Open Mic: I'm Not The Devil

This was good, nice topic. It was interesting. Your rhyme scheme was good, you had flow in there. But you rhyme words were iffy. Usually rhyme words should be the same amount of syllables, oftenly the words should be 2-4 syllables. So it was okay overall, just mainly those syllables you should work on.

Also multis, forgot to mention those. They look like

Blah, blah, blah, King Soul
Blah, blah, blah, bring Cole

I don't know, that was a pretty shitty example, with an extremely short bar, but you should get the point.

Waking up with blood on his shirt, what has he done? He's alert.
Breaking stuff as he runs from the worst, as he lunged from the curse.
Strong opener, It's sometimes difficult to word a storytelling opener to come across as natural but you accomplished it here. Mechanically on point too, vivid vocab, good allround.
Escaping the drugs and guns he dispersed, his lungs... they burn,
blaming the lust on steel reserve, having so much 'fun' it hurts.
Usually it's get drunk and high, my supply makes you punch a guy
brutally until he's numb or dies, sometimes, it rolls your tongue or eyes.
Truthfully, I use to love Christ, but I've plunged far from the sky,
ruthlessly abused the light by getting stuck in the darkest lies.
in the above line i think it woulda sounded a lot better if you dropped a syllable i the first half of the line in order to change the end rhyme to 'darkest of lies', if that makes any sense. would have ended that scheme with more of a bang imo. everything before then on point, a lot of the same good things happening in them as the opener.
This life wasn't chosen, it's been destined by my own omens,
homicide to cope with, street lessons and a throne that's broken.
Crucify my soul in concrete, compressed with snow and roaches,
rectify? It won't reprieve the damage... I'm known as hopeless.
Destroy your family with hallucinogens, your boy's a calamity, lost within it,
each voice rambling inside his skull is acidic, he seems poised but watch for a minute.
'destroy your family with hallucinations was dope, really nice and unique imagery in this section
Deployed over enemy lines, he rocks and fidgets, any noise can launch him to twitchin',
annoyed enough to stop his business and poison himself with rocks in the kitchen.
You hate the dealer but I'm not the devil, your son escaped, eager for a cure,
blame the reaper that he tries to rebel, the wraith that teeters unsure.
Facial features he can familiarize with... he resents the deceiver's lure,
he overdosed to get away from you, I simply sent him deeper into the purge.
really nice conclusion too. enjoyed this piece a lot, not much to complain about at all. mechanically sound, solid storyline and content described vividly and delivered through a fairly smooth stream of consciousness. very solid work

Nice opener, rare to see a rapper who's telling story with a starter if that nature except nigma and few others.. You were on point, not drifting from the topic.. And nice self-reflection( i mean the figure in the rap).. The conclusion was a nice one too..

I enjoyed this man, pretty cool concepts you used, it has a nice poetic sense into it, and if I had to choose a favorite part here it would be this one...
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blaming the lust on steel reserve, having so much 'fun' it hurts.
Usually it's get drunk and high, my supply makes you punch a guy
brutally until he's numb or dies, sometimes, it rolls your tongue or eyes.
Truthfully, I use to love Christ, but I've plunged far from the sky,
ruthlessly abused the light by getting stuck in the darkest lies.
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Liked the continuing of the same rhyme and the Christ part was boss. good shit fam.

I really liked this. flow was good rhymes were nice, but the thing that keeps you reading is your imagery and story.  Some heavy lines in there. Got the point across very well.  I think a some points the rhymes mightve been off or mismatched but it never takes away from the content and passion in the verse which stands out here. Youve got excellent imagery, real vivid. and youve obviously got an understanding of rhymes and flow. great piece, look forward to seein more from you.