Spotlight: Book of Revelation (The Real Four Horsemen)

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    Posted: 25 July 2009 at 4:13pm


Conquest

Clean cut suit with a business like appearance
My swipe card credence gives me the clearance
As I step into the office and flash a false moniker
Security guard watching X Factor on the monitor
No 'excuse me officer', because this fool is docile
Doesn't suspect that there's a virus on my mobile
An algorithm written with precision and vision
About to leave the financial system in derision
Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal
Fight Club the sequel gets meshed with a prequel
A world wide web set, getting ready to capture
Start a revolution much more heavy than Napster
Or that levy disaster, lost within confusion despairing
Beyond the scale of Nick Leeson losing his Barings
With motives colder than the season of winter
The end is coming, without a scream or a whimper...

War

Hit the beepers for panic, herd the Sikhs and Islamic..getting heated and manic,  it's deceit we had planned slick....kids from Eton and Harvard, beaten and starving..feeling cheated by farmers with wheat they had harvest-ed, but the bloodshed bred - many dead....taste the dread with, no electricity, internet connectivity...or propaganda ministry, just tyranny and misery...fresh code of the samurai, best to batter guys...send them swift to Paradise, a world of bad advice...slash and smash a wife, just to haggle life...exchanges, arranged them with strangers...while armies and mafia clash on territory, you'd ask for clemency, trying not to kiss grass in cemeteries...and grasp to memories where cash brought remedy...now it's faceless paper, pieces of plastic, with receipts of lavish - lifestyles gone by, it's bonsai like growth from shallow pots...from plentiful to having not, the damage rots...

Famine

Hunger, deception, it's tumbled...reflection
We stumble and plunder but grumble defection
It's crumbled, disgruntled, we wonder...perplexing
And stunned by ones that run our elections

Shunned, and huddle, shudder...protection
As bugs impugned our struggle's dementia
Drugged and drudged, we hung in inertia
Succumb to the plunge like funds for a murder

As we walk the land with pain in our stomach
Lay blame that'll plummet at faces of puppets
Chambers and summits, delaying the substance
We're praising consumption yet praying for justice

Dumb and flustered, shuttled from fences
Skunk that you suck, it fucks with ya senses
With junk that corrupted, blunted, defenceless
Destructed to dust, brought balance with tempest

Death

Green like the mist that's descended to man
Change, shame it's too late to then give a dam
Had watchdogs for the prevention of scams
Yet lies spreading deeper than the sending of spam
Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed
War sprouts to damage, and ravage like weeds
Famine wiped it out...like a savage's creed
Now death is the cancer to answer the pleas....

These people diseased, believed in Eastern religion
Claiming equal reprieve, relieved with secretive sinning
Prostitution rings and vows of wedding's disbanded
Kids turn to crime and sex as they steady abandoned
Followed by Hades, filling coffins with babies
Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies
Impossibly crazy, as we render you casually
As another victim that witnessed the end of humanity

...Holla at a Scholar...


Edited by Cuba - 25 July 2009 at 4:23pm
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Wow... I dunno where to start.
When you showed me the 1st verse and I predicted a classic I think I hit the nail right on the head, this was fucking insane. Already read the Conquest verse, was dope, nice litle story, great vocab and rhyming. Good way to set off the peice. War had some great multis in there, the way you set it off through me off a little even though you told me thats how you were gonna set it out, I could still read it fine and like the idea behind the lay out. Famine easily had the craziest rhyming, that shit was nuts cause you didn't loose anything in content, just consistantly stayed on point. Then Death, this was probably my favourite verse, the intro 8 lines were great way to set it up and then you added some great lines such as "Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies" was just madness.
 
This has to be one of the best Open Mics I've seen in a long time bar anything from me. You had everything, a great concept, great rhyming and you stayed on point all the way through. Very impressed. Classic in my eyes.
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Yeah, not bad
Не все потеряно пока...
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LOL
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Nah, this was fuckin outrageously good, war was my favourite and death kind of let up on the compact rhyming which was nice, everything else was nigh-on flawless
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This was a great piece man, 4 completely different verses and they all linked together nicely, the Death verses being my favourite. The picture at the start set the scene well (which is cheating LOL). I thought the war verse was dope too. Really good piece Cuba, props!
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was a nice spit... i only skimmed the last parts of it cuz i'm short on time...
I liked the verses but didn't feel they stayed wit the topic...
and in some parts you forced rhymes just to rhyme instead of keepin the content on point...
but besies that it was tight...
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Originally posted by N8Ball N8Ball wrote:

was a nice spit... i only skimmed the last parts of it cuz i'm short on time...
I liked the verses but didn't feel they stayed wit the topic...
and in some parts you forced rhymes just to rhyme instead of keepin the content on point...
but besies that it was tight...
 
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like i said i didn't put much thought into the comprehension of wat i read of it... i got time to do so now
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Aight i strike my last statement...

I liked Famine and Death the most.
They drew a nice picture

"Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed
War sprouts to damage, and ravage like weeds
Famine wiped it out...like a savage's creed
Now death is the cancer to answer the pleas...."

= WOW! :D

but back to the start

For conquest the picture i imagined after reading was more like chaos...

this was tight

"Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal
Fight Club the sequel gets meshed with a prequel"

The beggining and ending of war wasn't bad but the middle was hot

overall nice piece and sorry for not putting more effort in the read earlier

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this was dope.. every part..
ur vocabulary is rediculous my man... .. the foam out the mouth line was a jaw dropper..
 
enjoyed the read very much
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Madness...
 
This drop was creative as fuck and each verse was dope in its own right. One of the illest drops ive read ina while... U bastard.
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Holy shit man, this was a whole new level.. Whoever decides on Classics needs to be chackin' this out..

In all honesty i really don't know where to start.. The second verse was my favorite but they all had there own unique style an' delivery..

Vocab was outrageous.. An' it was even more stupid that you maintained the flow even with some real tounge twisters in there..

Just wowzers..
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^Wtf is "chackin?" lmao...

But yea, Hangin needs to seriously relenquish his lead mod dutys... i say turn them over to neppo, cuz they'res YEARS worth of classic verses AND battles jus wasting away in the archives...
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Originally posted by Fatal Fatal wrote:

But yea, Hangin needs to seriously relenquish his lead mod dutys... i say turn them over to neppo, cuz they'res YEARS worth of classic verses AND battles jus wasting away in the archives...
 
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Originally posted by Fatal Fatal wrote:

^Wtf is "chackin?" lmao...



Lmao.. Checkin'.. It's not that hard to guess!..
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Originally posted by Point Blank Point Blank wrote:

The picture at the start set the scene well (which is cheating LOL)

LOL

I had three versions of the photo...when I'd finished I was looking at them like "which one works best" LOL
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I'll explain a few things as well...

Nick Leeson was the guy that fucked up Barings Bank, it's the largest ever financial crime...I also meant it like "losing his bearings" (I thought that line was crazy when it came to me LOL)

War is written like that coz it lacks order...reflects the chaos (plus listen to Biggie - 'You're Nobody (Till Somebody Kills You)' for the effect I was going for)

The famine was a whole bunch of "uh" rhymes, coz that's kind of like onomatopoeic & is the same sound as like a rumble in your stomach when you hungry...the last line, Famine (the horseman) carries a Balance

Death...one line I thought was smart: 

"Prostitution rings and vows of weddings disbanded"...like, husbands cheated on their wives with hookers...woman are smuggled from Eastern Europe in a "prostitution ring"...but you give your wife a "ring" or a "wedding band" as a seal on your wedding vows, as in....the ring is a symbol that your vows with never be broken, disbanded as in, breaking up the marriage figuratively...but also literally 

Ok, I'm done

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Cuba, you are The Monster. Period, No menstrual.
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