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    Posted: 30 June 2007 at 2:56pm
is there any crew who would like to have me...

these are some things i wrote resently...

a battle verse against Mr. Blazin:

*last year he wasn’t here and he had to no rep and I’m sayin he still dosent have any rep
**when u drive cattle’s u have hella cows around you

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This was low priority cuz it was easy so I took longer
Ur rhymes so weak an Ethiopian kid looks stronger
Nite!! Wake up I don’t want to kill u when u sleepin
Don’t cry now wait till u reach hell then start weepin
Ur retarded for thinking ur name is ever gonna blast here
UR rep will never change and hasn’t changed since last year*
Ur rhyme scheme I so weak all I need is actual inner force
The only time u lay a person is in textual intercourse
I’m done with this kid he aint going to win this battle
The only time he has a crowd is when he drives cattle**
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This is a verse that i'm improving so i can do an audio...


Intro:
I’m in this world to be the savior of humanity
I’m doing so much it driving me to insanity
I don’t remember the days when truth mattered
I try to change that but I end up where I started
There is so much evil around me I can’t stand it
I just hope to resurrect people who might fight it
Verse1:
Lying awake trying to go to sleep at the night
Too tired from day to day struggles and fights
Thinking of the struggles and all of the beef
How can I escape it when I’m filled with grief
10 days left till I give up and commit suicide
Everyday I’m forced to witnessing genocide
As I think of all this I drift off into a deep sleep
Filled with smoke all I could see was a steep street
As I walk along I see people dead on the ground
There are some people like Hitler getting crowned
I try to close my ears and ignore all their calls
I close my eyes because I see blood on the walls
I slowly stutter through the path thinking how I feel
As I keep walkin I feel a knife on my back heel
I throw the knife and I hear a person moan in agony
I open and see that person was committing a felony
Chorus:
Why are innocent people dead and criminals alive
I’m going to fix that I will kill everybody but five
And I’ll use them to restore all the good back here
I will build a world where there is no hatred or fear
This is my dream and I will reach it or I’ll die
Its either I win or loose there’s no room for a tie
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Tell me if u guys think i can be in ur crew. Thank u


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First Verse Was Nice IMO...Some Good Lines, And Good Use Of Multies. Second Verse Had A Good Topic, But You Need To Work On Your Rhyming. Show Your Worthy Of A Place In Venomous Then Ill Let You In!

Ill Speak On MSN Next Time You On
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any other crew wana take me?
Dynasty?
Asylum?
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we will discuss via msn
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 July 2007 at 12:57am
tek, were full at the moment....sorry bruh
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote teken8996 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 July 2007 at 2:29am
its all good Fatal i got 2 other ppl wantin me..
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