Open Mic: Calm before the Storm Ft Sammy

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    Posted: 30 May 2017 at 3:50pm
Dizzle:
Heart rate at sixty
Knees and feet hit the street, Allah please assist me
hands nd elbows twist nd creek towards the middle east
We exist like Cromwell in the city of Drogheda
chanting in Arabic about the alpha nd omega
Smiling nd a half way calmed with Vendetta
An umbrella of bliss, I'm here to rid this world of our enemies
This concert represents seeds of sin, it's their weaponry
These kids pledge allegiance to this western greed
Clemency of the weak isn't the remedy
These kids at eleven bleed nd secrete blasphemy
Capitalism has a grasp on Man City, that's the tragedy
Every man and sleaze grabbing cash with speed
I have these dreams, I'm rapidly becoming a savage with heat
As I'm mixing this potion i believe the potential is explosive
In a devoted hypnosis, my vest is interwoven with omens
As the van opens, my emotions are frozen with psychosis
Nobody notices
It's almost at the end of the show so I set the ball in motion
These kids don't know the supernova that I'm loaded with
I see two kids exposing legs at the entrance
Arianna Grande represents all of those in attendance
I smile, vengeance in my blood while i pose for repentance
Slowly pull the rope, "Allahu AKBAR"
My name is Salman Abedi, My ending is your death sentence
My expense of life will reach afar from Denmark tuh Texas



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A songbird’s note, scribing of white picket fence
An explosion - rippling the surface of the grand River Thame
Sharing shrapnels. Metallic scripture, praise the God of contempt?
No logic. No consent. On behalf of Allah...or so they said…
You have to think, was there ever a moment of regret?
Examining monsters by way of man,
Do I see the flaw in this theory yet?
Deep down there has to be a part of them that reflects
the altruistic dimension that all of us posses
I’m not a religious scholar, nor do i condemn
One’s inner belief, but the dawn has yet to set
Midnight blanketing the land of the Father they covet
Its hard to shine light, when night has its claw around your neck
Pressure inching. Quickly stripped of empathy
Cloth of the man, disrobed revealing a sicker sense of freedom
Next Generation seeking relief, discarding truths or lies
But The black songbird still sings...Connoting unruly ties.


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OK so Dizzle the route you took was an interesting one,due to the recent events in
Manchester City,and you touched upon it here,i also liked the view from the radicals
perspective that you projected also,the thing is you ain't scared to use a little bit of
shock value within your verses to highlight or make a point or to progress a story,
this piece was laced with some factual content which gave it more substance on
the whole,the underlining theme here is greed an excess blended with vengeance i
believe,within in this piece you also had some nice syllable multi's bolstering your
flow,(attendance/repentance) just to hash out one for an example,the general tempo
of this verse alround was good too,I liked your choices of words along with the contents/angles,a solid an enjoyable read for me..


Sammy your offering started with sprite which continued although this verse,it was
also solid in wording as well,you had a certain depth via the imagery provided here,
like the metallic shrapnel,i got visions of their sharing war stories at that point,or
comparing battle scars like some sort of solidarity,then the hit about acting without
Allah's consent just crowned it for me also,you incorporated a reflection scenario
within too,which i thought just ripe,nothing wrong with the layering effect within a
verse,it just adds to a piece alround,and it's an art/gift to have in ones locker so to
speak,it also came off with a poetic vibe/stance entow,this has been a real ripe
read,where the pleasure was mine on reading..

Solid collab guys,plus thought provoking in the process too,you both did real well
here,plus you seem to complement each other well also,ripe work,real ripe..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Dizzle:
This concert represents seeds of sin, it's their weaponry 
These kids pledge allegiance to this western greed
Clemency of the weak isn't the remedy 

As I'm mixing this potion i believe the potential is explosive 
In a devoted hypnosis, my vest is interwoven with omens
As the van opens, my emotions are frozen with psychosis
Nobody notices 
It's almost at the end of the show so I set the ball in motion
These kids don't know the supernova that I'm loaded with



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Sammy:
Sharing shrapnels. Metallic scripture, praise the God of contempt?
No logic. No consent. On behalf of Allah...or so they said…
You have to think, was there ever a moment of regret?
Examining monsters by way of man, 
Do I see the flaw in this theory yet?
Deep down there has to be a part of them that reflects
the altruistic dimension that all of us posses
I’m not a religious scholar, nor do i condemn
One’s inner belief, but the dawn has yet to set

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Above in the quoted section are my favorite parts of the piece. I liked the intro Diz. It shined the light on what this piece was going to be about. Initially I thought that one of you was going to write as the "calm" and the other the "storm". Honestly, I'm glad it didn't come out that way. I liked how Dizzy was set the tone of being the calm nature of the terrorist mixed with the viciousness of the actions with his beliefs. Sammy you were more of a "third party thinker" if you will as you seem to be questioning the actions and trying to cope with the inhumane characteristics he displayed. Especially when you come off not to judge, but still conveying that if it smells, looks and acts a certain way, it usually is. I thought this collab was going to be one thing and ended up being another. Props to both. 
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Diz

I liked how you opened up OM the schemes were quite appealing to my eyes,big ups on tha direction you took and displaying the problem most people find with perception. When the victims think the acts of terror are a result of malice but in fact its a moral superiority the perpetrators think they are helping and you highlighted that very well
Flow was this on point but I liked that opening section the most in regards to that

Sammy

The wording you had here just made this hella sober you chose to rather question the perpetrators my favourite lines the paradox between night and light how one beliefs could bring pain to others when the culprit believed it was righteous that was fire your flow was dope I could establish a really consistent rhythm

This was a really cool colab both of you gave this piece emotion and depth I enjoyed this one good shit yol
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