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    Posted: 06 September 2013 at 8:16pm
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 06 September 2013 at 8:29pm
check, but I request that Klean isnt allowed to vote here as he obviously has a petty grudge against me.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 September 2013 at 1:39am
aight, the people demand personals..

..tellin me to investigate this trash, to get some
but if any effort was invested in Cash, I would demand a refund
you want beef son? give me the grass you smoking
I'll rotate your backbone just to keep your ass from fronting
Cash is stomping? I ain't gonna act a bit intimidated
I'll bring value to this battle, Cash gets LIQUIDATED
a simple fact is implicated, you're a fake ass whore
you're chasing cash.. cause you obviously can't WAGE a war
swiftly break your jaw, it's time to face facts
call me a fucking web-browser, I just erased CACHE


Fronting ass people = Haters

LIQUIDATED
1, pay; change into cash
2. destroy, dissolve

WAGE
1. Payment for labor or services
2. To engage in

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 September 2013 at 12:34pm
Bump for chase
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 September 2013 at 2:03pm
please drop a$ap
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 September 2013 at 6:01pm
Lol damnit I went to bed before you posted, but i'll drop in the next hour. You can decide if you wanna accept the verse... lol stupid 6 hour rule
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 September 2013 at 7:25pm
Alright look...

You a blind man that's bout to get beat, on a paved road to defeat.
I'll catch an ass-ault it's this dumb ass-fault (asphalt), yea I blame it on concrete.
Let me take over this make over, I'll even let you place your scars,
All this effort yet I'm facin' tards, you'd think im givin away xanex the way im wastin' bars!
Your family was too broke to get you circumcised, your life's been wrapped in lies,
I'm slippin...this could've been your big day, but "concrete" can't capitalize.
I'm like the lord of the dark side, you more like princess leah, ima get ya when I see ya,
I think you bit that verse, cuz although it was tight, i didn't see 1 concrete idea!
My flows as tight as a braid, my tongue as sharp as a blade, and you should be afraid,
The irony of your name, cuz you soft as a bitch and you don't ever get laid!

- Asphalt/Concrete should be self explanatory
- Wastin' Barz/ Xanex comes in bars
- concrete's name isn't capitalized
- concrete is hard and you lay concrete, hence "soft as a bitch" "never get laid"

 


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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 September 2013 at 4:56am
uppin votes!!
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 September 2013 at 9:54am
dope verse cash, ass-fault\asphalt was just used by umlv though
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 September 2013 at 10:24pm
Up for legit votes, I will return  the favour regardless of who you vote for
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 September 2013 at 10:49pm
Yes we do demand personals....

Concrete - very impressive verse, sharp writing style, get to the point quickly and deliver witty punches that do a lot of damage to your opponent, Even your second bar which was generic was still nicely written, very cleanly executed. I basically really enjoyed this verse, only thing to say is your rhymes could be a bit more intricate...but, that said, you had a flow that worked really well & excellent rhythm to your verse, so actually, all those things are primary to having more complicated rhymes for the sake of it. Very solid verse, will be difficult to best.

Cash - ooooo, this is an impressive verse as well!! Interesting! Longer line style, so not as crisp as concrete...but that also allowed you to develop some pretty advanced concepts later in your verse. Opener was cool, liked how you weaves it intricately...but I think this lacked impact, the punch was weaker than the wordplay you had going on...next bar was generic, better rhyming that concrete but I thought yours was kind of filler-ish, ended up being an ok jab whereas his generic bar was a sharp jab. Next bar was a lot better, your filler was a bit ehhh, but the actual punch concept was quality, really liked that as a punch...you then stepped it up from this point, again, filler line could've been better...I liked that you were using 'oneupman' style comparison, but that's pretty dated...so good technique, but needed an updated reference...but the punchline was absolutely awesome, like a perfect punch to respond to his verse...really really high quality! Similar criticism on the next filler, "tight as a braid" is a played concept (doesn't hurt you as much because its not a main aspect to your line, but still, you need to be sharper with your imagery...you show you understand the technique, just need to execute it better)...but yeah, the punch for the closer was another dope one

So yeah, you both really impressed me...obviously both know what you're doing & must have a lot of experience. It's actually a tough one to vote. I think Cash had a style I really appreciate, sharp, concise, consistent hits, clever...Cash came back with a wider variety of weapons, his verse had more elements in there (partly a function of having longer lines & therefore more content)...I think he could've been sharper in the way he executed his imagery & wordplay at times...but equally he had the best punch of the battle with that "concrete idea" line

Very tough, I think Cash started weak but really came back into...my instinct would generally to go with concrete because I really liked his approach & style...but ultimately, this is a close battle and I think I should go with who had the most heat, and this time Cash had the best punch of the battle & therefore it tips it slightly in his favour. Sometimes you can say "your inconsistency cost you", but don't think that would be valid in this case

Vote = Cash...great battle though guys
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 September 2013 at 9:38am
Thanks for fully explaining your vote Cuba!! It's always nice to get some valid feedback on what you can work on and do better! Good verse too concrete! I didn't see that line otherwise i definitely wouldn't have put it in my verse lol!!

but thanks again Cuba and uppin' for more votes!!

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 September 2013 at 12:06pm
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 September 2013 at 7:28pm
..tellin me to investigate this trash, to get some
but if any effort was invested in Cash, I would demand a refund

ehhh this coulda been more effective the wording was off to me but it was a decent concept 2/5

you want beef son? give me the grass you smoking
I'll rotate your backbone just to keep your ass from fronting

this was light but it was effective got the job done imo 2/5


Cash is stomping? I ain't gonna act a bit intimidated
I'll bring value to this battle, Cash gets LIQUIDATED

this was a nice nameplay flow was dead on syllable wise good line 3.5/5

a simple fact is implicated, you're a fake ass whore
you're chasing cash.. cause you obviously can't WAGE a war

this was another decent flip not hardhitting but very effective 3/5

swiftly break your jaw, it's time to face facts
call me a fucking web-browser, I just erased CACHE

this was a nice closer best line of yours very good way to end the verse 4/5

overall this was better then ur other battle verses u got the concept of flowing and syllables down keep working on those nameflips r definently heading in the right direction 14/25
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 September 2013 at 7:39pm
You a blind man that's bout to get beat, on a paved road to defeat.
I'll catch an ass-ault it's this dumb ass-fault (asphalt), yea I blame it on concrete.

first off i see u were catching flack for the asphalt line but i dont believe u purposely read sumbodys battle and bit i think when u hear concrete thats one of the first things u wuld think of is asphalt. Now on the other hand learn from that because on here u have to be creative and think outside the box bring new angles to old ideas. as far as this line it wasnt to hardhitting but i see what u were trying to do. 2/5

Let me take over this make over, I'll even let you place your scars,
All this effort yet I'm facin' tards, you'd think im givin away xanex the way im wastin' bars!

this was decent nothing special good use of multis 2/5

Your family was too broke to get you circumcised, your life's been wrapped in lies,
I'm slippin...this could've been your big day, but "concrete" can't capitalize.

another decent line better then your first 2 lines a decent personal 3/5

I'm like the lord of the dark side, you more like princess leah, ima get ya when I see ya,
I think you bit that verse, cuz although it was tight, i didn't see 1 concrete idea!

this was ur best bar i felt this hit harder then all of the other lines first line was filler tho 3.5/5

My flows as tight as a braid, my tongue as sharp as a blade, and you should be afraid,
The irony of your name, cuz you soft as a bitch and you don't ever get laid!

this was a decent concept the line had potential but the way u worded didnt give it any sting we like to stab ppl in the neck and brutalize the opponent 2.5/5

12.5/25 overall this battle was actually a pretty good read and it was close i slept on chase cash but u didnt lay down u brought it and made this battle actually worth breaking down line for line. concrete ur almost there, just work on personals and nameflips u have a lot of potential to be really good on this site. chase cash ur one of the better noobs ive seen on here. work on cutting out the filler in your setup lines. i think ur best bar was prolly the concrete idea line and the capatalize line. crete i liked the cache line cash had slightly better disses overall but i think u edged it out with a better flow and ur haymakers were harder imo. Great battle guys i enjoyed breaking this down concrete gmv
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 September 2013 at 7:57pm
1-1 thanks for votin Zinaii!!
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 16 September 2013 at 5:16am
1-1 Still uppin on votes..
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 September 2013 at 12:58am
1-1 upping
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 22 September 2013 at 7:29am
Can we get some damn votes?? this battle has been open for like a month now lol

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