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D.I.G. Deep
Groupie Joined: 14 April 2007 Location: In side your dome! Status: Offline Points: 95 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-9-0 Form: LLLWLL |
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Posted: 16 May 2007 at 2:27pm |
I came throug the door my on baby on the floor moma´s back from the store she says I should earn more cant take it no more my wages are minimum my wifes lifestyle is premium the press trying to get in to my dome on the street blind assasins rome killing mentalety like homing missiles do cars with crome aint gona be another clone that comes straigth from the bone ima stay in my zone crezy ammo get blown my style has been shone those self sellers leave me alone let the story be told some call it bold but I dont even need to bite like Gold ya feel this like the cold ok now its told my girl is worth more then gold she dosent get sold I love my bitch but she can iritate me likan itch my baby boy Roy just plays with hes toy new tacticks in my life I employ the rap game I play like my boy dose hes toy in the south they call me the rap Osiris coz you cant get away with sqrewing with me in England when they see me they say "yo Jack the Rapper" iven after the show I aint no clapper. |
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D.I.G. Deep
Groupie Joined: 14 April 2007 Location: In side your dome! Status: Offline Points: 95 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-9-0 Form: LLLWLL |
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feed back would be nice
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6 feet deep |
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Sejan
Standard Member Joined: 11 May 2007 Location: SunCity. Status: Offline Points: 103 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-3-0 Form: LWLWL |
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I liked the ideas and the story of this one.
Flow was a bit choppy in my opinion, but I found this lines pretty nice : "my baby boy Roy just plays with hes toy new tacticks in my life I employ" I didnt feel the line with your girl,but overall a nice spit |
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Laady #1.
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Fatal
Superior Member ...Wicked Wit Wordplay... Joined: 08 March 2005 Location: Chicago Status: Offline Points: 6441 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-4-2 Form: WNNWWW |
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One of the wackest peices i have EVER read...wow...
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teken8996
Standard Member Joined: 16 February 2007 Location: CA Status: Offline Points: 390 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-7-2 Form: LLNLLN |
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^hahahah^
umm DIG make ur line longer try to use multies the flow was reaaallllly chopy try and read the tutorials b4 u make some piece |
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-XTC-
Standard Member Joined: 12 November 2006 Location: Brooklyn Status: Offline Points: 1533 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 19-11-4 Form: LLLLLL |
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spoiled milk is better then your peice.. -- Edited by -XTC- - 19 May 2007 at 2:20pm |
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"See-sick'ness" in the mix cause I flow like the ocean.. ..Slick.. |
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Point Blank
Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
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Ouch...Pretty Harsh.
Dont Give Up Man, Everyones Gotta Start Somewhere. This Was Just Randomness. To Make A Decent Verse, You Need To Rap Bout The Same Topic Throughout The Verse To Make It Nice, Otherwise Its A Load Of Random, Meaningless Shit, Like This. I Aint Biggin Meself Up Or Anythin, But Read One Of My Topical Battles, Like With Senor Perfecto, Get Some Ideas! |
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teken8996
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got the rep man u can u good PB
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D.I.G. Deep
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(lol) no body loves me
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6 feet deep |
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teken8996
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hahah its not tat its just we helpin u inprove
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