Text Battle Archive: (Crewsades) Rutter n Jay vs Ash Kaos n Goryo (2-0)

10 bars a team.

Checking in

I got my verse done haven't heard of jay though.. Wanna extend this til Sunday?

Let's get this going..

Empire.

Gor u tried once but couldn't compete, have u already forgotten it?
I dropped flames n turned you to Ash, now u two compete for bottom bitch

(This was good opener going at both in one bar,the punch wasnt heavy
but it worked,the wordplay tieing them both in was also good,kind of
a complete bar really,it had all the battle category ppl vote on)

Wanna talk a taste of Poison? I inject venom in everything that I touch
This hornet work herself as the queen bee..Bitch it don't even sting when you punch

(yep like this,the punch was nice as to the wordplay,kind of like
your first bar but this was heavier on the whole)

Ash Titu hit u for nudes, truth is if you offered i'd quickly object them,
All this winnings made my dick hard, a glimpse of you n i'd go limp a second

(yeah now this bar was decent,you went the factual route here,but
this bar for me came off as a filler really,plus the end rhyme was
stressed to fit and rhyme,still it had merit)

Haunted Willow had me stumped, 5 stars? but its trash like most ya shit
So blow me bitch cos ya only root to victory was me n Jay ghosting this

(yeah again filler/jab here,not a bad bar by any means,this seemed
more of a diss than an actual punch or personal,but it did have a
little trace of these elements)

..So Gor's the fighter? That's a bigger stretch than making elastic
Only time he getting in that bag practice involves "paper of plastic?"

(I liked the set up,but the 2nd line I didn't,I get the refrence
to he's OM,but the punch was flawed,for me it didn't amount to
much)

I came to cleanse us of the stupid, via stompin on this mans face
Anybody think gorilla can get it too, after i take this dick out for Harambe

(yeah I like this bar gor-illa,had some nice plays within it,i do
get how harambe ties In with gorilla being a type of gorilla,but
it didn't add weight to the punch much,as the "I take this dick
out" threw me some,although this bar was nice,it did have chances
of being Ripe i feel,still good bar here)

You sucka's soft, don't act like you aren't both mugs that Rutters bossed
Truth is Your whole castrate balls, fucking with us'll only produce another loss

(hmm,I get what you was going for here,but the wording was strange,
the word "whole

This a red flag if this ya best team, that or Syn gone n went full dumb
Cos when Rut n Jay Gor Ash it'll line the streets with more blood than a bull run

(Nice bar here with good tie ins,the wordplay here was again good,
i was liking the concept too,solid bar)

All Crewsades u been getting owned, like u got a need to get mastered,
While Syn's Quality gone downloads Empire shown we still ether net gangsters

(although the concept is a tired one,this still had some kind
of freshness to it,plus this was another good bar for wordplay)

The Crew once had Rut Art n Tamfa to name a few w/ memories of winning,
Damn ya used to be deadly Syn, now facing Empire nobody envy's your position

(This bar came off as a filler for me,yeah I'm not in for a histroy
lesson on crews,plus this bar didn't rhyme to well overall,it did
however come off as a diss at best)



Edited by Crimson Juice - 19 September 2016 at 11:50am

This vote has been accepted by a moderator.

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The Syndicate

You faggots can try, actin like your raps are divine, the fact is it's lies
I've only heard of 'Jay-son with a script' when Statham is practicing lines

(This was a decent opener here,good wordplay although
the punch was present,it was on the light side really,
still had weight overall)

Rutter thinks he's a big man, with his frightening midlife crisis trim
The type who goes to college parties but no one knows who invited him

(I liked the attack on he's Tin Tin hair style,and I thought
the punch again was present and decent,the ending was on the
school yard side of things,made the punch lose some weight I
feel)

Stuck in a Rut! Still mad that his dreams are dead, as sad as it seems
Here he's trying to compensate for the popularity he never had as a teen

(Well this bar had the lol factor about it,not a heavy bar as
such,but it did have a giggle factor going for it,i liked it)

Both are lacking, I'm against a fake clone hack of a writer
And a bottom feeding bastard whose best idea was jacked from the cyphers

(Good personal/punch here,aimed well on the whole too,plus i
feel it got at him with some factual content,good bar here)

And fuck Jay, he's irrelevant, he couldn't put a dent in me
Hit so heavily I'll make Jay Zzz like his case of mistaken identity

(Nice punch and personal here,plus the wordplay was also
good,nice hit,I liked the Jay Zzz line,made me smile,I
guess it's mot a new concept,but it was well worked,good
closing bar)

Rut's a bitch, Jay? Just a wannabe poser that can't spit, shit all of LA knew that
Bars so bad the real Jay-Z who can rap preys you do get that old name back

(lol,another witty bar,this was a good shot,and again I guess
the concept has been used,but you've found a formula that's I
feel is working fine)

Rut the cunt who really just wantd to be accepted by all of his peers
Hence the "1" league of queers you bit off Jay Homicide flippin back "2" years

(Nice punch and quite clever in the wordplay here,I also liked the
personal too,this was a creative bar really,like Ash's bar but I
feel the expansion of the event (1-2 league/1-2 cypher) is better
directed)

Pieces of shit like your shift at Roto Rooter, coons with shots that don't hit your rivals
Morons! Your IQs are liable for shooting your own feet for us better than Chris kyle

(yeah that works,not the strongest punch here,however the actual
wordplay was good,set up was dodgy though wasn't feeling this in
parts,still it landed overall)

Yahll a boring duo one big fat failure from two sumo's in the middle of winter
Think Ya flow cold but only make listeners cringe & shiver cause you never deliver

(liked the concept here and the wordplay,the punch wasn't the
greatest though,more of a light jab really,as for the 2nd line
felt like a filler to me)

"Grandeurs'"an Illusion' cuz Empire's begin with skill so your assets are not vital
They are just like your rhymes that have no style, explains how beans stole that Title!!!

(ok good bar on the face of it,the punch was decent and it was
directed well,the wording was nice also,I did expect something
heavier for a closing out bar,but no matter,this will do still)

Overall this was a good battle,some nice wordplay from both
crews,but there is a winner here and that's Empire,here's why,
they did have the harder landing bars overall,plus they just
had the edge in the creativity department also,Syn gave a
good account of themselves I thought,just unlucky that Rut's
and Jay seemed to be on their game today..props to all.

Vote...Empire...peace.

Votes.

Crew votes are allowed but will not be allowed to be decisive to the outcome. I.e. if it finishes 2-1 & both votes for Syn are from Syn then EMPIRE would win...UNLESS both crew votes are marked as EXCELLENT by a member of the staff.

Excellent votes always count.

If this is unclear please PM me & I will give a more detailed breakdown of what constitutes "decisive".

So I said I'd close it in a week & only after 3 votes total minimum. It's 2-0 to Empire, so another vote either way isn't going to make a difference to the outcome (i.e. there's no point in me investing the time to make that 3rd vote myself). So therefore I'm closing it under the time-out rule and awarding the win to Empire.