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Cuba
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Posted: 25 July 2009 at 4:13pm |
Conquest Clean cut suit with a business like appearance My swipe card credence gives me the clearance As I step into the office and flash a false moniker Security guard watching X Factor on the monitor No 'excuse me officer', because this fool is docile Doesn't suspect that there's a virus on my mobile An algorithm written with precision and vision About to leave the financial system in derision Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal Fight Club the sequel gets meshed with a prequel A world wide web set, getting ready to capture Start a revolution much more heavy than Napster Or that levy disaster, lost within confusion despairing Beyond the scale of Nick Leeson losing his Barings With motives colder than the season of winter The end is coming, without a scream or a whimper... War Hit the beepers for panic, herd the Sikhs and Islamic..getting heated and manic, it's deceit we had planned slick....kids from Eton and Harvard, beaten and starving..feeling cheated by farmers with wheat they had harvest-ed, but the bloodshed bred - many dead....taste the dread with, no electricity, internet connectivity...or propaganda ministry, just tyranny and misery...fresh code of the samurai, best to batter guys...send them swift to Paradise, a world of bad advice...slash and smash a wife, just to haggle life...exchanges, arranged them with strangers...while armies and mafia clash on territory, you'd ask for clemency, trying not to kiss grass in cemeteries...and grasp to memories where cash brought remedy...now it's faceless paper, pieces of plastic, with receipts of lavish - lifestyles gone by, it's bonsai like growth from shallow pots...from plentiful to having not, the damage rots... Famine Hunger, deception, it's tumbled...reflection We stumble and plunder but grumble defection It's crumbled, disgruntled, we wonder...perplexing And stunned by ones that run our elections Shunned, and huddle, shudder...protection As bugs impugned our struggle's dementia Drugged and drudged, we hung in inertia Succumb to the plunge like funds for a murder As we walk the land with pain in our stomach Lay blame that'll plummet at faces of puppets Chambers and summits, delaying the substance We're praising consumption yet praying for justice Dumb and flustered, shuttled from fences Skunk that you suck, it fucks with ya senses With junk that corrupted, blunted, defenceless Destructed to dust, brought balance with tempest Death Green like the mist that's descended to man Change, shame it's too late to then give a dam Had watchdogs for the prevention of scams Yet lies spreading deeper than the sending of spam Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed War sprouts to damage, and ravage like weeds Famine wiped it out...like a savage's creed Now death is the cancer to answer the pleas.... These people diseased, believed in Eastern religion Claiming equal reprieve, relieved with secretive sinning Prostitution rings and vows of wedding's disbanded Kids turn to crime and sex as they steady abandoned Followed by Hades, filling coffins with babies Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies Impossibly crazy, as we render you casually As another victim that witnessed the end of humanity ...Holla at a Scholar...
Edited by Cuba - 25 July 2009 at 4:23pm |
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Calibra
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Wow... I dunno where to start.
When you showed me the 1st verse and I predicted a classic I think I hit the nail right on the head, this was fucking insane. Already read the Conquest verse, was dope, nice litle story, great vocab and rhyming. Good way to set off the peice. War had some great multis in there, the way you set it off through me off a little even though you told me thats how you were gonna set it out, I could still read it fine and like the idea behind the lay out. Famine easily had the craziest rhyming, that shit was nuts cause you didn't loose anything in content, just consistantly stayed on point. Then Death, this was probably my favourite verse, the intro 8 lines were great way to set it up and then you added some great lines such as "Ideas foam from the mouth like a scholar with rabies" was just madness.
This has to be one of the best Open Mics I've seen in a long time bar anything from me. You had everything, a great concept, great rhyming and you stayed on point all the way through. Very impressed. Classic in my eyes.
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sparta
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Yeah, not bad
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Cuba
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sparta
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Nah, this was fuckin outrageously good, war was my favourite and death kind of let up on the compact rhyming which was nice, everything else was nigh-on flawless
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Point Blank
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This was a great piece man, 4 completely different verses and they all linked together nicely, the Death verses being my favourite. The picture at the start set the scene well (which is cheating ). I thought the war verse was dope too. Really good piece Cuba, props!
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N8Ball
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was a nice spit... i only skimmed the last parts of it cuz i'm short on time...
I liked the verses but didn't feel they stayed wit the topic...
and in some parts you forced rhymes just to rhyme instead of keepin the content on point...
but besies that it was tight...
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Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds
hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
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Calibra
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Really?
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N8Ball
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like i said i didn't put much thought into the comprehension of wat i read of it... i got time to do so now
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Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds
hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
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N8Ball
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Aight i strike my last statement... I liked Famine and Death the most. "Conquest kicked it off, he planted the seed = WOW! :D but back to the start For conquest the picture i imagined after reading was more like chaos... this was tight "Wipe out bank accounts as all created equal The beggining and ending of war wasn't bad but the middle was hot overall nice piece and sorry for not putting more effort in the read earlier |
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Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds
hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
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JoeyNice
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this was dope.. every part..
ur vocabulary is rediculous my man... .. the foam out the mouth line was a jaw dropper..
enjoyed the read very much
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Fatal
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Madness...
This drop was creative as fuck and each verse was dope in its own right. One of the illest drops ive read ina while... U bastard.
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Junior Shade
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Holy shit man, this was a whole new level.. Whoever decides on Classics needs to be chackin' this out..
In all honesty i really don't know where to start.. The second verse was my favorite but they all had there own unique style an' delivery.. Vocab was outrageous.. An' it was even more stupid that you maintained the flow even with some real tounge twisters in there.. Just wowzers.. |
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Fatal
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^Wtf is "chackin?" lmao... But yea, Hangin needs to seriously relenquish his lead mod dutys... i say turn them over to neppo, cuz they'res YEARS worth of classic verses AND battles jus wasting away in the archives... |
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Calibra
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Preach!
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Junior Shade
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Lmao.. Checkin'.. It's not that hard to guess!.. |
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Cuba
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I had three versions of the photo...when I'd finished I was looking at them like "which one works best"
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Cuba
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I'll explain a few things as well...
Nick Leeson was the guy that fucked up Barings Bank, it's the largest ever financial crime...I also meant it like "losing his bearings" (I thought that line was crazy when it came to me ) War is written like that coz it lacks order...reflects the chaos (plus listen to Biggie - 'You're Nobody (Till Somebody Kills You)' for the effect I was going for) The famine was a whole bunch of "uh" rhymes, coz that's kind of like onomatopoeic & is the same sound as like a rumble in your stomach when you hungry...the last line, Famine (the horseman) carries a Balance Death...one line I thought was smart: "Prostitution rings and vows of weddings disbanded"...like, husbands cheated on their wives with hookers...woman are smuggled from Eastern Europe in a "prostitution ring"...but you give your wife a "ring" or a "wedding band" as a seal on your wedding vows, as in....the ring is a symbol that your vows with never be broken, disbanded as in, breaking up the marriage figuratively...but also literally Ok, I'm done *Fades to Black*
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King Jehu
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Cuba, you are The Monster. Period, No menstrual.
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Insert something rappy here
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My God. SLOW CLAP.
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Fear the Bow of the Silent Archer |
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