Open Mic: Jello Structure

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    Posted: 12 June 2007 at 2:59am

Choke and toke till no more cig is left, i got pains in my chest

Or is it just my imagination,

making it like im the best till i test my memory's state of sedidation

I need more medication im too stupid to realize the lies

no matter if its in my face, bringing me to cries and demize

I'll never take in to pressure, holding me from my dreams

The demons in my room on the ceiling, driving me to screams

Its really fuckd up as it all seems to be one lie after another

I thought we was cool dawg is you my brother, I guess not oh well

Im drowning these lyrics in the well, till all is well and fine

I see you steppin on low classes stabbin backs to shine

Then wehn you be falling behind, you stop rapping and whine

Like i had shit to do with you stoppin, my rimes dude they mine,

what is it you coppin?

Uhh first drop Speak your mind let me know what i need to work on....
  
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yo.. that shit was ill muhfucka hahahaha

yo UBH is Outcome.. sup dawg


Edited by Outcome - 12 June 2007 at 3:11am
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Fuckin' chillin on this site  yo get your rep up    chec the battles and openmics and comment a few people  they'll appreciate it
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Sejan Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 12 June 2007 at 2:04pm
Nice free..
some vocabs were pretty nice either..
rhymes were aight in my opinion,
overall a nice one..
though the flow was off sometime IMO..
but still nice..


Edited by Sejan - 12 June 2007 at 2:04pm
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