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    Posted: 16 March 2015 at 8:48pm
Red eyed skull on the gear lever im an air speeder
Lights what you will Compare me with in square meters
I get as hot as a severe fever When peers feed ya
How I see cheerleaders making my ears steam up
I appear eager converting ink to rare reefer
Flow nailed like blood seen when they pierced Jesus I've seen hell and I've walked before weird creatures
I made em bow after dethroning their feared leader
Won't handle spears got bandoliers I bare heaters
You couldn't stop the bucks from going out with deer breeders
Hope despair eats ya when I leave you queers ethered
If a Peer appeals to you I'll use a pear peelers I question principles I never meant the head teacher
The only member who's OM has an Edward Leer feature "all things fair. With such a pencil, such a pen.
You shadow forth to distant men, I read and felt that I was there." Angel of good and bad fuck it I hear neither
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I'd cut you up to play the role of a bear feeder
You actors can take the Oscars I'lll spare Reeva
Gunshots help me sleep my home is near Giza
So I'll just walk you cowards to where your fears lead ya
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Dope piece for a key style man. The same rhyme scheme throughout was astonishing! You had the flow except at the 'You shadow forth...' bar, where it felt a bit disrupted to me.

The aggression was great. I didn't expect you to stay on topic in a keystyle but you managed to do a decent job. I found the content to be fairly consistent. Overall, nice work, super rhyming, keep writing.
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thanks T for the positive feed the quote was supposed to have not interfered with the read I don't know what happened
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Originally posted by nomedic nomedic wrote:


I appear eager converting ink to rare reefer
Flow nailed like blood seen when they pierced Jesus
 I've seen hell and I've walked before weird creatures
I made em bow after dethroning their feared leader


you went in like that

pure filth.


Won't handle spears got bandoliers I bare heaters Shocked
You couldn't stop the bucks from going out with deer breeders LOL
 I question principles I never meant the head teacher Stern Smile

I'd cut you up to play the role of a bear feeder Cool
Gunshots help me sleep my home is near Giza LOL


medz you're really getting into your 'groove'
you got next.
You're way too slept on.

This one was short but it was packing a lot of heat.
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lmao Word fam appreciate it
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Well, this was hot! Loved the aggression in this & how you kept the same rhymescheme throughout, but my only problem is that the longer lines I think you could have separated & made into new lines (in my opinion) but other than that, this was good read, man.

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dude this was friggin awesome a really good fresh read good concept and flow I damn near must have read this ten times it just struck me dunno why just did look forward to seeing ur next piece of this type
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Isaiah thanks bro and the longer lines were a typo sorry bout that good looks though
 
Stu thanks bro I'll drop it soon
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