Open Mic: Bastardized Answers

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I was spawned inside a nasty cunt with balls the size of apricots
Was a toddler when my father died, been gone since I was half a month
Raised myself on God’s advice with solemn psalms and black chalk
In my teen years I was always high, chopped ganja, lines, a scarred past
I’d get OC free from doctors for so long they made their mark last
But in deep I know the only thing that coke increased, my bar tabs
The drips it leaves behind combined with no sleep equals garbage
Still I’d grown a seasoned toker, I was smoking trees like tarzan
A broken breed of art that came with older days of bowls and haze
I’d write to drain my soul of pain, I’d pull it through my swollen veins
When thrown on pages, load the net and post it till the poets praise it
Only way to go on sanely, penning parts while heavy hearted
And set on the target I’m deadly, a marksmen
Draining the fluid while emptying cartridges
Mugged and then cradled it, fed to my arms
A dissection of morales so dark and decayed
This a part of me, barred in the start of my day
In my heart it remains such a party of flavors
What seems hardly a taste has me partly awake
And my arms and feet shaking, heartbeat is racing
In a harlequin state till I sever this bondage
I'm the same as you pretend to be, but energies darker
I contain it, but it’s besting me, my senses are sharpened
Since the days are fading, never seen, my heads in the coffin
Already dead but part of me is setting out onward
Because pain grows exponentially when exits an option

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Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Bastardized Answers Posted: 17 January 2014 at 6:07pm
	I was spawned inside a nasty cunt with balls the size of apricots Was a toddler when my father died, been gone since I was half a month Raised myself on God’s advice with solemn psalms and black chalk In my teen years I was always high, chopped ganja, lines, a scarred past I’d get OC free from doctors for so long they made their mark last But in deep I know the only thing that coke increased, my bar tabs The drips it leaves behind combined with no sleep equals garbage Still I’d grown a seasoned toker, I was smoking trees like tarzan A broken breed of art that came with older days of bowls and haze I’d write to drain my soul of pain, I’d pull it through my swollen veins When thrown on pages, load the net and post it till the poets praise it Only way to go on sanely, penning parts while heavy hearted And set on the target I’m deadly, a marksmen Draining the fluid while emptying cartridges Mugged and then cradled it, fed to my arms A dissection of morales so dark and decayed This a part of me, barred in the start of my day In my heart it remains such a party of flavors What seems hardly a taste has me partly awake And my arms and feet shaking, heartbeat is racing In a harlequin state till I sever this bondage I'm the same as you pretend to be, but energies darker I contain it, but it’s besting me, my senses are sharpened Since the days are fading, never seen, my heads in the coffin Already dead but part of me is setting out onward Because pain grows exponentially when exits an option


The Law Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote The Law Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 January 2014 at 6:15pm
	Dope verse, definitely got deep within sections of this drop. "The drips it leaves behind combined with no sleep equals garbage Still I’d grown a seasoned toker, I was smoking trees like tarzan A broken breed of art that came with older days of bowls and haze I’d write to drain my soul of pain, I’d pull it through my swollen veins When thrown on pages, load the net and post it till the poets praise it" Thought that right there was crack. Nice vocab, nice flow and a really nice piece altogether here Nig.
	Go my Minions!

Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 January 2014 at 6:17pm
	Thanks for the quick reply broseph


RedNosePit Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Banned Joined: 29 October 2012 Status: Offline Points: 422	Post Options Post Reply Quote RedNosePit Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 January 2014 at 10:40pm
	I've read your work before... Clearly not new to writing. The flow was superb up til And set on the target I’m deadly, a marksmen It dropped off there Imo. Pretty dope overall though... Quite refreshing change from your more off the wall drops like The ones about space and shit. Stay up

Zinaii Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 2957 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-27-10 Form: WLNNNL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Zinaii Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 18 January 2014 at 12:38am
	I liked how u opened really descriptive and the multis were on point. Was it just me or did ur flow in the beginning how a kind of bouncy vibe to it? I like it either way. When u went to the shorter bar style it kinda dropped off. That coke increased bar tabs line was fukn dope. U have those sneaky metaphors u have to read a couple times then itll be like o shit thats dope. Good drop nig

Smoothtung Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 09 December 2012 Status: Offline Points: 2222 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 25-8-3 Form: WWWLWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote Smoothtung Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 18 January 2014 at 1:15pm
	impressive drop bruv, im sending a pm your way about that.. hold on
	Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it.. Though you never even had the chance to witness it

Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 18 January 2014 at 6:13pm
	Thanks for the feed, you are good peoples


H4ZE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 July 2013 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1859 Crew: eNtiTy Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-6-0 Form: WWLLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote H4ZE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 18 January 2014 at 8:24pm
	amazing drop here bruh. The wording,flow,and multis were all on point and amazing. I always love reading ur drops. Keep the good shit up bruh


fuckoff Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 10 April 2013 Location: fucksville Status: Offline Points: 3074 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 27-6-0 Form: WWWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote fuckoff Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 19 January 2014 at 1:59am
	first half of the verse was sick, i liked your concept, apart from the first 12, that finishing line was dope as hell. stay up nigggs