomer pile from full metal jacket With a full of shit G-look and face that says I just took a nasty ass laxative" This was your best bar. Made me LOL in the literal sense good use of humor here. AXY: I think that your structure and your flow has much improved since the last drop that i have seen from you. " How did they become a team, they dissed each other Tre n Arthur so am I to assume that you found out your moms' name was 'Martha'?" ^^ This bar was kind of out there the fuck ? lol how do you know art and who has ever heard that his moms name is Martha ? This concept was kind of stupid. " You see Ar't' ends when 'T'rizzy starts, this team up is in shackle I am cutting through 'Art-tri' like am beefing up a cattle (artery)" I think that your wording choice was poor here and it was badly delivered. I think that you still need to improve there. My fav bar: "If I'll ever fear em that would only be cuz I am homophobic and they are gay This team up is funny cuz last time I checked Art's only OM was 'Fuck Tre'" This was the best punch from the two of your combined. All and all i think you guys had some overall highlights but over all your versus need some work. your delivery and wording needs polishing and your concepts need some more direct agreesive personalneess and to favor multis more in place of a metaphor which can sometimes appear as a filler. TRE and ART: YAHLL'S VERSES WERE DOPE lol TRE i like your style when your dropping. its multi ridden and smooth flowing. "Axe ain't lethal, u can't mirror the image you've made... If this so-called weapons puttin in work, ...must be at minimum wage!"" This was a really good metaphor and was used in a direct punch method which was really good because the metaphor is what put that extra little sting to it. "Listen bro go research my life, same shit these chumps all dumb... So bitch now hold those Cliff notes highly ....then go jump off one!!" This was an LOL and was direct and rhymed well. one of my highlight bars for you. Your style is more metaphor based with little multis in all the right places your concepts are on point and your delivery is polished. what more to say? your drop was dope. ART: THIS SHIT WAS DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOPE LOl You are more of a mUlti batteler as opposed to tre being a metaphor battler and i think that the two of you complemented eachotehr well here with your different styles coming together. "Y’all Need To Improve, Art n Trizz be alpha males, ya get drowned out when ya Speak In The Room Do you find it Easy To Lose? cos I ain’t seen Hawk with the Tag Belt since the Legion Of Doom!" I really like the concept and flow in this one and it made me really lol and was very personal great concept choice. The two metaphors: "We at the Top Bitch, you guys only win 35% of ya battles it’s no surprise you’ve already Lost This With them Soft Hits, watch me prove you a Punk, Rocker, like you really enjoyed a Mosh Pit" "You gon’ Learn Today, Art n Tre stopping all comers, you guys are just the First To Pay Watch your Verse Decay, because the only Hawk above Art is a Bird Of Prey"" Were the hightlights for me. it was two simultaneous 2 hitter quitter type shit like boom boom. excellent metaphoric quality and were very hard hitting. it hink you should have switched these two out with what you chose as your runner up and closer however. Over all i think that you guy's shit was dope and there is not much more to say here. Obviously this was a land slide here. For overall better verses with better concepts, harder punches with a more smoother and elevated style delivery MVGT: ART AND TRE |
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Neek
Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW |
Posted: 30 May 2016 at 1:26am | |||||||||||||||||||||||
Art and Tre by Super KO (4-0)
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