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 Topic: CFC Quarter Finals: The_Guy vs spume corruptPosted: 13 January 2014 at 9:39pm |
 Quarter Finals - 8 Emcees 7 Bars/14 lines per battler Due Jan 19, 2014 by 11:59 Est Time First to 5 (No 3-0 KO) Crew Votes Allowed Verses are to be sent to me No Free-posting or talking in your battle thread (Verses and Votes ONLY!!) If there is a problem, pm myself or a mod Failure to abide by the rules will result in warning and disqualification! - Graphics made by J-Brenn..
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The Law
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Posted: 19 January 2014 at 2:45pm |
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spume corrupt Ashley's predicting Guy can win but his fan has blundered there cos I'll leave G stuck on that bitches shit like Rihanna's underwear Ask T2; I punch thru half ya crew, dropping these kids cos their hoes go in on Syn like Dahmer; Kill a guy an chop off his Tits for the roast Slashing him the fuck up, trust this bastards getting slaughtered run down an murdered like Lee Rigby; just marching to the quaters G came thru with the weakest shit so I'm easy merking this clown I'll hammer more guy lines into the ground than a circus in town Barely scraped past Zin; for the win, Art; said try stepping ya shit up but yank couldnt drop weight on CFC if it was Celebrity Fit Club Steadily ripped up..... as I rape and break this rapper he got no chance at reaching a semi like he's taken fake viagra This dumb cunt will speak an fail as I feircely defeat the bitch my" make ups" got Guy looking weak an frail like Pearce in Prometheus |
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The Law
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Posted: 19 January 2014 at 2:46pm |
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The_Guy At potlucks people bring their best dishes of food, if you eat too much you throw up(spew/Spu) Spume is only champ by default His only activity is dropping feed on OM Kurupt was a member of Tha Dogg Pound…Mike Vick was sentenced to jail for killing dogs, Spume means to foam South Carolina/SC is a southern state in the US…his initials are SC G-Shock is a brand of watch
Come with something new, cause all these ‘Guy’ nameplays are getting washed up But I cant see Spu spitting anything good, except when I over indulge at a potluck You distraught fuck, It’s like I own the site they way I give him a lyrical assault Parading around like a champ, but we all recall he only won that by default Im abusing adults, any thoughts of him advancing, im stopping abrupt Cause Lyricist Incorporated trying to take over is bout the only thing we’re seeing corrupt Don’t press for luck, your lyrics suck, all your supporters are going on strike Cause the best he’s ever written were reviews for other’s open mic’s He’s losing life, claim he Kurupt then Im Michael Vick in this bout I'm a Vet, my punches’ll leave this boxer visibly spuming from the mouth He got clout? Nah all of his bars are dismal like a desert from drought And SC can never be on top like he was moved to the south Like monopoly, Im collecting once I advance so Spu there aint no blocking me So keep Watch’n me, sending volts through him, now G-Shock’n C |
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INK.
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Posted: 19 January 2014 at 4:59pm |
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Ashley's predicting Guy can win but his fan has blundered there
cos I'll leave G stuck on that bitches shit like Rihanna's underwear this was cool, like the smooth name flip, made it read natural. But u really didn't tie rihana in there too well, could've said a my bitches underwear or something, or atleast tied in rhiana a bit more Ask T2; I punch thru half ya crew, dropping these kids cos their hoes go in on Syn like Dahmer; Kill a guy an chop off his Tits for the roast this wasn't really dissing guy more so titu/tit and yes i see the syn flips..but he ins't syn he is a part of syn. Slashing him the fuck up, trust this bastards getting slaughtered run down an murdered like Lee Rigby; just marching to the quaters this is very generic and indirect it wasn't a very solid one, if it had been i'd been alright with it the generic attack. G came thru with the weakest shit so I'm easy merking this clown I'll hammer more guy lines into the ground than a circus in town lol cool Barely scraped past Zin; for the win, Art; said try stepping ya shit up but yank couldnt drop weight on CFC if it was Celebrity Fit Club it lands, see personal flips, could've been used better. But this hits indeed Steadily ripped up..... as I rape and break this rapper he got no chance at reaching a semi like he's taken fake viagra ehh played tbh..funny, but should've scrapped this one for a more personalized attack brah This dumb cunt will speak an fail as I feircely defeat the bitch my" make ups" got Guy looking weak an frail like Pearce in Prometheus your ideas are nice, you're just not executing it to really hurt as much as it should THE GUY Come with something new, cause all these ‘Guy’ nameplays are getting washed up But I cant see Spu spitting anything good, except when I over indulge at a potluck ehh nothing major it lands more so like a jab. You distraught fuck, It’s like I own the site they way I give him a lyrical assault Parading around like a champ, but we all recall he only won that by default could've flipped this better, it lands again two lil jabs more so than haymakers. Im abusing adults, any thoughts of him advancing, im stopping abrupt Cause Lyricist Incorporated trying to take over is bout the only thing we’re seeing corrupt a little crew jab but unlike spumed u made it more about him with the name flip. Don’t press for luck, your lyrics suck, all your supporters are going on strike Cause the best he’s ever written were reviews for other’s open mic’s ok this was a good one, personal tone used set up to enhance the punch. He’s losing life, claim he Kurupt then Im Michael Vick in this bout I'm a Vet, my punches’ll leave this boxer visibly spuming from the mouth this was poorly set up, your expo's don't do this justice it hurts it. Spumin from the mouth doesn't indicate a Raw Sound. Cuz Corrupt vets, won't let diseased mutts in the dogg pound! something like that works better He got clout? Nah all of his bars are dismal like a desert from drought And SC can never be on top like he was moved to the south cool, smooth and simple. Like monopoly, Im collecting once I advance so Spu there aint no blocking me So keep Watch’n me, sending volts through him, now G-Shock’n C nah this wasn't too good to close one brah so i have the guy winning on a more direct/personal attack. No, personals don't soley win this battle, but its how he worded and attacked using them, that gave him th ewin over spume. Spume came more generic with a few old jokes, no offense a good writer nontheless, but it seems he had a tough time writing a personal attack for the_guy. Its cool to use generics but they have to be dope in order to beat a solid personal attack. i feel guy had the better verse, more consistent lands. Both have some work to do on wording haymakers. But this was a nice bout no doubt nothing but respect guys v/ Guy |
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BiGGz
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Posted: 19 January 2014 at 5:20pm |
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Spume You Came Really Direct, Which Imma Fan Of.
You Had Some Great Concepts, But Your Execution Lacked Sting in Most Places. Your Opener Was Nice Tho', I Think It Tied In Well Together. The Circus in Town Bar Was Solid. That CFC Bar, IMO Goes Hard. Dug The Word Play, Execution and Wording. It Coulda Been Worded Stronger, But The Punch Lands Nice Here. Some More, More Fluent Multies Woulda Strengthened Your Verse Nicely. I Also Really Dug The Concept of Your Close, But Again Feel You Didn't Use All It's Potential. Still a Solid Drop With Some Humor n a Few Solid Punches. The_Guy I Dug Your Schemes Here. Strong Inners. i Feel You Too Left a Few Punches Hanging, Execution Wise. 2nd Bar Had a Nice Personal, But As Aforementioned, It Wasn't Executed As Strongly as Possible. Had a Few Good Crew Jabs in There Too. 4th Bsr is Your Strongest. Well Done. i Dug The Direction of The Spuming From The Mouth Punch, But i Too Feel You Left Alot of That Punch on The Table, Could've Made That a Killer Bar. Dug Your 6th Bar, Flowed Like Water. Nothing Fresh Concept Wise, But Its Well Executed. and Your Closer is Hella Played. But It Flowed Nicely. So Ehhh on That.. MVGT The_Guy Jus Feel He Brought The More Polished Verse to This Battle. Both Left Some Great Concepts Under-Utilized Tho'.. a Rematch Would Be Worth Reading.. Solid Battle Y'all. Keep Up.
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U.N.L.M.
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Posted: 19 January 2014 at 6:58pm |
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Since everyone did bar for bar breakdowns, I feel I may as well continue the trend...
Spume Ashley's predicting Guy can win but his fan has blundered there cos I'll leave G stuck on that bitches shit like Rihanna's underwear Cool play, worked well enough...nice setup to fit the personal into it Ask T2; I punch thru half ya crew, dropping these kids cos their hoes go in on Syn like Dahmer; Kill a guy an chop off his Tits for the roast I liked this one a lot...I think anytime you can throw in a semicolon in a bar and still have it work is impressive haha...Liked the connections syn/guy/tits so it wasn't too directed at the crew or Titu. Slashing him the fuck up, trust this bastards getting slaughtered run down an murdered like Lee Rigby; just marching to the quaters Hmmm, not really feeling this one...maybe if it was a little closer to the actual event it would've been real fresh, but this wasn't working for me...wording/execution was on point though G came thru with the weakest shit so I'm easy merking this clown I'll hammer more guy lines into the ground than a circus in town Nice! Dope concept, liked it Barely scraped past Zin; for the win, Art; said try stepping ya shit up but yank couldnt drop weight on CFC if it was Celebrity Fit Club Works well, liked this bar as well - solid Steadily ripped up..... as I rape and break this rapper he got no chance at reaching a semi like he's taken fake viagra Didn't like this one at all...a complete miss for me This dumb cunt will speak an fail as I feircely defeat the bitch my" make ups" got Guy looking weak an frail like Pearce in Prometheus Such a dope concept...didn't think the wording or execution was quite there though...should've been better IMO The Guy Come with something new, cause all these ‘Guy’ nameplays are getting washed up But I cant see Spu spitting anything good, except when I over indulge at a potluck Wording is really off for me...I think the concept is sound, but the "spew spitting" is forced and weird wording IMO...nice job throwing in the guy nameplays thing in the setup tho You distraught fuck, It’s like I own the site they way I give him a lyrical assault Parading around like a champ, but we all recall he only won that by default Good personal, but tame wording for me...no real venom in it...it's a great personal tho Im abusing adults, any thoughts of him advancing, im stopping abrupt Cause Lyricist Incorporated trying to take over is bout the only thing we’re seeing corrupt haha @ this one...decent bar, liked it quite a bit although the wording is off at the end...should be "the only time we're seeing corrupt" if I had to reword it... Don’t press for luck, your lyrics suck, all your supporters are going on strike Cause the best he’s ever written were reviews for other’s open mic’s Cool personal, probably your best bar He’s losing life, claim he Kurupt then Im Michael Vick in this bout I'm a Vet, my punches’ll leave this boxer visibly spuming from the mouth Good concept, but it doesn't work too well...using "spuming" instead of spume...maybe could've been reworded to work in two different ways as a nameplay of some sorts.. He got clout? Nah all of his bars are dismal like a desert from drought And SC can never be on top like he was moved to the south Decent bar, solid play Like monopoly, Im collecting once I advance so Spu there aint no blocking me So keep Watch’n me, sending volts through him, now G-Shock’n C hmmm, i didn't like this one...I know a couple people have used this concept on you and I'm not a fan of the idea behind this Overall: This is a close one...I thought Spume had some really good bars and really only had 2 or 3 bars I wasn't feeling (fake viagra, to the quarters, and closer)...The rest was pretty good, I felt his verse was more aggressive...The Guy had some good concepts, but I thought a lot of the wording and execution plagued his ideas...His best personal came off a bit tame (winning the finals) and he had a couple bars I was not feeling (closer, spuming, and opener)...I think Spume takes this because the bars that worked were a little stronger than Guys and the verse as a whole felt more attacking and aggressive...decent battle guys... V/Spume |
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JBrenn
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Posted: 20 January 2014 at 7:30am |
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but yank couldnt drop weight on CFC if it was Celebrity Fit Club
^^^ Spumes best line.... honestly it felt like the rest of your verse you attacked other people and not the guy you had a few really good personals but the wording didn't quite connect. some of the Guy concepts you used as wp didn't connect for me but you did bring fire to the 2nd round.. good verse SC! Im abusing adults, any thoughts of him advancing, im stopping abrupt Cause Lyricist Incorporated trying to take over is bout the only thing we’re seeing corrupt ^^^^^^^ hottest bar of the battle IMO GUY- you brought wp to the max here... but your personals killed it... i think a few lines were off with a near rhyme but i caught them and had no problem with the read... soooo i was impressed... again showing out in the tourney i think this was your best verse I've seen to date from you.. good drop. MVGT- The_Guy |
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The Law
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Posted: 20 January 2014 at 1:36pm |
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4-1 guy
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The Law
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Posted: 20 January 2014 at 5:33pm |
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Through further discussion, and fairness among other decisions made. Flames vote in this battle will also be discounted. 3-1 guy
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The Law
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Posted: 21 January 2014 at 7:39am |
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spume corrupt: Cool opener, not a haymaker but the punch and concept works well. Understood all the connections but as a direct punch towards guy, I don't feel it worked as a strong point. The Lee Rigby line didn't have the direct connection for me, it came off as generic and seemed as if it could be used against anyone, IMO. Guylines concept that you brought definitely was dope, had the potential to be a super heavy hitter. You didn't execute that to perfection but either way it was still dope in my eyes. Liked the celebrity fit club line, could have been tied together a bit better, but a good play. The viagra line just wasn't worked for me, the concept didn't do much for the punch itself. Closer was okay, understand that I have seen stronger guy pearce lines against him, this one didn't come off as so. Overall, nice smooth verse.. definitely had it's up and downs here, but it was decently solid.
The_Guy: The name play line worked towards your advantage as I felt spume took a bit of a nameplate route throughout several lines, however, using the simplistic name play int eh second line of the bar contradicts your point, IMO and I didn't think that second part hit too hard. Default line was funny, had some humor to it. An okay personal. I wasn't feeling the "Corrupt" name play about his crew trying to take over. The OM feedback line was a nice personal touch, it works well. Really not feeling that next spumming name play nor do I feel the reference used does it justice at all. You used someone else yahoo' answers to support your name play which I just don't feel works. And with all this name play is contradicting your first line still. More name play, not feeling the SC line either. I felt that could have been worded much much better. Not feeling the closer either. I believe I used a G shock play in one of our battles lol. However, the play you brought here was a bit off here too IMO. MGVT: spume corrupt - Overall, he had the better verse. There isn't much more to say about the reasoning than that. Guy did not show up in this one, IMO. This verse almost seemed rushed to me, as he came with a bunch of lackadaisical name play. Although, spume corrupt verse was up and down at times, he was definitely consistent enough to take my vote in this. Stay up guys.
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The Law
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Posted: 23 January 2014 at 1:56am |
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3-2 Guy
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The Law
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Posted: 23 January 2014 at 6:29pm |
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Come on people quit being lazy.
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INK.
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Posted: 23 January 2014 at 7:00pm |
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Trizzy Tre
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Posted: 23 January 2014 at 9:34pm |
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Spume - I thought you started out slow and really picked it up at the end. In the beginning I was thinking to myself "is he even trying". It all seemed to generic and simple, then once I got into the verse shit started hitting. The 2nd half of the verse for me was solid. The hammer and CFC punches were dope! Plus your closer was a fit ender bar.
Guy - You opened up your verse with a dope bar! The next few after that IMO were hard hitting personals which were worded well and gave it even a more hard hitting feel. Your flow is always smooth and you gave a little more on your concepts and the angles that you took on them. Def had a freshness to the whole verse.
Overall this is a close battle and both had some dope punches and highlights to them. But I gotta go with Guy. He just took this slightly.
Vote - Guy
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The Law
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Posted: 23 January 2014 at 9:50pm |
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Finally another vote.
Appreciate it, trizzy. 4-2 Guy. Keep it moving, If you guys want the next rounds to be up.
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Posted: 24 January 2014 at 6:49am |
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Manc
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Posted: 24 January 2014 at 7:22am |
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Spume - liked the opener. had a bit of sting with the Rihanna multi in there, g string connection n all that jazz. Next bar was ok - liked the Dahmer/chop off tits play. Next bar was an average one for me, nuttin to do with the fact Lee was mentioned - but I see the play there so that one was ok. Liked the next one - good shit. Nice guy lines/circus play there lol. Strengthened with the multi. Next bar was by far your best one I thought. Nice clever name play and that personal shot in there too to give sting to the set-up. Dope bar that one. Decent transition into the next set - and that viagra play hahaha!!! dope!! Lol @ that closer too. Good way to end on a strong bar.
Guy - Original shot at a Spu/Spume nameplay but I wasnt keen on this one bro. Just cuz you started by saying about him using tired nameplays - but then you used the most used nameplay on him ya coulda pulled out. Nice hit in the next bar with a good personal, however, again, its been overused now on him and Goose - seen it a fair few times. Wording coulda been better to make it more appealing too. Next bar too - just felt like it was your wording that took away the sting again bro. lol @ the next bar. Simple, yet affective. Again on the next bar - the hits are almost there, but the wording and lack of strong multis are letting you down ere IMO. Next bar and closer were just above board for me. Again, its them multis. Not sayin they ave to be used all the time, but it just makes bars so much stronger and smoother to read a flow to. Ok, Ive briefly scanned the votes, and I honeslt cant see how this has got to the score it has. Both of these are my boys so aint no favouratism shit ere atall - but I personally thought Spume had a much better verse to go with ere. Both did good - but for me there is a clear winner. MVGT Spume Good luck lads
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The Law
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Posted: 24 January 2014 at 11:58am |
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4-3 guy
keep it moving thanks for voting manc
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J-Scott
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Posted: 24 January 2014 at 2:02pm |
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Spume: this was a decent lil opener.nothing to flashy but a nice jab. Your second bar was pretty nice imo prettycreative and a nice hit.bar 3 was not tthat good kinda fell off here rewording and better execution could be pretty effective. Bar 4 I feel this bar had alot of potential the wording kinda fell off towards the end, really threw the punch off.bar 5 this was decent hit, could have been reworked to get a good sting out of it. Bar 6 played out,could have put a bbetter flip on it.bar 7 this was another pretty creative bar, punch was pretty good and not a bad closer.
Overall this was a pretty decent verse. Had a few lines that fell off due to wording. But some pretty creative ideas for sure. Guy: bar 1 was an ok opener ive seen indulge threw up lines a few times now.bar 2 This was a decent lil personal good strike.bar 3 nice hit good bar here. Flowed nicely good shots at him. Bar 4 wasnt feelin this 1 too much wasnt a very effective punch. Bar 5 the mike vick lines are kinda played out but this was a nice flip on the old concept good hit with the punch. Bar 6 and 7 were nice concepts but the wording forced bar 6 a lil bit to me and in bar 7 the wording on your last line seemed to take away the effectiveness of the punch. Overall a decent verse good personals with some creative flips. I feel some of your lines had mad potential but the wording just hurt the effectiveness of the punch. MVGT: spume, very hard decision both opponents came fairly equal. Guy had some nice personals and imo a better flowing/verse to read. Spume had good opener then fell off but picked up at the end and finished nicely, he had some creative hits that landed pretty big for him, at least enough to take my vote. Good close battle fellas |
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 24 January 2014 at 2:16pm |
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Spume tried with the nameplays and came up a bit short I feel, just a jab here and a jab there and a jab.. wait, yea there was only two.. But he came with stinging wordplay, and got personal enough with it for it to matter. "Barely scraped past Zin; for the win, Art; said try stepping ya shit up but yank couldnt drop weight on CFC if it was Celebrity Fit Club Steadily ripped up..... as I rape and break this rapper he got no chance at reaching a semi like he's taken fake Viagra" I've seen better from spume but raised some eyebrows. Guy can write, his verse was technically-written superior to spumes.. no doubt The punches were clever.. like this one "Come with something new cuz all these guy nameplays are getting washed up. But I cant see spume spitting anything good unless I over indulge at a potluck" ^but it didn't sting! you should have said 'unless HE over indulged at a potluck' and STILL all you're saying is that you cant see him writing anything good.. feel me dude? clever yeah, but not strong enough.. not insulting enough. The rest of the nameplays were the same way, you insulted his crew but didn't say anything about HIM. you used his name, I obviously see that.. but it was irrelevant to him except for the fact he happens to be in LI and you don't like them.. smh There was 1 personal I liked in Guy's verse and it's this "he got clout? naw all of his bars are dismal like a desert from drought.. And SC can never be on top like he was moved to the south" but then again I liked it because im a fan of clever word play, huge on it actually.. so overall i would even say that Guy has the better verse. But spumes hit harder, cmon.. great battle guys, honestly. it was a pleasure to read. spume
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