Open Mic: Family ain't shit but a title(first post)

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    Posted: 19 February 2020 at 10:57am

My brother from another snitched on me
I was fresh out a bit homie how the fuck you tricked on me
I woulda held the blick for 'em grab the problem solver to fix homie
I admit being a real nigga gets lonely
But I'm live my truth even if I'm homeless or in a prison suit
I was born to get a bitches loot you know what this pimping do
Leaf had me like smokey in the pigeon coop
Cock back the blick and shoot life changes made me a different dude
Since brina died I ain't been the same since
Smoking wet had my brain drenched you can't hang with me I'll leave you lames lynched
Willie lynch jim crom same shit pimp hoe
Stay low get doe y'all know how this shit go
My pops 69 still sniff blows I look like just like him got his big nose
Vice lord crazy but most of my nigs foes I got dead homies I missed bros
Shit bro damn we all we got
Since brina gone and we never could call on pops
I'm sorry bro I was going thru my madness
Super depressed on my sad shit bi-polar as fuck I can flip mad quick
I don't miss nothing cause I never had shit
Designer fashions draped in the finest fabrics
I'm trying to eat what you got inside yo cabinet
I will fire ratchets and quickly exprire a rat bitch
Diamond tester challenge you liars ain't that rich
I don't vibe to wack shit don't smoke don't drink but I pop pills
I was sick of niggas so much I got ill
Fuck cooling out foe I will not chill been crazy since clabon got killed
I used to rob steal and if shit go bad I'm going to back to that
Prison been there done that I ain't going back to that
So its black mask black hat black gloves everything black on black
Black ones black strap if he resist I'ma clap his ass
Lusting on the fattest ass with my old Manish ass
I've walked on water and stand on glass mama didn't raise me right
Early 80s baby hype addicted to it cuz og blazed the pipe
Been hungry as fuck not knowing where I'm lay tonight
Hat to the left all the wrong I did I ain't trying to make it right
Hook or crook if I get booked I hope the judge make it light
Around young heavies now I'm just old and bitter
I have upped the pole on niggas stole on niggas and stole on bitches
I'm coronavirus and full blown aids I tell you there's no one iller....



It's realer!




Edited by Neek - 19 February 2020 at 11:16am
I'm gay and bent over.
What you gonna do about it.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 February 2020 at 11:15am
but do you blick in your chair in the air playing modern warfare? because fuzzy wuzzy was a bear... fuzzy wuzzy had no hair... but he blicked in the air. also...fixed your color bracket. merry xmas and welcome to LA.
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Thanks bro
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So fuzzy wuzzy wasnt fuzzy, was he?
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OK, the good thing here is that it rhymed, as a suggestion try expanding
on your rhyming words with more syllables content within, as this drop
came off as flat on reading, it was also spatial (scatty), it didn't seem to
have any depth as such, and although the title was called family ain't
shit but a title, it was more about you than family via blood and friend-
ships, still it had content that i could relate too still, all in all a decent
1st drop...peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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