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The Law 
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 Topic: "Awe"tisticPosted: 22 September 2015 at 7:47am |
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Thank you for the feedback storm.
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Storm $hadow
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Posted: 11 September 2015 at 3:15pm |
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Really did create imagery in my head... Great work
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The Law
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Posted: 11 September 2015 at 1:18pm |
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Damn, I'm surprised this is still getting hit up with feed.
I appreciate it, thanks for all the feedback .
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JBrenn
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Posted: 09 September 2015 at 5:29am |
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^^^^^ Shit HEAD!
Law- you know your game is tight when you drag vets out of retirement homes to make them drop feed!! This was on another level as you have been for a while now... the whole piece just rolled together perfectly and the syllable measurements were off the hook bro!!! Very nice work!
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Posted: 05 September 2015 at 6:20pm |
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POETIC
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Ibesick
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Posted: 04 January 2015 at 8:20am |
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This is one dope piece, it was a smooth read throughout, and very entertaining, the wording and rhymes are superb man, shine of skill right here
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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Posted: 01 January 2015 at 1:37pm |
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This was a dope concept that you executed impecably! Really enjoyed reading this.. The poetic feel was Awe-some.. The verse together with the images, was a work of art!.. My favourite bar was the 'my eyes see'.. That had a sick symetrical syllable count. Really nice drop man!
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levy420
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Posted: 01 January 2015 at 3:57am |
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Laws steady putting in work the flow was spot on threw out Not much to say here I mean u killed the topic the imagery was on point made u feel like u was right in the person's shoes an that final picture just pieced everything together well props
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The Law
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Posted: 01 January 2015 at 3:40am |
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Thanks Keek's
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Kiki Spirez
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Posted: 30 December 2014 at 12:00pm |
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A lot of writing gets drowned with boasting and negativity, to the point where its hard to make positive words stand along side them, unless the skill is there. And it was with this. You were talking about such a sensitive and beautiful situation, which by definition should've been 'soft', but if anyone can't appreciate your wording and imagery on this, they should log off now.
Props my dude. Great images too, you're right, it does add to it.
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The Law
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Posted: 24 December 2014 at 10:20pm |
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I'll send you a pm a little bit later about it.
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Posted: 21 December 2014 at 8:40pm |
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I would love to get on that collab law
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The Law
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Posted: 21 December 2014 at 9:08am |
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Thank you for the feedback ILL, it's much appreciated.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 19 December 2014 at 6:12pm |
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What a fantastic, fresh & original idea. How hard is it for any one of us to be able to honestly say that. The concept is just one of those that I wish was turned into a 3 verse audio with that last picture as the twist at the end. This was pure art Law.. The detail that you described the love for the family as well as the first picture was delivered in a way that you related to the kid. Then at the end you felt heartbroken bc of his disability but also warm bc the mom loved it regardless. "Awe"some work...
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The Law
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Posted: 19 December 2014 at 5:06pm |
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Thanks man I am glad to be back writing something at least
Tbh it actually started where I wanted to write a piece with a bunch of descriptive imagery and j was just thinking and that popped in my head lol. I have another real dope concept that would be good in a two person collab but it'll take a bunch of work to make sure both pieces coincide perfectly. I just read one of your drops as well a little while ago but I can't leave proper feed until I get home from work. Thanks again |
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Posted: 19 December 2014 at 4:25pm |
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Law glad to see you back my dude.
This was dope man. I'm loving the concept. You always have had a way with words that always gave off this poetic vibe. Very very smooth. You painted a real detailed surrounding to the concept that really jumped out to me. It just makes it a much nicer read. I loved how you described certain things in this piece. I loved this drop because it was so creative and unique. How did you come up with a concept like this?. Very original and impressive. hopefully you stick around and drop more pieces like this
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The Law
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Posted: 19 December 2014 at 12:35pm |
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Thank you for all the feedback.
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fiendishfriend
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Posted: 17 December 2014 at 7:05pm |
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Autism has always fascinated me
I've heard someone say that autism Is a result of a person not understanding That life is an act. A game of hide and go seek With itself. And more importantly this was awesome Thank you. Good work. |
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Posted: 16 December 2014 at 7:59pm |
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the way your able to make this feel as if your talking with no force is amazing. The vividness of this piece is damn near realistic. The way you transition and grasp each line is awesome. Though it was short, u were able to be descriptive enough to pull grab hold of your protagonist. Good shit brothaman and welcome back
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Posted: 16 December 2014 at 2:43am |
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this was fucking dope, the topic was insane, and u did a great job of it dude, flow and words were stunning, keep it up.
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~Insight The Inspired~
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