Open Mic: Rhymin' the reason keystyle

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Keystyled verse just now for you:

You been watching all day just to lock this drop
This robotic script straight from robocop
Y'all gon stop what is was you were doin'
When ...
T his glock goes pop 'n' your thoughts start stewin'

Bought you a new one like I brought renewin'
Mods go "true" when Rapper T starts brewin'
I'm a pro testin' G, got a cause worth coupin'
Got a couple of coupes 'n' koolaid for coolin'

Unacceptably fuckin' the EU like Nuland
Blockin' the site up in a Turkish court rulin'
Winnin' Russian respect like I was Norwegian
Slicked up your flow just because you're streamin'
Rapper T's deep like I fixed doors squeakin'

I'm an authoritative totalitarian
Preachin' antidisestablishmentarianism
I'll illuminate you like illuminatiin'
With illumination like the sun you were seein'
No bahamut or owls, I bring educacion

Upgrade you peons to the level of daemon
Evolve you to a knight from a meager peasant
'N' all you had to do was a little light readin'
And ...
That's what I call findin' rhyme in the reason

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Rapper T Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Suspended Joined: 25 November 2013 Location: NZ Status: Offline Points: 1423 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-27-0 Form: LLLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Rapper T Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Rhymin' the reason keystyle Posted: 10 February 2014 at 7:35am
	Keystyled verse just now for you: You been watching all day just to lock this drop This robotic script straight from robocop Y'all gon stop what is was you were doin' When ... T his glock goes pop 'n' your thoughts start stewin' Bought you a new one like I brought renewin' Mods go "true" when Rapper T starts brewin' I'm a pro testin' G, got a cause worth coupin' Got a couple of coupes 'n' koolaid for coolin' Unacceptably fuckin' the EU like Nuland Blockin' the site up in a Turkish court rulin' Winnin' Russian respect like I was Norwegian Slicked up your flow just because you're streamin' Rapper T's deep like I fixed doors squeakin' I'm an authoritative totalitarian Preachin' antidisestablishmentarianism I'll illuminate you like illuminatiin' With illumination like the sun you were seein' No bahamut or owls, I bring educacion Upgrade you peons to the level of daemon Evolve you to a knight from a meager peasant 'N' all you had to do was a little light readin' And ... That's what I call findin' rhyme in the reason

Rameez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 31 July 2007 Location: Brampton, CDN Status: Offline Points: 3922 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-40-4 Form: NWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Rameez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 10 February 2014 at 11:33am
	seems like you just wrote for the sake of rhyming.. otherwise I won't see too many random ideas there..


Rapper T Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Suspended Joined: 25 November 2013 Location: NZ Status: Offline Points: 1423 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-27-0 Form: LLLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Rapper T Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 February 2014 at 6:19am
	You're right Rammy, rhymin' the reason!

U.N.L.M. Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 19 December 2006 Location: USA Status: Offline Points: 1955 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-15-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote U.N.L.M. Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 February 2014 at 5:47pm
	I know this is a keystyle, but if you post it up for feed I gotta point out some things...For instance, wording is weird at times - "Y'all gon stop what is was you were doin'".... "When ... T his glock goes pop " ^those are a couple examples..."what is was you were" is a bit convoluted...Some lines were also way too basic...like this one was just poor: "I'll illuminate you like illuminatiin' With illumination like the sun you were seein'" Thought this was your more interesting bar in terms of flow: I'm a pro testin' G, got a cause worth coupin' Got a couple of coupes 'n' koolaid for coolin' Also like the closer a lot...I think the concept is cool, but it deserves more than a quick keystyle...Keystyles are great cause they can be raw, but I think you really should work on your verses...Keystyles bring out more wording issues and simpler ideas...No need to rush it just to post something...Anyway, keep writing...