Text Battle Archive: [Crew] Brotha Goose vs U.N.L.M.

Crew battle between Brotha Goose vs U.N.L.M. for Tha Syndicate and Vis Maior, respectively.

16 lines
2 week deadline
First 5 (3-0 KO)
No crew votes
No flipping/feeding
No show is instant DQ, no trip to NML
Blind Drops - All verses must be PM'd to me

Lets keep the battles clean and limit the bitchin to just the linked thread for the crew battle.

Edited by Scotty32 - 27 February 2014 at 11:57am

UNLM

Goose bringin' Syn down-hill with no punches, only filler  

BG:

With all due respect to the titu/ pb and z/ bliss battles, I have to actually break this one down to decide who won, as this one was actually quite close.

Goose
Opener was ok... A little wordy, but funny, ok hit
Acronym bar was funny too, tho felt like a little bit of a reach... Still hit tho
Wasn't feeling the 3rd bar, idea was there but poorly executed IMO
Mention u maybe a soft jab at best
United Nations bar was another good concept that missed due to poor execution
Wasn't feeling the seasonally sick punch... Tho the setup was good, lol
Ukraine bar was nice, I liked this one
Closer... Ehhh, not good enough to me. It was cool that you incorporated the personal bit, but on a played idea like Chris brown/ Rihanna u have to be way more clever than that, and the flow was off anyways. Was a little funny tho

Overall, had humor and decent interior rhymes, but tended to be too wordy to flow the way I think u intended. A lot of decent concepts, with poor rhymes and execution led to too many soft hits or misses to me. Not bad tho.

Unlm
Opener was nice, good shit
Tax evasion was cool, tho transition was forced... Solid tho
3rd bar had knockout punch potential but I didn't like the setup... Still, great punch
Lay an egg was a solid play, but as the voter above said, flow in the setup mismatched and took away some effectiveness
Avoiding gooses crap seemed forced, in the setup and punch, wasn't a big fan of this 1
Vote for himself was solid
Mad men was also decent, good shit
Closer was poorly executed... The setup was off, tho the punch was decent

Overall, after breaking down the verse noticed more solid hits than I initially read, even tho there was a few setup issues throughout. Good verse.

Unlm had more hard hitting punches and better incorporated plays and personals, therefore

MVGT Unlm

Fuckin Christ this place is slacking hard

Aight
Bro goose poop
Opener- I felt this was a bit forced. Bunch of personals clumped up
But I liked the punch
Bar 2-wasn't feeling this. I hate nameplays like that
Bar 3-this was cool. I think your set up could have been better
Bar 4-stretch as fuck but I like the punch name play here. Shorten ya wording up
Bar5-yup. Liked this allot
Bar 6- nice punch personal here solid hit
Bar 7- this was cool. Nothing to crazy
Closer - like the personal here

Now

That 50 cent dude(unlm)


Opener - this was cool. Wordin on your punch was a bit forced but good personal punch
Bar 2 - this was nice personal punch ! Made me laugh
Bar 3 - nice personal here. Digging up
Work. Like the set and punch were solid
Bar 4 - personals & name play were here but I wasn't feeling this bar
Nothing hard here
Bar 5 - cool concept but to much on your set up
Punch was cool
Bar 6 - liked this. Nice personal punch
Bar 7 - liked this
Closer - this was solid. Didn't think it was to crazy but good shit

Overall- both were solid reads. Bro goose started off a bit choppy then turned it up
As unlm was more consistent and his weaker lines of his verse were better than gooses
Vote unlm


Good read fellas. Stay up and let's get voting back on track

Awe shiit sorry. My vote goes to brotha goose for having the best closer and a bit harder punches.

News flash bitch, i just clicked a .GIF UN equipped with scuba gear lookin sea sick
Who needs a gym, when U's take'n those long swims to Cuba to suck his E-dick
Heres something Kris, ya been here since 2006 move away from the computer fam
UNLM is just an acronym and it stands for Ur Nothing but a Loser Man
Stick to pic's cuz yur scriptures stink try n listen to yourself cuz yur novice son
Except this time start from where you should of begun by pick'n up Self Help Vol. number 1!
Cuz yur skills are none, had to start yur own add campaign just to get sum attention dude
Ya know its true, peope only claim you great when it comes to votes explained the Hall of Fame will never mention U!
This dude is full of it, worse than CNN the way this kids pics pry conversations
You should probably quit, yur involved in everyone's shit more than the United Nations!
UN is never on top, when it comes to leaders yur not even seen on the list
See yur a bitch, seems even yur crew agrees UN couldn't be Seasonlly Sick!
Make you bleed when I spit, im reigning over this game
UN ain't going to slow me a bit like Russians taking over Ukraine!
U can swing all ya want, Goose is still put'n the heat on ya
Kris ain't touch'n this bird, he's only good when he beats on Rhianna

News flash bitch, i just clicked a .GIF UN equipped with scuba gear lookin sea sick
Who needs a gym, when U's take'n those long swims to Cuba to suck his E-dick
gay n weak
Heres something Kris, ya been here since 2006 move away from the computer fam
UNLM is just an acronym and it stands for Ur Nothing but a Loser Man
lmao good 1 here
Stick to pic's cuz yur scriptures stink try n listen to yourself cuz yur novice son
Except this time start from where you should of begun by pick'n up Self Help Vol. number 1!
statement
Cuz yur skills are none, had to start yur own add campaign just to get sum attention dude
Ya know its true, peope only claim you great when it comes to votes explained the Hall of Fame will never mention U!
stretcched as all hell
This dude is full of it, worse than CNN the way this kids pics pry conversations
You should probably quit, yur involved in everyone's shit more than the United Nations!
lol could of been doper
UN is never on top, when it comes to leaders yur not even seen on the list
See yur a bitch, seems even yur crew agrees UN couldn't be Seasonlly Sick!
ok
Make you bleed when I spit, im reigning over this game
UN ain't going to slow me a bit like Russians taking over Ukraine!
ok
U can swing all ya want, Goose is still put'n the heat on ya
Kris ain't touch'n this bird, he's only good when he beats on Rhianna!
good way to end it.


vs

Goose bringin' Syn down-hill with no punches, only filler