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Cuba 
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Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329  Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
 Topic: Battle Royale #1Posted: 10 December 2015 at 7:30pm |
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BATTLE ROYALE
CONTESTANTS (this is the running order) #0 Shankley - No showed #1 Absolute Abomination #2 Beans #0 Exoduzt - No showed #3 Rutter Knows Best #4 Arthur #5 Ridley Squat #6 Slip #0 Zinaii - No showed #7 DayDizzle #8 DJ Flame Reserve list 1. Trizzy Tre RULES 8 lines each Battlers 1 and 2 contest first round Battler 1 drops first, Battler 2 second Winner stays on thereafter Challenger drops first each round (24 hours MAX from when winner is confirmed) Most votes per round wins (24 hr time limit...or any 5 vote deficit = KO) Cuba casts any tie-breaking vote Crew votes allowed All other rules House Final round winner is text title #1 contender ROUND 1 - Shankley vs Absolute Abomination Shankley drops by 8pm 11th Dec Absolute drops by 8pm 12th Dec Voting closes APPROX 8pm 13th Dec My decision is final. Winner faces Concrete for shot at LA Text Title Good luck Edited by Cuba - 04 January 2016 at 10:13am |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator
Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 11 December 2015 at 9:25pm |
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Shankley is out. Beans replaces him.
Absolute drops first...due in 24 hours, so 9:30pm UK time 12th Dec Beans replies by 9:30pm UK time 13th Dec *edit by Scotty* For our international members, you can find the current UK time on the about page, link in navigation bar. No excuses. Edited by Scotty32 - 11 December 2015 at 9:47pm |
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Absolute Abomination
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Joined: 15 May 2015 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 556 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: LLWW |
Posted: 12 December 2015 at 12:07am |
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damn shank, that sucks. thought i had some good stuff for him.
--- Shank set the table up I guess it's beans tonight, in heinz sight Oliver woulda been a much harder fight But it's alright, crack open a can I just might, look at your pic, you ain't bright, one bar already KO, good night Ollie reached for the stars n fell flat, 4 4's and Best OM is your habitat, but they're all features, imagine that! Me n you mistmached, but pray I don't snap or you get slashed, left handicapped and quickly dispatched! Hayes was subbed in, he took a chance he, couldn't foresee that it'd be against me, you ain't comin back even with necromancy You a lion if you dandy, that means you fancy, brown nosing is just sycophancy, and I bet that Ryan is just a moniker for Clancy Bean strings punch after punch but nowadays they all graze, every line is more cliches, let me rephase, they all overplayed n still receive praise Evident that Ryan Hayes is part of the gays, portrays as a killer but betrays the message he conveys when he strays away to watch ballets shanks name = oliver beans name = ryan hayes (I guess from his snapchat name lol...) |
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Beans
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 9:45pm |
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that ^^ just multi's n flow W/NO punch. How's this dweeb repped? nothing he swings set is fun but is more played & ran through than recess Rub B the wrong way? bones'll crack, I'm jus showin facts we know that Bengay..so I'll easily out muscle'em @ my Most relaxed every opponent Towers over you, verse proves all u do is dive ya sky scrapour drop.. didnt work, but thats how we wish You would die I get drunk & Drop bars..<--- now im 'Stalin' this user ppl who fallow AA arent a vet here... but most likely alchohalic abusers Expos: cos you all are retards bar 1... swing sets or on playgrounds/recess...swinging punch. bar 2 his names Ben, its in his profile, bengay is a muscle soothing rub bar 3 he lost to sky scrapour...some of u may live in holes but sky scrapours are tall buildings closer is a played name flip, and this is a keystle so hate it or love it. AA is alchohalics anonymous here in the states. for your drink problems |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Cuba
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Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 9:53pm |
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Votes...
Closes @ 9:30pm Monday |
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Slip
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Joined: 04 June 2013 Location: St Johns. N.L. Status: Offline Points: 1612 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 14-33-0 Form: LLLWLW |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 10:18pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. abbs your first bar was almost nice had a good set up but fell flat at in the second half Shank set the table up I guess it's beans tonight, in heinz sight Oliver woulda been a much harder fight But it's alright, crack open a can I just might, and then it starts to fall off look at your pic, you ain't bright, one bar already KO, good night weak 2nd bar abbs again good set up with a personal jab but failed to land a heymaker pray I don't snap or you get slashed, left handicapped and quickly dispatched! is not really attacking your opponent and in the 3rd bar you did a good job diggin up his real name if that is his real but you did not use the info very well and what you put together done nothing at all 4th bar im gonna say it again because its true you started of nice with a good set up but the strayin away to watch bellets shit completely threw your closer off some of your set ups were nice but not much connected _____________________________________________________________________ beans your first bar was a direct hit even tho it was stretched out a little you got a valid point across that ^^ just multi's n flow W/NO punch. How's this dweeb repped? nothing he swings set is fun but is more played & ran through than recess 2nd bar nice name play good flow solid hit 3rd bar again this was a good hit using a personal with a nice flow 4th bar didnt flow as welll but still a decent name play so after going threw both drops a few times its clear to me that MVGT : Beans
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Arthur
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Joined: 23 August 2013 Location: London Status: Offline Points: 2311 Text Rank: #5 Stats: 36-7-0 Form: WWWWLL |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 10:41pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Absolute Abomination i really liked the way you started the first bar, making reference to the fact Shankley dropped out and Beans stepped in, thought that was cleverly done, i think that should have been it in terms of making reference to shankley though, Beans is the opponent, so it needs to be aimed at him, the first bar didn't really have a punchline as such just a line saying that you've already KO'd him. gonna need to be a lot more creative than that to take out Beans dude. man is that second bar just straight dissin Shankley? dude come on, this needed to be changed to reflect that the opponent had changed. i can't really feed that bar as it's completely irrelevant. third bar was a bit better as you went in on Beans, i didn't understand the punchline to be honest, it just read like a bunch of multies that didn't connect with each other that much. closer now and it was your best bar easily, but again it just didn't have that hard stinging punchline, if those multies lead up to a sick metaphor punchline to close it out it would have been pretty good. Overall - you need to write punchlines before doing anything else, they are the thing that's going to win you battles. think you're going to struggle to go far in this battle royale. Beans firstly, don't like the way you started, i've always had an issue with feeding off of the opponents drop because of the lack of originality it shows. hmmm the swings set thing is so awkwardly worded it feels a bit forced man i gotta say, i get the concept behind the whole playground theme but that ruined the punch for me. liked the second bar, kept that concept throughout the bar which was nice, perfect nameplay, nice strong hitting punchline. third bar was ok, the sky scrapur thing worked but i just didn't feel it was as hard hitting or creative as your previous punchline, but it's still decent. fourth bar, i mean i think you almost know what i'm going to say, for the initials AA let me list things that are played 1.Alcoholics anonymous... 2.Batteries... 3.Breakdown Cover (UK) so if you're going to use those initials for a diss, it needs to be a hell of a lot more creative than the alcoholics thing. overall - i think you went easy after reading his verse, i know you have more in your locker. Verdict - unfortunately i have to say it's a very easy decision. Beans showed a higher level of technique and takes this one with his punchlines. Winner - Beans |
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Zinaii
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Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 2957 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-27-10 Form: WLNNNL |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 10:48pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. AA first bar I saw you trying to use a food scheme; it was executed poorly; and there was no punch; the idea you had was good; you just have to find a way to connect that scheme and tie it all together with a punch at the end. Second bar was a good attempt at a personal; but you just didn't tie it together with a good punch; I would avoid those general disses like you'll get slashed etc etc each line should be tailor made to your opponent. In a short battle like this you have to make the most of your lines. Third bar was cool; I see what you were trying but if you don't connect those ideas the lines are gonna keep falling flat; last bar; no. The opening line I like then u got crazy at the end. Your bars are very long and drawn out; try to shorten them get rid of some of the filler; incorporate some multis and diss your opponent directly. You have potential; you'll learn from this battle and come back stronger. Beans I liked the opener that was a nice scheme; I'm not a fan of bengay flips but I think this passes as you worded it well and it connected; third bar lol harsh and direct; definently another solid hit there; closer ehhhh wasn't really feeling it; only so much you can do with an aa punch; overall three solid bars got j the win easily imo good battle by both |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator
Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 11:07pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. AA - major piece of feedback is to work on your flow/rhythm/structure. You had multiples of rhymes, but they were basic & they didn't really go anywhere. You executed a series of simple disses & didn't sctually attempt to throw punches. Punches are most effective way to do damage in a short form battle like this & not doing that is a killer. You need to write a coherent verse from a structural POV to deliver your punches as well. A basic tour of duty through the open mic should give you that understanding. Creativity-wise I did like your idea of playing off Shanks not turning up and throwing that into dissing Beans, but you didn't really deliver anything incisive. Some of your wordplay in the opening lines was clever but to what end? Didn't end up with a hard hitting punch (or really any punch at all). Overall you did ok, but in terms of a battle verse this was very basic and unremarkable. Beans - felt like you went through the motions a bit. You delivered consistent punches. Opener I quite liked but maybe could've trimmed down the word count to make it a bit sharper. Rest were ok, more than enough for this battle but I think you will need to sharpen up your concept/diss combos against later opponents, which I'm sure you are aware of. Overall Beans did what he had to do here, delivered consistently with punches more than good enough to see him advance. Vote = Beans |
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Cuba
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Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 13 December 2015 at 11:10pm |
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Just so everyone is aware...I'm going to make this BEST OF FIVE VOTES for future rounds. Feel like first to 5 is a bit unnecessary.
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Nigma
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Posted: 13 December 2015 at 11:56pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Gonna toss up a vote from my phone so it'll be brief however this one was one sided imo. AA you had issues consistent throughout your verse that hampered the potency of your punches. You are gathering information and that work towards personals but you really didn't conjure anything that landed with impact. Beans this wasn't your greatest battle verse but you had punches that landed which all you needed to achieve to solidify the victory. An easy vote here, AA needs work developing 3ffective punches and was outclassed this outing +1 Beans |
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Cuba
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Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 14 December 2015 at 12:04am |
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That wraps it up, 5 votes in just over 2 hours (surely an LA record?!) results in a comprehensive victory for Beans in the first stage. Onto the next one, against a more established opponent.
Beans, you drop by midnight on Monday (24hrs from now) Exo, you respond by midnight on Tues. Voting closes by midnight on Wed, or whoever is first to 3 votes. My vote is the deciding vote in a tie situation. |
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Beans
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 14 December 2015 at 11:58pm |
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Expo's
Bar 1: He's only been to two champ matches and lost. the events were bloodlines and Heat wave Bar 2:Kleenex is facial tissue Bar 3:Barry Bondz is the worst writer/audio head on earth. Bondz means to build a relationship Bar 4:WWE refrences. Dustin rhodes is a vet/HOF who recently passed away. stone cold with the rock...cold with the gun for you knuckle heads who dont know lets go! see... Every shot @ the strap U get bodied. watch B buck @ a tough guy Cos letting the Heat Wave aint the only proof theres no champ in ya Bloodline These Bars be swingin blades, I'll cut str8 through this disgrace Every punch is clean,Ex(Kleenex)..you could use a whole Box to covor the wounds on ya face We homies dawg, but I'll back stab quick if I had to & Kill I'll follow up & Barry Bondz, cos ya last showing proved you shadow his Skill nothing bout U is GOld,Im Stone Cold When the Rock calls ya name One hit have Dust In Roads...Dead WAAAY before this vet can even get in the Hall Of Fame *Closes Casket*
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Exoduzt
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NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 15 December 2015 at 6:38pm |
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Expos Bar 1: he's never won a title,when u buy a car you recieve a title Bar 2: I KO'd him in a tag battle, His HOF OM was a cypha that I was in Bar 3: He's been pm'n me trying to join my crew LI for a while Bar 4: he always battles noobs n got banned for advertising an off site tournament, he never won one You have 'no drive' to be a champ, you just dwell & 'idle'- Buying your first 'car' is the only time you ever 'held a title'- It's been a while, since I KO'd you but I guess your not speaking on it- The only respectable OM u had was a cypha, only cus I was featured on it!- Lets be real with it ya average, & I'm not being evil with malice- But stop pm'n me to join LI, cus we only accept people with talent!- You only battle noobs so your respect has been pretty grim for years- You got banned for advertising an off site tournament cus you couldnt win one here!- |
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Shankley
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Joined: 03 September 2013 Location: Leeds, England Status: Offline Points: 3369 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 37-43-1 Form: WNLWWL |
Posted: 15 December 2015 at 7:48pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This was a good battle both had some good bars here... Beans: I liked the heatwave/bloodlines bar I thought that was cool. I thought the Kleenex wordplay was a little forced but the bar itself was decent. I liked the humour you incorporated into your verse, you had some decent punches but I wasn't a fan of the Barry bondz bar I felt it fell a little flat. Exo: I really liked your first 2 bars you came out swinging the first bar was cool I liked the meta it was an interesting way to go with it but I really liked the second bar I liked how you said he only had one good OM and it was you that made it so almost like a back handed compliment. You other 2 bars were good kept up the pace with decent personals. Overall a good battle between two good battlers that came hard but I feel Exoduzt has edged this one he had a slightly better verse and got a better reaction off of more of his bars than beans. MVGT Exoduzt Edited by Cuba - 15 December 2015 at 7:54pm |
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daydizzle89
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Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW |
Posted: 15 December 2015 at 7:56pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Beans - Everytime you drop a verse. I struggle with the flow first time I spit it. I have to adjust to get it to go. Almost seems like you write without a beat. So enough of the flow shit. 1st Bar - Setup was ehhhhh but the punch was pretty nice. I liked that a lot. 2nd Bar - Setup was didn't really go complete with the punch. Wordplay felt a little forced but still coherent enough I understood what you were saying. This was an ok bar 3rd Bar - This was pretty good. Though we all know that Exo can talk with more flow and delivery than barry can rap lol. 4th bar - The closer was nice. Really liked the way it came off and the punch was nice. ______________________________________________________________________________ Exo - Havnt read many of your battles so im fresh with reading this type of shit from you. This came off very Exo'ish hahahah. 1ST BAR- Flow was nice and your setup n punch landed nicely. Pretty creative yet simple. Defo nice opener 2ND BAR- Wasn't feeling this. Seemed more statementish and I got where you were going but seemed more like a jab than a punch 3RD BAR - BOOOM, This was nice hahahaha. Liked the straight forward punch and personal 4th BAR - Another nice personal and straight forward with a nice setup and punch __________________________________________________________________________________ MVGT EXO - His punches where more personal and his flow was outstanding. His direct punches made a big difference. Also his subtle wordplay helped with flow so I didn't have to stop and think much about what he said. I already understood what he said. Beans came with more wordplay and metas but they weren't assembled well to grab this win.
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Jason
Groupie 
Joined: 13 December 2015 Location: South Africa Status: Offline Points: 99 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
Posted: 15 December 2015 at 10:13pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Beans - decent, as a WWE fan, I enjoyed those last lines, especially the dusty Rhodes line/hall of fame line, it was very creative. Honestly, these are the only lines I liked, the others didn't do it for me. Exo - good verse too, although at times I felt like you were making statements and praising yourself instead of taking direct shots. 'The only respectable OM u had was a cypha, only cus I wasl featured on it' This is where you don't diss beans, but give praise to yourself. URThe 'you only battle noobs'line also came across as a statement to me, since it doesnt diss beans in anyway, nor have any impact. I thought the following lines were dope: Buying your first 'car' is the only time you ever 'held a title'- But stop pm'n me to join LI, cus we only accept people with talent!- You got banned for advertising an off site tournament, cause you never won one here (ouch!) Exco takes my vote! |
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Cuba
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Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 15 December 2015 at 10:36pm |
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That last vote was borderline acceptable (Jason, please follow suit in terms of the level of explanation other guys are providing in the thread if you vote again in future rounds)...however upon reading the verses I think Exo edged it, so on that basis & for expediency I'll let Jason's vote count.
Beans is eliminated...onto the next one. Exo you drop by 22:35 on Wed Rutter you respond by 22:35 on Thurs Voting closes by 22:35 on Fri or best of 5. Good luck |
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Rutter knows best
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Joined: 15 March 2014 Location: Manny hood Status: Offline Points: 4529 Crew: EMPIRE  Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-12-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 16 December 2015 at 4:36pm |
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Scrap that I got my verse ready. Gd luck ex.
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#bananas
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Cuba
Senior Moderator
Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 16 December 2015 at 8:10pm |
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Exo has been called into an emergency at work...since you have your verse Rutter could you drop it tonight & then we'll say Exo drops tomorrow but no flips.
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