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    Posted: 07 May 2020 at 8:55pm




I feel like…


I still write for the sole purpose
to show vermin that old sermon
where passionate coal burnin'
got the locomotive coach turnin'

take a trip with me..

my pens reprieve
is a synchronized symphony
of mayhem & choas interlinked
yet he,… still beautifully serene

I aint paint the masterpiece

time is of the essence
the ebbs and flows interceptions
interject and mimmic
quintessential temper tantrums

I!.… want it!...now!

so I scribe the moment
while I unwind - and re-load it
the token pistol holstered with a bullet
but im more Lyndon, homie

famous from assassinations

I dont pretend to stunt
got slugs that could squish a bug
my engine run like the Winston Cup
but yall in the dust in the interim

my sprint a rush…

Goodfella's Paulie - no kid could budge
murder in the 1st, with offense to us
passed the test before the pencils up
our energy is *not* for pendulums..


intro the curriculum






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(WOW you preach brother man,get your ass in that pulpit and throw your voice at
us sheep, i see you've gone with the minimalist route with deep undertones, and
the word choices were not only well placed but solid,(i'm trying to avoid typing 'ripe'
as i feel i've over used it's purpose), i loved the the way you split those separate art
forms into sections,seem to give the reader that space and time to contemplate
without a break in flow as per say, real clever to the way you went in to each de-
scription of the arts from like a personal angle/ perspective too,all with a poetic
flair and stance,and the fact the reader could delve at their own pace and leisure
with its Submarine deep contents was truly cool,highly enjoyable read my man,
where the pleasure was totally mine,creative bored Mofo you..peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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Always enjoy your drops neek. Your unique style always paints a vivid picture. Quintessential temper tamptrums, damn.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Concrete Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 May 2020 at 7:51pm
For someone bored this comes off as very playful and elegant, always a treat to read some keypoetry as you bring it here. Enjoyed and would read another.
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love the way this is laid out and written , great read - peace
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