Text Battle Archive: [BL4] LA Tag Title: Battle Royale - Where's Rids?!

Edited by Cuba - 26 July 2017 at 8:33pm

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Neek..

Law supporting thievery? I finally get that crooked moderator shit
forgive cubas line, iLL we're alot alike, you & I - both known for regurgitating scriptz
ironically, you "still ain't shit", but biting wasn't a weird conviction
every audio ive heard of yours - a god damn eyedea rendition

(this was a nice couple of bars here,the personal/punch was very direct and stinging
on contact,clever too towards Scripturez going at him via the edible stealing angle,and
with the inclusion of Eyedea as a copycat scenario,you also got at Law too with him
supporting his actions,a very current angle too,nice start..)

my mirrors reflection, LAW - wantin to make up to bitches like tyler perrys obsession
comfortably in that "coaches section", til I drag em - with that airline carriers discretion
Gladiator edition Joaquin Phoenix, screamin' - "AM I NOT MERCIFUL?!?"
have scotty delete every post ive wrote to ban & dq both of you for "offsite personals"

(liked the actors references here plus they read and fitted in smoothly too,you seem to
adopt a more subtle approach in this half,again here both bars finding their target and
landing via punch/personal,i've read your rhymes (in text form) for awhile now and the
thing that i've noticed is the array of angles you bring,yeah you got punches/personals
the standard element in any battle,but you bring a little etiquette for ppl to view also,i
find your aggression to be very controlled and aimed as well without being over done
or hyped,your punches land with a stinging vibe rather than just a blunt force,nice verse..)


Scotty..

Ya’ll know this dictators above The Law, droppin Scripz that inspire awe
A sheriff and an outlaw, goin up against the man-o-war with a hammer like Thor
Best stay Low Key jumpin in the ring with Sotty, hopin the west can still be won
When the bells gone, ya’ll be on the floor beggin for mercy from the Uneek One

(first time i've read you in action boss and i must type i'm quite impressed,i like the way you layer your punches their subtle and also their in comparisons too,dictator/Law and the double meaning swipe dropping/scripts,and that was just in the opening line,your next line was pretty much in the same vein with the couplets and layering,again all in bar 1 alone nice,in your,following bar you had a more direct approach,in that you had
a self pedestal vibe popping off,solid start and half that..)

No wonder this Wimp’s blue, wearin pajamas the whole day through
B not step to me, caught ya slippin an squashed you and B2
Only time this loosers ill, when he’s down with heat stroke, no joke
The Future has spoke, an like ya wife, this loss is one 30 seconds won’t revoke

(this half had more of a clowning/diss vibe attached,the bananas/Slip and the relation
of bananas wearing pyjamas coupled with bananaman was good,(just as well you
provided a link as Bananaman is a awfully English program,like Danger Mouse),but
then your last bar was definitely on a serious trip,you went from clowning to insult at
the clicking of fingers that was direct and callous in essence,overall a nice verse..)


iLL..

2 pieces of flesh vs cannibals how could you win?
Thought Cuba was ya homie 'til he put you out on a limb
Mouths'll get split, bones broken & bombed dead
Your teams best audios is Scotty's Guidelines & Noms thread

(yep this'll work,your set up bore a relation to the punch in your 1st bar,but it was kind
of awkward and loose,me instead of flesh i would of thought an arm or leg would
have been better as to tie it all in with the limbs in the 2nd line,but that's just me,the next bar was good too with a clowning reference to Scott's stickler attitude/Neek's tracks as such,a first half that had some sprite about it,good couple of bars..

It's said tracks over text & Neek trash at it's best
Where's the outcry of you gettin' out-shined collabin' with Ex
Scoot ain't askin' for stress but you'll drop what we're not feelin'
Logged in to come here & die on accident like Scott Weiland

(nicely directed this half showed you had focus and that you've done the leg work with
Neeks OM's,a good personal/punch although the personal element stood out to me
more than the actual punch itself,

Law..

Posting peoples pictures and names is just Neek rockin' his pasttime
But we're "Shippin' em off" and they'll be leaving his dox for the last time (docks)
^ He'll be screaming in the background, the rope "Please toss it back"
But we know how that ends, ask LP, Neeks adlibs are what lost the match

(i liked your approach to the clowning route here,as with your angles to,had humour
entow,dox/docks and adlibing/Puente,plus in essence they had a factual tone to them
also,your personals stood out more than your punches as such which to most is like
role reversal,a good start with zest..)


Oh... and Here's Scotty.. A boss attack? Nah.. Why did you even come to write?
Everyone knows that your deadweight, it's Cuba and I that really run the site
Together, One dickhead tech guy and a troll trying to play fiddle
Cuba might as well cut the slack, and lined us up against daydizzle

(lmao..this half had me smirking for real,there's no question that you summed them
up well here,more so Scotty,but in truth it hit the spot with Neek also,"deadweight" im
smh whilst smiling here,troll/2nd fiddle,although the Dizzle line was good to close out
on,(i feel he could surprise ppl in text battling though if taken,like here to lightly),this
was a witty piece overall,it flowed well and it was befitting to both,well done..)


Overall good tussle here guys,a good title battle despite its ups and downs,(although
in all honesty more ups),i do have a winner in mind and for me that was S & N,here's
why,firstly they for me came that bit harder and constant overall,props to L & I here
though, but the problem i had with you guys is this,and pls don't take offence!,i just feel
iLL was a little out he's depth here,not really known of late as a battle cat,but is making
big strides in that direction though,he had the necessary categories that battle verses
need,but just seemed lack lustred on the whole,and Law you had your trademark links
stroke humour,i just feel you was loose with the power at which your punches landed.


Vote..Scotty n Neek..peace.

2-1...would be great to get more vote(s) on this before the 72hr window closes

Hint: It's time to vote this one

Typing as I read.
First verse was OK. Nothing exceptional. Some bars stood out, like the Sean Penn and the spat in your face lines. Same with the second verse, but without the standout lines. The hero/zero lines could have been something good, but the setup was drawn out and failed to set up something that wasn't predictable.

The third verse's opening bars were the best lines up to that point. This was pretty one-sided. The rest of the verse failed to match the intensity. The black Chyna line in verse 4 was the standout, but the battle left a lot to be desired.

Gentlemen, I'm disappointed. I know all 4 of you can do better. Because Law and Ill had more standout punches as a group:

Vote: Law and Ill Scrip

If this had been better overall, there would be more votes.

Oh
Well this battle is looking a bit shitty, if someone had one heavy hit it would have seemed out of place...
It is hard to be enthusiastic when good writers don't appear to be trying..
Ruttlefish
1 this was actually quite a good personal attempt
2 prob should have flipped the lines on this bar and re worked a bit, it was a nearly but not quite ..potential
3 you are staying focused and keeping it personal plus the extra work on vocab "translated/interpreter" does not go wasted on me a well thought out bar that just lack the sting to be hard hitting
4 not feeling the closer, you already know you chocked on that! As the great battle writer You can be, I was expecting a little more but overall it did have some highs

Now let's take it to the Puente
1 not really saying much here can't see the punchline beyond a general statement
2 it was personal so that's the right approach but needed extra depth to carry it beyond the played score line concept example I once told dtk when he was 52/53 (he only thinks his lines are cold cos he's always chilling around minus)
3 This was very generic with strange wording, not really getting at your opponents
4 again this is a bit unorthodox and not really hitting....With respect for what you do fam but it's clear text battling is new to you, there is potential though

It seems my partner in rhyme is MIA, hasn't been on here for over a month. Perhaps we could find a replacement before we move on. Any competent battlers out there who wants to seize those belts give me a holler.