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Sammy
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Posted: 09 December 2020 at 9:32am |
Death of a Salesman By: Sammy Preface Sales a tricky subject, not for the sick or the sluggish, its.. a slick, shifty suggestive patterns; witty prerequisite diatribe of the vilest kind, apply underlying code meta-message and model Milton Erickson mind unfolds.. method of self persuasion to persuade its no mystery Conviction....the art of conning self into victory Chapter 1: Mirroring Start with the basic technique; one must create the rapport mimic their vaguest movement (though the pace is ignored) it plays upon an inner layer as relations are formed so imitation, at basic, help in creating that bond breaking the wall; that nature often built in as verity what calms the senses more...than feel of familiarity? Chapter 2: Embedded Command see if you can catch this crafty masked linguistic pattern: “Mr. Jackson, what we haves a most advance contraption by this....i mean it satisfy a lack of balance for one, it help to analyze and track the results that would otherwise create an even dire default...” didn’t catch it? lets try again... “Mr. Jackson, what we haves a most advance contraption BUY THIS...i mean it satisfy a lack of balance for WANT IT help to analyze and track the results that would otherwise create an even dire default...” subtle slip of the tongue with a drop in tonality can alter sub-messages* effecting new strategies! suggestive descant, listeners subjecting to trance this, my friend, is what we call embedded command Epilogue trick or trade? Sometimes success rest on society’s pawn so conscience are...flipped and twisted into science of con Gone are times of moral compasses and cordial standards as attention span not too far from comfortable habits so as a mean of counter-tactic, sordid acts are preferred i can sense weakness...how? I WAS ONCE WHAT THEY WERE... some say invention is birth from the womb of necessity but every sales made often proved as a death of me... |
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Dntplywelwitothers
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I really like this drop Sammy.
It hits close, you always have direct focus in your writing, I enjoy that. The whole thing was dope but I really liked the last lines in both the preface and chapter one, my fav was the first line in epilogue, the closer was also a favorite. Glad to see you dropping again. |
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"My name has the most shout outs in the history of rap...."
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Sammy
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thanks dpwwo. i got u very shortly
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Concrete
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Nice work here Sammy. Tho not extremely long you fleshed out the topic well here. Conceptually it's dope, exposing these shady tacticts from pov of a salesman worked great. The embedded command segment was dope as you illustraded it so clearly, kinda creepy how they do that shit. You ended it nicely with a more contemplative look, the attenion span bar was cool and legit. Technically it's smooth, slick , etc, only thing I didnt feel was the hyperlinks, as you explained the concepts well enough in your verse. I just prefer verses clean with no links or expos, at any rate it was an entertaining read, props.
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Sammy
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con!! stadilz bro. thanks for the looks, ill return favor very soon
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daydizzle89
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Sammy still kicking it. This was different, in a good way. Conceptually a cool piece. Came off more spoken word. I dig it homie
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