Open Mic: Dealers! Quick.Ting

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    Posted: 23 May 2019 at 10:06pm
Hi im here to take the drugs your holding onto,
Ur also breaking da law so i dont think its wrong to,
Selling drugs gets you taxed,so hand over that batch,
Selling drugs can be the reason family members get napped,

If i smell cro im over gardens tryna scope it,
And if i spot a grow ill be coming back wid both sticks,
Both sticks be loaded, both sticks explode shit,
So lets not get to banging hand over that grow quick.

Uk Up In Dis Biatchh Alone2Rome
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Well i liked your quick fire rhyming here,and this compared to the last piece i commented
on has substance,not my taste of OM really as it came off as thug,but there's room for it
still in this OM section still,nice quick read..peace.
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You say loads in a short amount of lines
It’s a good concept but you could do more with it....there is so much scope around this subject you could explore
Work on bringing a more developed piece of writing, you def have the potential
With more lines you would be free to work with more of the tools we use in verse and experiment with your development
Good luck and welcome to another day

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