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DressToKill 
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 Topic: DTK - Lost TimePosted: 26 July 2017 at 2:36am |
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Finished this track and would appreciate any feed! https://soundcloud.com/user-206308494/dtk-lost-time |
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AshleyKaos
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Posted: 26 July 2017 at 5:32am |
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Hey DTK This was hella dope fool ... You had emotion behind your voice catchy with that cool absratct type feel definitely did well chanelli g the atmospheric story telling style I think in the middle you waivered s little bit from character but it was barley. Noticable super dope liked this
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DressToKill
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Posted: 26 July 2017 at 11:33am |
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Thanks a lot Ash I really appreciate that, nice to see you around to
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Posted: 26 July 2017 at 8:25pm |
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I will make the same offer that I made before. If you drop me some feed leave a link for one of your pieces you want fed and I'll leave some in depth feed
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Posted: 26 July 2017 at 8:58pm |
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man i love that opener. The flow you chose and delivery was defo a fitting for this. I think you getting better bruh. One thing is that you still sound like you are reading a few lines instead of memorizing them. After each pause there is this pause. its slighty to long but still not bad. Your content was dope in this. Came off underground.
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Posted: 26 July 2017 at 9:19pm |
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Wadup man. Been awhile since iv heard anything from you. Not because you havent been dropping but because i was dormant for soooo long. None the less. I can see a drastic improvment from the last time i was active. Very enjoyable to listen to man for sure!!
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Posted: 27 July 2017 at 1:59pm |
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Thanks both I appreciate the feedback
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Posted: 27 July 2017 at 3:24pm |
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This was nice track DTK.
I dug the emotion in your delivery. You have a good voice on a beat which is definitely a bonus. It's hard to really come by that. I feel like many including myself have to make up for that aspect in other areas. The skit around the 1.40 mark was dope, nice little add on that meshed with the track nice right into the final verse. Lyrics were nice overall as well. Definitely something I can rock with. On the critique, I am not really an audio head and don't know too much about the production and how to improve on things. I did think there was something missing, just a little something to push this from being a 'nice track' to a damn thats a 'dope track' level.
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Posted: 27 July 2017 at 4:23pm |
Thanks Law as per producing I am self taught and learn more every track I do so I'll keep working on it. Btw drop a piece so I can feed it |
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Posted: 28 July 2017 at 8:32pm |
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The tempo, flow and the number of syllables per line makes it sound as if the first verse was already written when you decided to rap it to the beat. Doesn't sound like you wrote it for the beat. In the second verse fits much better. Overall, this was a cool, emotional track that could benefit from a first verse rewrite for flow, and maybe some rehearsal time before recording to time syllable placement and pauses better.
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Insert something rappy here
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Posted: 28 July 2017 at 8:51pm |
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Thanks Jehu and I tried to have a more relaxed storytelling feel in the first verse then stepped up the intensity in the second. After a couple listens I definitely see some spots that could be cleaned up cadence wise though, thanks for the feed
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Posted: 29 July 2017 at 12:03am |
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aye bro this was tight. Only critique from me would be 1. Turn the beat up a tiny bit and slow your flow a little bit on some parts you got a bit ahead of the beat. i love the emotion in this, it's not quite what you would expect from the lyrics but I like how you did it with the aggression it really drives home the emotion of the story. Love the last few bars those were cold. i dig it bro.
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