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    Posted: 15 June 2015 at 2:04pm
72 hours
6 bars
house rules

check if you want, no need.

I'll drop in a day or two. Who you want to go first Sky? You pick.
Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Sky Scrapur Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 16 June 2015 at 12:46am
You a fake Ben son, so i will openly kick you in tha crotch,
cause come "hero time" you always missing the "alien watch".

You dropped a "10 minute quick verse" like all these rookies,
& we still couldn't see Abomination Marvel like comic movies.

I've just rehydrated my tongue for something fresh not dry,
To lyrically abuse Ab Soul so hard, they'll hear another Soul Cry.

He's just another easy door to my success, no mojo no powers,
so i will simply slide this X-Enigma away like Dreamline Showers.

The Call-Outs can tell it's the first you've battled,
because you are a Virgin and i'm already settled.

We don't care if he's Batman impressin chicks in Gotham,
cause ain't none special about "Abs", every man got em.
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This dude wanna piece of my crotch, don't ignore the balls homie
"Come, hero!" be what you beggin while blowin on me

You're probably right, my verse did suck, something you have in common
But the abomination is here now, come on I hope ya haven't forgotten

The theme of this battle is you suckin on it, obviously
So be free Willy and probably be shocked at the anamoly

Each one of his lines are discarded and this faggot tried to give me his spare X chromosome
But the enigma is whether he just a bitch or retarded, something I won't never know

But I keep the answer for myself, and I'm the reason that ya door locked
Fuckin' Elf, not even Santa could help, now let's see what else I can concoct

Time to flick the killswitch; you a bitch or that a shuddering addiction?
Sound better than you when I'm stuttering and I cause utter affliction
Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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Please use full usernames of all battlers involved thanks.
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yo, not bad, this was fairly close.

Sky. You actually brought some decent bars! No offence, but most of your work i read is horse shit, maybe thats just when you first joined, but this was a decent verse man. Nice flow, most of the punches and personals connected, and i was diggin the Ab Soul bar. Good shit. Youre punches werent GREAT, but they were consistent as shit, you kept hittin and wouldnt let up, line for line, bar for bar you were swinging. Good shit.

Ab, not feelin this too much. You were bar for bar punching like Sky, but the difference is, yours werent connecting and his were. Your lines about X chromosomes and the one that followed was stretched as fuck. No flow to it at all tbh. Gotta work on your punches and make sure your shit FLOWS to bro. 

Mvgt Sky
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i feel your craft could definatley improve if you spent more time on polishing it the end schemes were not refreshin at all and your verse had no internals well these things help boost your flow factor so try workin on that i feel your plays showed you have an idea of hoe you could use a punch but i feel you also have to try workin on the wording department to ensure the punches dont fall flat


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i feel your verse was rushed bro the flip on the first bar couldve been done better the other bars had no punch in them and in terms of flow you should also try improving that as well the X line is proof. my suggestion hit the tutorials in order to learn how to swing better

mvgt sky for actually throwing punches

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Sky Scrapur wins 3-0
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