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Neek
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Posted: 08 August 2018 at 9:34pm |
this was cool. first joint ive peeped. beat is laid down pretty solid considering the soundfonts.
one thing id recommend off top - when you go rapid fire.. then flow switch to a slower pace.. dont be afraid to pause more. you get this gaps where it feels like your mind says "OH FUCK..I GOTTA RAP NOW" and it comes out "rushed/offbeat".. dont focus mentally too much on "enunciation" either.. just focus on maintaining control of the track.. youll find out when to cut words.. same as "text" eventually you learned when to scale back or add.. right now just focus on control. e everything else will fall into place. good shit tho man. way better than my early recordings. side note.. you dont want it whatever cab that is.. looks like x-men vs street fighter? |
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Neek
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that aint third strike tho... new generation? first impact?
(off topic as fuck and I apologize lol) |
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Lord Puente
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1000x better than before. Good job.
I would add 3-4 layers on the hook, I think it will sound better IMO. |
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Sammy
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yo this is ill bro. honestly, i never knew u did audio. i like how you played with the flow. good stuff
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Mission
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This is pretty dope bro, I like the bounce in the beat. Your flow was pretty consistent throughout. It had a more 80s simplicity to the lyrics besides that really upbeat part, the mixing sounded good to me, crisp vocals and the bass line was nice. I liked the laid back approach and content, made for an easy listen. I think the hook could have used something more, maybe some ad libs just for fun? All in all, this was an enjoyable track bro. Never heard you spit before, but this is nice.
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Dntplywelwitothers
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This is pretty solid, the switch up in the flow is a nice touch. Content is definitely there, nice switch ups in rhyme schemes ...but with that, you gotta be careful not be too complex with your scheme, cause it won't give you enough room to play around with delivery. I also agree, maybe a few pauses and adlibs will add more personality.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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This was ehh for me. I see you playing with flow switches and all and Neek is right about letting the beat breathe a little bit. One thing that I was told is the confidence level on the mic presence has to be there. You can say garbage, (literally look at mumble rappers) but as long as you are giving off that "i believe this shit, it's in my being", the other shit will fall in line. You sound very robotic and uncomfortable. Some people have this naturally and others don't. For me, it was an in-between situation. Just keep grinding, and believe what you're saying with the utmost confidence.
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Crimson Juice
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Well as feedback goes i believe the others pretty much stated what i would
say/type,but i will say this though,i really liked it,the beat started off kind of moody and sombre,then the vocals came in nice and steady too,i liked how they started in a mild fashion, but as the track progressed they became more energetic,enjoyed this one dude,ripe work, well worth the 31/2 minutes or so to listen...peace. |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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I hear you. I’ve been in this exact situation. What we hear as the creator is different then what the listeners do.
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