Open Mic: Broken Language

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    Posted: 28 November 2008 at 7:00pm

Thought I'd try something different here, will either go down well or get mad hate

It's like a random twisted version of Smoothe Da Hustler - Broken Language
For those who ain't dropped a diss... this is your Heaven!
 
Fuck intro bars! 
The toilet cleaner, the little boy deciever
The Scrabble game most amazing points achiever
The blatant cheater, the pavement eater
The prank phone call main reciever
The 999 dialler, the rhyme biter
Ya favourite comic book crime fighter
The time reciter, mind depriver
The couch potato, Lazy Boy chair recliner
The hope deflater, the poker player
The hand written suicide note displayer
The day waster, addicted to Space Invaders
The handy man, fix ya fence and gate replacer
The random shit talker, sleep walker
The man who wants to lick ya feet stalker
The freak drawer, diseased pauper
The white outline on the street chalker
The beat hater, the free meat taster
The asthmatic that needs a seat raper
The Checkers player, the record fader
The serial killer, slit ya throat next-door-neighbour
The coffin filler, robbin' dinner
The line up "He did it" man pointin' fingers
The grand winner, genorous man, land giver
The come out the closet boy band singer
Ya dream man, always givin' feedback
The man that always hides behind a Scream mask
The white rapper, "I can type faster"
The Back to the Future 1980's time traveler
The money stacker, the funny cracker
The animated Bugs Bunny catcher
"I bet I can eat my curry faster"
19 year old virgin honey smasher
The mind blower, knife thrower
Twisted Pornographic site owner
The smart "Meaning of Life" knower
The blind folder, the eye opener
The "Will Rap for Food" sign holder
The death wisher, Virginia Tech killer
The neck slitter, the friend binner
The head spinner, Russian Roulette winner
Able bodied long distant sprinter
The cheating Paralympic swimmer
Set lies and traps, my thighs are fat
Askin' "Can I get some large fries with that"
The frequent flier, shirt and tie wearer
The knife barer, the desperate house wife scarer
The pond hopper, shop robber
Concept clocker... bomb shell dropper!


Edited by Calibra - 28 November 2008 at 7:01pm
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Uppin' for some feed.
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Great idea, great execution... Eminem (when he was good) sorta lyricism... I mean it gets samey, but that's kinda the point... bar-for-bar, it's on-point... I like it
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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I like it on the basis that It's something different from the norm., and obviously that was the point as that's what you said you were doing.

Well done, Cal!

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Nice to see you O, thanks for that bro.
 
Matt, pleasure as usual, yeah I heard the song and had never seen stuff like that so thought I'd give it a go.
 
Thanks for the comments lads.
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Different than the usual. Would be interesting to hear it in audio. Some very good phrases here, like "coffin filler" and "'will rap for food' sign holder."

Love it.
Insert something rappy here
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The blind folder, the eye opener
The "Will Rap for Food" sign holder
The death wisher, Virginia Tech killer
The neck slitter
 
Clap vicious, another entertaining read,keep this shit up, man
u already know how i feel about this piece, so i'ma leave it at that ...one
 
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Hadn't heard the track before, quite coolio...has a kinda old school flavour, anyways...
 
LMAO @ The toilet cleaner, the little boy deceiver...what the fuck kinda start is that?!
 
This was at times fucking random (the feet licker stalker or whatever, the fuck?!)...but was actually savage, followed the flow and like Winston said...was on point...and you had some really stylin' parts in this, some of the ideas you same out with were sick and I liked how you had some cultural references in there as well, very intelligant...some funny lines too, like how you mixed it up...
 
Couple of my favourites:
 
The hope deflater, the poker player
The hand written suicide note displayer
The day waster, addicted to Space Invaders
 
Twisted Pornographic site owner
The smart "Meaning of Life" knower
The blind folder, the eye opener
The "Will Rap for Food" sign holder
 
The head spinner, Russian Roulette winner
^^ That was ridic
 
Fresh stuff man...better than some of those classics Scooter has selected for sure (but that aint saying much!!) Wink
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Lmfao! Thanks Cu, I hadn't heard the track till recently, really liked it though. Real old school! Haha
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Easy to read and flow through
Some real nice lines
Some choppy ones, which were just fitting nonsense it seemed
But overall I did enjoy this work
Cool 
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this is mental...loved it all the way through, the suicide note and paralympic lines were the highlights...really impressed by this
Не все потеряно пока...
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lmao @ will rap for food sign holder... that caught me off guard... good shit throughout
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wow yo this is dope!
for real for real, prolly best ive seen in awhile.
Concepts jumpin everywhere, sty;e was sweet and everyline filled with humor.
Good shit dude!
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Cried a tear, Most of the lines were meant for me. The best critic verse
http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/rapper-t-vs-schematic-horrorcore-02_topic45919.html
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Bro. Stop bribing up old shit for no reason. I’ve seen you doing this a lot since you’ve returned.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Slip Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 28 February 2018 at 10:56pm
Maybe some old shit will inspire some new shit activities at a all time low and this is the first time I seen this verse and it's dope as fuk
, just sayin
See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so
warn the mother fucking people
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Just found this absolute banger lying around collecting dust

Calibra gotta be worth a push forward cos anybody read this surely gonna be inspired to write something
LA had some amazing writers over the years

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