Open Mic: Falling apart

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   Phased by today’s news ,numb with rage, face and brains , all over the page 
Fallin apart like the state of the city Another school bombing killed a hundred and fiddy
Students and teachers I pity the poor parents putting up with pain tryna pull themselves togethers really a strain 
to get up in the morning when your mourning is a struggle, warning signs are subtle 
Not to fuck with the grief, violence begets violence ,history repeats
Not by choice that’s the devils voice speakin, vengeance in your ear, reasons to reappear 
Sounds good when you hear it up until you get it revenge does nothin ,expect to regret it
Outta my mind when I think about the horrible, things that people do just ain’t normal

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Slip Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 04 June 2013 Location: St Johns. N.L. Status: Offline Points: 1612 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 14-33-0 Form: LLLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Slip Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Falling apart Posted: 01 December 2019 at 7:53pm
	Phased by today’s news ,numb with rage, face and brains , all over the page Fallin apart like the state of the city Another school bombing killed a hundred and fiddy Students and teachers I pity the poor parents putting up with pain tryna pull themselves togethers really a strain to get up in the morning when your mourning is a struggle, warning signs are subtle Not to fuck with the grief, violence begets violence ,history repeats Not by choice that’s the devils voice speakin, vengeance in your ear, reasons to reappear Sounds good when you hear it up until you get it revenge does nothin ,expect to regret it Outta my mind when I think about the horrible, things that people do just ain’t normal
	See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people

Mitch.Wagwaan Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 21 June 2014 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 380 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-5-1 Form: LNLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Mitch.Wagwaan Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 02 December 2019 at 5:08pm
	Opener was real nice bro, thought the morning/mourning play could of been executed better but 'warning signs were subtle' was good. It fell off a little towards the end but it's nice to see you dropping, keep it up!

T3XT M3NAC3 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 19 December 2019 Status: Offline Points: 4	Post Options Post Reply Quote T3XT M3NAC3 Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 19 December 2019 at 9:47pm
	Overall a cool short read here. The flow of this piece sticks out. Content was decent. Nothing explosive but for a short read it come off smooth. Students and teachers I pity the poor parents putting up with pain tryna pull themselves togethers really a strain definitely stood out to me. It kind of feels you just wanted to shake the ink out real quick and drop something short. If correct, then you did that. Stay writing...
	T3XT M3NAC3

Raplex-Dan Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 20 December 2019 Location: South-Africa Status: Offline Points: 5	Post Options Post Reply Quote Raplex-Dan Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 20 December 2019 at 9:03am
	This is really dope man,i liked your opener