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Lax
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Posted: 15 September 2011 at 9:56am |
[verse 1]
Honey, your bee's made you to be the sweetest in the hive But that bear you're with, made you sour to keep his evil alive Without you, he's ego deprived He'll act with fake tears just to make you give the sequel a try Never give him a chance and be celibate Zero probability of giving a fuck as an estimate You saw what he did, he turned your heart to sediments When he torched your heart with a warming gift of his mistresses I understand how you feel, and I know how it looks like I know it's going bad if you can only count the good times If you tell him you're leaving him, you got to do it with boots tied And I promise that you'll feel better and call that a goodbye Just take my hand, and I'll show you what a man is I'll be on one knee with roses like it was for practice You say that I'm sweet, here's some candy for those glad lips And place them on mine to join them together like it's our last kiss But it's the beginning of something greater, filled with romance Take pictures of us smiling and giving it to your ex to hold that When the music plays, and when we hold hands I hope that we can stop time all together to have this slow dance So [Chorus] Forget that dude, who has broke your heart He's the reason that the bolt has no sparks So Forget that dude, that had made mistakes Now you see my mug when you see his face I'm just saying you can do better... I'm the exception to the douchebag gender... |
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spume corrupt
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Yeah this wa cute man
Bit slushy but that's cool Yo had some nice rhymes up in here Good ups Lax |
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Manc
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LOL @ spume - a bit slushy hahaha
I kind of agree, but yea, that made it a good read and helped the idea mesh together nicely from line to line. Flowed really well in parts too Lax. Another nice drop kiddo
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Lax
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Lol slushy.
Thanks you two. Now do my a favor and give feedback to the Headlines piece. It's way better than this and NOTB. Gracias :* |
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Young-chukky
Groupie Joined: 26 July 2011 Location: Nigeria Status: Offline Points: 87 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-1-0 Form: L |
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This is dope,really flowed well,so connected to the topic,very nice imagery,good multis,pretty wordplay.
Nice post man,wil really love to see more from you. |
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