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The Law
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Cuba
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The Law
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- His name is Owen
- His original name on here was IceC
The whole time you dick rode me, never meant we wouldn't be squaring it off So I must be 'castro', the way "Cuba" was acting so scared of The Law And the only way he has a chance to win a battle is flipping dudes in his keys But I'll wear em out until cuba's "Flip-Flops are buried" and I ain't talking shoes at the beach This feeding issue is the only way your texts can win with quick plays He's Bitchmade! More 'Flipped-out' than a van of angry mexicans with switchblades and Since He got crushed by dress and started whining through the views of a cradle The Champ!!.. he' used to be labeled, so he tried to "team up" and move through the tables But "Point Blank" still proved to be "FATAL"!!(his old tag partner) I came to knock him out and I'll put him in a Coma to prove it Leave "Cube more puzzled" than Soma and Rubik's I got the "punches" that would Seize your lines and induce sleep From so many "hits" Cuba's 'mind' will end up like Bruce Lee's (avy) He Bitched and moaned when losing his title.. Yet, was ignoring his reply and shit plays Then won't battle unless he has the advantage, pst… Your just a glorified Big Game It's a Big Shame, That you have no originality. We all have seen this bastard tactics and "Cube's would never stop flipping" unless it's Gymnastics Practice
But I'm still gonna 'light ya bars up' like pool hall tops and at the "breaking point' we still wouldn't see Cu Balls' Drop (Cue) You came with no 'pressure' so I see what this Goofball Rocks Couldn't "pack anything behind his punches" at a U-Haul Shop "Flip" the switch…. Cube.. Gonna Freeze up in his syllable game As he' "Bytes the Dust" and gets stuck in this 'Digital Frame' (Bites) It's the winter time, so with colds hands he couldn't throw any Visual Flames Cause I came to "Ice C" quicker than his Original Name I'm Ruthless with a Rude Temper, I'm a Cube Bender That will leave "-O- In A Wake" with Mourning Crew Members (Owen, Morning) Cause from the start of this verse, within seconds I was wrecking this felon and left "Cu dead in the collision" like Desmond Llewelyn (Q) |
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Cuba
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I throw cancer at vogue chancers, you've no answer to generate
And trust, this ain't the only time Law fails to hold down a Renegade As for Vis? That bromance'll never fade so I smash an imposter So when we're saying Fuck Off Law, son, we ain't ranking ya roster And while we're on that team shit, Law's already been a target of mine... Yeah, he got knocked the fuck out last time we were Partners in Rhyme Then Guy laid you out!! I ain't even gotta tarnish this failure Your fortune's ran out...not even the Art's gonna save ya!! You've built ya rep off cheap wins against pathetic opponents So I guess this here is a shot of "taste your own medicine" dosage And I ain't take forever to post it!! 30 lines in 10 days?! Rustling his act, the way I out-law like the guy is Ben Wade* So he'll diss me for quick plays?! He's obviously stupid... Reading that bullshit I don't know why we bothered to do this... I'm robbing him ruthless, smashing his slack imitation Till he's "what was I thinking" like that Clash for the Cash invitation* For years I been brutual, bombing guys senseless So I'll take 100 from the Law like a quadruple homicide sentence The way I bridge tracks is dangerous, my mechanisms squash fakes You about to 'dropped for ya fourth loss' for stepping in the wrong place This ain't Braveheart to Bruce, flex my weapons when I'm thrashing So the Law done fucked up when faced with legendary assassins* Need I resort to thug shit, screaming "I'LL CON-TORT THE DUMB BITCH!!" Coz the Law ain't been appealing since the fucking courts of justice!! I don't doubt I'm superior since I've spoken my shots While you've been in two minds like your last open mic drop Flex a wrecking ball of premise, end a fraud with relish The way I'm laying down the law harder than a senator or sheriff I'm a fucking firing squad, with a line I'm expiring them all So with one sentence my nameflips send this guy to the WALL* Expos... 1. 3:10 to Yuma is a film starring Russell (rustle) Crowe as outlaw Ben Wade...he dropped 10 days after the call out, I replied in 3 days. 3:10. 2.Law invited me via PM to the Clash for the Cash tourney where he's putting up $100 as prize money. One of limited number of invite spots 3. He had a Bruce Lee punch about my avy, but that isn't Bruce Lee...it's from the film called Legendary Assassin (actually says that on the graphic in my avy) 4. If you "flip" his name & give him an L (I.e. A loss) then it spells wall...firing squads line you up against a wall, it's a well known expression. Letting the other wordplays lie... Edited by Point Blank - 27 December 2013 at 2:47pm |
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The Law
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dope shit cuba..
Vote it up..
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AshleyKaos
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if I vote on this ... am I experienced enough for my vote to count in this cause I don't want to write some long as expo ( that's what would be required here ) and then have iit not count for some reason. let me know
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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fuckoff
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brutal battle. props to both. best on the fields atm
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AshleyKaos
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Ok so since i havent gotten a response im gunna vote so it better count lol
first off i wanna say this was a fucking sick battle from both sides and it really is the best out on the board right now. its good to see. this is a super super hard battle ... like super im going to abbreviate instead of actually. quoting cuz this would take hours lol Arthur- excellent choice for an opening bar . you used name play in a positive way towards yourself without it turning into a self hype bar , while still hitting a hard punch on your opponent , with a good concept the second bar i got a chuckle out of was a good punch/metaphor wwordded well with a good base concept. the following bar i didnt really get the punchline but i havent been on this site very long so i think it jfmight be reffering to a controversy that went down before i. became a member ? idk but yea the next bar The next bar i would say is the same thing as the previous bar , but i kind of get it because i know who point blank is but my interpretation is to vague to tell if it was a good concept or not but it flowed well I think the brucelee concept used in that little section was a good concept but it got turned around on u in cubas reply without cuba actually using a flip by his avy actually not really being brucelee. but it was still a good section and was still a good concept The beggining of the second to last stanza was an "oooool" punch for me haha i was just like dam he clowned two fool with a hard ass punch and good concept in one bar . 5 starts for that one. and for the remaining lines of that stanza it was probably my favorite section of your verse most definatley. i dont like the direction you chose to take with that flipping part in the end i mean it had good content and good punches and what not but the way u did kind of threw me off when reading it through overvall i think you were a bit more creatiive with your structure and concept/metaphor use then cuba and overall i think it was an excellent piece good job law Cuba - was also and exxcellent opener . you used a more of a storytelling type of style / concept with mini sub conceppts in two halves of the whole piece to me if that makes sense. excellent verse im not going to break it down bar by bar because my fingers hurt and i have to go go work but u had alot of really hard hitting pubches tha were delievered in a more direct way with complex vocab and technique instwad of the style law used with metaphors and stuff u had some too but law had more of them . i think u culd have been A lil more creative wiyh your structure but over all excellent job as well. basing my vote on the fact that i think law was just a bit more creative and i liked the way he executed thr style more MVGT-LAW |
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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AshleyKaos
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I dont kno why i put arthur i meant to put law ! ooops im tired lol
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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Arthur
Veteran Joined: 23 August 2013 Location: London Status: Offline Points: 2310 Text Rank: #5 Stats: 36-7-0 Form: WWWWLL |
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Ok I've numbered your bars to make it easier for me to follow as its a long battle.
1. The whole time you dick rode me, never meant we wouldn't be squaring it off So I must be 'castro', the way "Cuba" was acting so scared of The Law 2. And the only way he has a chance to win a battle is flipping dudes in his keys But I'll wear em out until cuba's "Flip-Flops are buried" and I ain't talking shoes at the beach 3. This feeding issue is the only way your texts can win with quick plays He's Bitchmade! More 'Flipped-out' than a van of angry mexicans with switchblades 4. and Since He got crushed by dress and started whining through the views of a cradle The Champ!!.. he' used to be labeled, so he tried to "team up" and move through the tables But "Point Blank" still proved to be "FATAL"!!(his old tag partner) 5. I came to knock him out and I'll put him in a Coma to prove it Leave "Cube more puzzled" than Soma and Rubik's 6. I got the "punches" that would Seize your lines and induce sleep From so many "hits" Cuba's 'mind' will end up like Bruce Lee's (avy) 7. He Bitched and moaned when losing his title.. Yet, was ignoring his reply and shit plays Then won't battle unless he has the advantage, pst… Your just a glorified Big Game 8. It's a Big Shame, That you have no originality. We all have seen this bastard tactics and "Cube's would never stop flipping" unless it's Gymnastics Practice 9. But I'm still gonna 'light ya bars up' like pool hall tops and at the "breaking point' we still wouldn't see Cu Balls' Drop (Cue) 10.You came with no 'pressure' so I see what this Goofball Rocks Couldn't "pack anything behind his punches" at a U-Haul Shop "Flip" the switch…. 11. Cube.. Gonna Freeze up in his syllable game As he' "Bytes the Dust" and gets stuck in this 'Digital Frame' (Bites) 12. It's the winter time, so with colds hands he couldn't throw any Visual Flames Cause I came to "Ice C" quicker than his Original Name 13. I'm Ruthless with a Rude Temper, I'm a Cube Bender That will leave "-O- In A Wake" with Mourning Crew Members (Owen, Morning) 14. Cause from the start of this verse, within seconds I was wrecking this felon and left "Cu dead in the collision" like Desmond Llewelyn (Q) Right here we go then, opener was nice its an obvious reference to castro but you worked it well with the use of your name, so the bar only works in a battle between you and cuba which is nice and original, good start. Second bar was kool, the flip flop thing was very nice, not seen that used before and it worked well. Haha the 3rd bar was kool, the switchblade play was nice, again getting at him using flips in battles, i hope by the end of this verse you haven't worn out that personal though as it would take away from these bars. Ooo man that fourth bar is aggressive as fuck! nice personals there dude liked it. I think the Rubik's play has just about run its course, i used one in that 1-2 punch thread. And you didn't do anything amazing with it here tbh. Wasn't feelin the Bruce Lee bar dude, just because I don't think that's Bruce Lee, it needs to have been worked into something better for me. The seventh bar was ok, the glorified big game line was kinda funny and the set up again was an aggressive way to deliver personals, kool bar. Another flipping personal bar, but i think you got away with it because it was quite creative, nice punch. Its an ok personal to use but i mean flipping IS allowed, i know i don't like it but it is allowed, its not like biting or recycling, i mean its an ok personal but 3 bars on it might be a stretch, i duno just my opinion. Bar nine was nice, you stepped it back up with that bar, i liked it, good concept. Its a shame i haven't read many of cuba's battles because this concept has probably been used before, but i don't know. U-haul bar was ok, but felt a little generic to me, you could say that to anybody really, ok punch but not personal so takes away from it. Bites the dust bar was kinda meh, didn't strike me as being amazing, kinda just read it and moved on to the next bar. Liked the Ice C bar, that was nice, set up was fillerish but the punch was delivered well. .......pause....... OHH SHIT! Law that second to last bar was FIRE the wordplay works and that's so creative man, hard personal and greatly worked, that might just be your best bar right there! Last bar was kool, liked the way it flowed and was another decent nameplay. Overall: it was a nice verse. The flipping personals, while they were pretty creative weren't super hard. That O in a wake bar was sick though and you had some other really nice bars. 1. I throw cancer at vogue chancers, you've no answer to generate And trust, this ain't the only time Law fails to hold down a Renegade 2. As for Vis? That bromance'll never fade so I smash an imposter So when we're saying Fuck Off Law, son, we ain't ranking ya roster 3. And while we're on that team shit, Law's already been a target of mine... Yeah, he got knocked the fuck out last time we were Partners in Rhyme 4. Then Guy laid you out!! I ain't even gotta tarnish this failure Your fortune's ran out...not even the Art's gonna save ya!! 5.You've built ya rep off cheap wins against pathetic opponents So I guess this here is a shot of "taste your own medicine" dosage 6. And I ain't take forever to post it!! 30 lines in 10 days?! Rustling his act, the way I out-law like the guy is Ben Wade* 7. So he'll diss me for quick plays?! He's obviously stupid... Reading that bullshit I don't know why we bothered to do this... 8. I'm robbing him ruthless, smashing his slack imitation Till he's "what was I thinking" like that Clash for the Cash invitation* 9. For years I been brutual, bombing guys senseless So I'll take 100 from the Law like a quadruple homicide sentence 10. The way I bridge tracks is dangerous, my mechanisms squash fakes You about to 'dropped for ya fourth loss' for stepping in the wrong place 11. This ain't Braveheart to Bruce, flex my weapons when I'm thrashing So the Law done fucked up when faced with legendary assassins* 12. Need I resort to thug shit, screaming "I'LL CON-TORT THE DUMB BITCH!!" Coz the Law ain't been appealing since the fucking courts of justice!! 13. I don't doubt I'm superior since I've spoken my shots While you've been in two minds like your last open mic drop 14. Flex a wrecking ball of premise, end a fraud with relish The way I'm laying down the law harder than a senator or sheriff 15. I'm a fucking firing squad, with a line I'm expiring them all So with one sentence my nameflips send this guy to the WALL* Right, here we go again. I really liked the opener, it was personal for this battle as his the law and well you're a renegade, nice opener and i liked the multis in the first line too. Ooo that roster bar was nice, i liked it, a lot of people use fuckoff's name when battling people from vis maior as its a good name to use and work a personal around and you did it really well. Ooo bar 3 was nice, that personal shot was aggressive, i like it, nice multis too. Lol hey that 4th bar was rather uncalled for lol, nah I'm kidding in fact it paints me in a good way, nice shot though, you clearly did some research. Oh snap that fifth bar was real nice i lol'd at the dougy battle link, and the way you turned it into saying he's a weak opponent for you in the punch was dope. The out-law bar was ok, its a pretty common nameplay and you didn't really do anything amazing with it, its ok though. The seventh bar was a bit tame man, it wasn't much of a punch and wasn't that aggressive the way the personal was delivered, disappointing. The clash for cash line again was a bit tame, i just feel as though you could have done a lot more with the personal and been a bit more creative with it. Oh snapppp yes that's what I'm talking about i loved the homicide sentence punch, that's a much better way of using the clash for cash thing, the previous bar could have got scrapped, but it kinda does lead up to this one in a way. I don't really get the dropped for ya fourth loss bar as he's lost twice and the link doesn't work, even if it did make sense I'm not sure its that hard hitting anyway. The assassins bar is nice, its rare i like flips but that one was pretty creative and it makes one of his bars lose heat, but then i think if he could write another verse he'd flip yours and point out things that ain't altogether accurate with your verse, but he can't do that because he dropped first, so sorry, don't like the bar because its a flip, even if it is somewhat creative and the flip works. The courts of justice bar was nice it was pretty straight forward and a tad basic but its still relevant and it landed. The two minds bar was kool, again though its nothing that made me want to phone home, it does work. Again with the sheriff and senator bar its just another way to do a punch around the law and the justice system, obviously you can't call punches around his name played out but something a bit more aggressive or creative would hit harder at this stage of your verse. The last bar was better, a bit more of a creative nameplay and it was more aggressive, kool closer after a few tame bars. Overall: it started a lot better than it finished, you had some sick bars and punches but also a couple of tame ones. Verdict: i feel like it should have been less bars, if it was 10 bars and you could both scrap a few and the battle would be flawless. So then, a decision, its so close, but I'm not writing all of this and giving a tie. When i go over the points i made i think i have to give it to The Law, not for consistency because you both maintained the consistency but also had dips. I chose him because i felt like he had the best bar (the morning/mourning one, though cuba's homicide bar was a close close second) and because at times i felt he was ever so slightly more creative. I have to say though, great fucking battle. Winner: The Law |
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The Law
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Thanks for the votes.
I appreciate them.
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Exoduzt
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what FO said...best battle in the field rite now and best one i have
seen in a long time. I also want to say im glad this is a longer battle
and not the usual 5 bars etc etc. This is how battles are supposed to
be so you can really go in at your opponent.
Law: Your opener was dope it's just I've seen the Castro punch done so so many times it just seemed a bit repetitive to me even tho you had your own spin on it. I felt like it was a predictable punch that was bound to happen. The flippin the keys line was nice. flowed well too. I liked that flipped out switch blade shit too. Now for the rest of your first section I thought you could have polished the flow a bit but it was a personal punch. nice to see you did some research and it landed pretty nicely. Your next little section was decent. I did expect a little more with the rubik's play. A little more personal would of been better. I personally always look for personals thats just me. Your next bar to start that section off was awesome I thought. It was personal and comical with the Big Game line. Well done. I also enjoyed the cue ball play. very creative. It really shows your writing skills. That Ice E line again with the personals. thats what wins battle. Very smooth flow to add to it too I must say. your closer was nice too. I wish it was a personal punch but nonetheless it was creative and showed your ability. Overall this was a dope fucking diss. Cuba: Your opening was solid. Flow was very smooth because of the internals. Creative opening. Not personal but very well written. Your next bar I really enjoyed. fuckoff law we aint rankin ya roster i thought was pretty dope. Loved the partners in rhyme line. Nice set up flowed great and liked the fact you got personal. and your next bar with the guy and art...very strong personal punch. good shit rite there. Now your pathetic opponents bar was nice as hell concept wise I just would of worded it better to get that flow a bit smoother. lol @ the clash for the cash invitation line. I was wondering when that line was coming. very nice in my book. TBH I wasnt feeling that homicide sentence line. just didnt land for me. I also liked how you brought the open mic drop and that assasin line I thought was dope to. Flow was a bit off but still nice. Your closer was nice but i would have liked to see it end in a personal. damn awesome battle and I have the utmost respect for both of your writing abilities and this battle. MVGT Cuba....TBH it was so fuckin close I just enjoyed his verse a bit more....thanks to both of ya for an entertaining battle....i want to see a rematch in the near future |
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Cuba
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Fucks sakes, the one time I drop a punch that relies exclusively on the link and the link doesn't work...
http://news.stv.tv/east-central/272353-worker-who-died-after-falling-from-the-forth-rail-bridge-should-never-have-been-on-walkway/ Could a mod change the 'forth loss' link to the one above? Should work now... & I'm including the tag loss as the third defeat, just to be clear... |
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The Law
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That makes this 2-1.
Bump for the votes and for a mod to fix his link.
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Point Blank
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Fixed your link Cuba. Dope battle
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The Law
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ight cool.
2-1. Get the votes rolling.
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The Law
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They are sleeping on us cube.
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Zinaii
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Ima drop a vote im on a touchscreen laptops broke it wont b as long as the othee votes but ill try to get my point across
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Rameez
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THE LAW
His name is Owen- His original name on here was IceC The whole time you dick rode me, never meant we wouldn't be squaring it off So I must be 'castro', the way "Cuba" was acting so scared of The Law\ the castro punches been played out.. but still a bit of new concept here.. it was cool play And the only way he has a chance to win a battle is flipping dudes in his keys But I'll wear em out until cuba's "Flip-Flops are buried" and I ain't talking shoes at the beach I see the wordplay here.. the only problem was the personal wasn't executed properly, so punch didn't land for me This feeding issue is the only way your texts can win with quick plays He's Bitchmade! More 'Flipped-out' than a van of angry mexicans with switchblades eh too fillerish and Since He got crushed by dress and started whining through the views of a cradle The Champ!!.. he' used to be labeled, so he tried to "team up" and move through the tables But "Point Blank" still proved to be "FATAL"!!(his old tag partner) its like you're dissing PB more than Cuba.. weak punch... I came to knock him out and I'll put him in a Coma to prove it Leave "Cube more puzzled" than Soma and Rubik's played I got the "punches" that would Seize your lines and induce sleep From so many "hits" Cuba's 'mind' will end up like Bruce Lee's (avy) that avy isn't Bruce lee it's from legendary assassin movie. He Bitched and moaned when losing his title.. Yet, was ignoring his reply and shit plays Then won't battle unless he has the advantage, pst… Your just a glorified Big Game the only problem here u had was.. you're setup is better than your punchline.. you should done it the other way around.. and the punchline is so weak it didn't land.. It's a Big Shame, That you have no originality. We all have seen this bastard tactics
But I'm still gonna 'light ya bars up' like pool hall tops and at the "breaking point' we still wouldn't see Cu Balls' Drop (Cue) You came with no 'pressure' so I see what this Goofball Rocks Couldn't "pack anything behind his punches" at a U-Haul Shop this was decent plays nothing hard here in these 2 bars. seemed too indirect.. the nameplay is just too weak for me "Flip" the switch…. Cube.. Gonna Freeze up in his syllable game As he' "Bytes the Dust" and gets stuck in this 'Digital Frame' (Bites) not landing It's the winter time, so with colds hands he couldn't throw any Visual Flames Cause I came to "Ice C" quicker than his Original Name this was cool play here.. had a punch there I'm Ruthless with a Rude Temper, I'm a Cube Bender That will leave "-O- In A Wake" with Mourning Crew Members (Owen, Morning) Cause from the start of this verse, within seconds I was wrecking this felon and left "Cu dead in the collision" like Desmond Llewelyn (Q) weak punch here... just the play was good but delivery didn't land hard enough for me CUBA I throw cancer at vogue chancers, you've no answer to generate ???did he lost from renegade before? that's first thing I think when I read this..
this had punch but weak... good personal punch not the best choice of choosing personal.. kinda weak for me.. coz it was general conversation good play here. but punch was way too decent... good punch here.. nicely done with references ok, not landing hard enough weak hit this didn't land for me.. not feeling the delivery ok a bit better.. average hit.. I can't read the entire article or listen to entire story for one punch concept.. it's annoying for voters.. and it's bit too generic for me.. this was a good flip punch.. this was good punch here.. lol this was funny. punch was average cool concept, delivery was average.. clever nameplay here.. I liked the closer.. ended nicely here Overall: Law: one of the biggest mistake I seen is that your personal are in setup lines, instead they suppose to be in punchline.. some of the punches aren't too direct and they tend to be more in generic form.. Cuba: I don't see you battle quite often, you had some nice punches and I left enough feed after each bar where you went wrong.. As a result this seems like one sided battle, cuba had more and better punches than law. Vote: CUBA |
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