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Writeous One 
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 Topic: RamificationsPosted: 28 September 2012 at 3:23pm |
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Bastard just face it, son heading for death blasting my statements
You wanted a problem? Well now here's the ramifications Don't blame the factions just because youre lame at rappin There a science to battling, for you every rebuttal is a CHAIN reaction Don't ever criticise my votes you fucking FAGGOT don't tempt me Your full of sadness and envy because at the votes your ballot is empty... Truth hurts You dumb CUNT, got me vexed an I ain't person step on One punch will put you on the deck and worsen your record... I was there at your funeral, with party poppers when they sendin you off Herse was a hard drive, head stone - here lies RAM - in MEMORY of... Pussy |
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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Writeous One
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Posted: 28 September 2012 at 3:24pm |
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Meant to say ain't a person to step on...
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 28 September 2012 at 7:12pm |
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Prolly shouldn't have let Rams bitching get to ya bruv! Its old hat round these parts
But agree it sucks when people call you out on votes Especially noobs an Ram Anyway this was decent but trust a lot been smacked round his head already. Takes the sting out a bit Miles in front of his best tho so props on that Stay up W one |
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Writeous One
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Posted: 28 September 2012 at 11:27pm |
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Yeh was just a quick thing... Pissed me off a bit tryna belittle my vote
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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DressToKill
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Posted: 28 September 2012 at 11:36pm |
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I like your rhyming style with the nice internals, but I think if you could shorten your lines you'd be able to take your shit to the next level. It was a nice key and def has potential. Good shit.
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The original comeback kid
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Writeous One
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Posted: 28 September 2012 at 11:57pm |
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Thanks bro... Just venting ish, I hear u on the line length... Usually I write as though it would be on a beat but on text sites I usually have longer lines for content
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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Manc
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 12:53am |
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I dont think ur line length is too bad personally. Bitta rewording ere n there every now n then - but Ive been enjoying reading your stuff. Its refreshing when a decent new member comes along, cuz it dunt happen that often.
I liked this tho - it's given me an idea. Watch this space |
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Writeous One
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 1:40am |
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Thanks Manc, I was going to write a 16 or 20 verse but thought he ain't worth it... Got my point across and it's all good
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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J504
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 1:51am |
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Yeah, I thought the line lengths was fine on this too. Like Manc said, a bit of polish would help but still this was good and you was expressing yourself and got your point across.
Nice lil drop right here, fam.
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 2:20am |
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It's an alright piece, I'm not a big fan of long lines, but it's not really a problem. Just a personal prefrence for some people, so don't take it to heart. It's kinda like beating a dead horse though, isn't a real reason to jump in on dude since he's now on that Swayze tip -shurg-
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Rameez
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 2:45am |
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played out lines
wack jokes wack verse no wonder your vote was wack too.. fuckin herb.. |
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 3:00am |
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Hahahaha you still here? Don't let the barn door hit your oinky ass on the way out man
You must be fucking stupid mate... There's lots of good writers, with good battle records, giving you critic and you'd rather believe that instead of YOU being wrong EVERYONE else is wrong and you're that good people hate on you. You really are a fucking idiot Ram, go suck a curly pig dick |
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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Rameez
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 3:30am |
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why would I suck a curly pig duck, I don't want to hear your favourite dish that your mom cooks everyday.. I rather feed that shit to my dogs...
u can hate me if u like that's the best u can do loser.. go wipe of yo oinky shit ya dumb pig..
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Writeous One
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 3:37am |
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Your comebacks are as creative as your battle verses so ain't really hitting hard...
And your come back after saying you was going to leave is unwelcome... And your mums got a cumback |
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cant fuck with my click, you no adam sandlers, we catching more cases than baggage handlers...
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Rameez
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 3:44am |
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what? your mom got raped? sorry she asked for it..
unwelcome? do I care what a pig has to say? naaaa u can kiss my ass.. faggot |
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Writeous One
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 4:09am |
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This is fucking school ground shit lol
Your mum has no hands because she got caught stealing an elephants dick for a dildo... Now she just gives wrist jobs for rupees, shits bad son |
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Posted: 29 September 2012 at 11:55am |
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You‘re late...and keep my name out of these pointless Ram disses
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