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The Law
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Posted: 11 August 2016 at 4:59am |
Law Nigma Ya'll always ready to light up? So we went to that drug spot And Law was way too quick to hand out ya mugshots! We make magic like brain damaged sons, we dumb hot The fiends favs, designing the type of lines you dont dust off Abrupt pause Bigger brawls are brewing, I’ve got the blues as this violence grows Nig and Law are grouping beyond the future of thriving globes Our eyes our closed. Silence. We’ve handed out enough advice Drop a page of fire, deflating tires like puncturevine They were never inept to come with fire in toughened times Just some Derek Redmonds needing help to run with lines Ya suck at life, droppin verses that not ether Adjust ya diet, we don’t drop feed like your false teachers A little puff of the smoke, a shot of that bombita Met with a speedball, ain't talking about Tom Seaver Dropped the mag in the streets like I walked up to Don Diva With a Five Knuckle Shuffle and gave em that John Cena We got calm features, rock ya sockets with illusions we bring Invalid money order, need reality checks to be lucid in dreams You'll lose in our ring, Elision are the Peoples Champs So many prayers when you cross us, it's looking like Jesus Camp We control the pond, ya boats gone, ya got a leaning mast We send em floating onwards, not Sabrina but that demon cat Words are our weapon, glover knows we got them Lethal Raps Auction off our followers, we con’d ‘em, sent ‘em seeking cash Fathering so many kids, we never need a Penis Hat S’like boxing with a robot, got no specialist to piece him back The Doctor of dope shots, take a look at my Needle Pack Peak beneath the mask, tactics thirty-three degrees advanced We ain't holding ya'll hands so stop rocking that Beatles Track We’re leading you lost boys, punches never land, and yes that’s played You’re watchin Peter Pan the way we meet a hook and desecrate Kids think they can turntables, so we gotta set the record straight I'll skip straight to the point, play us and watch your record break!
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Storm $hadow
Groupie Joined: 25 July 2015 Location: Abuja Status: Offline Points: 329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-4-0 Form: LLLL |
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This is fire.
It's not easy doing this type of collab where both of you get to merge lines to complete a verse. The first respect here goes to the team work which was great. Coming down to the verse; Thanks to the 'bold' and 'unbold' style identification, i wouldn't had recognize who wrote this or that. The law, i like how you made the kick; Ya'll always ready to light up? So we went to that drug spot And Law was way too quick to hand out ya mugshots! The end rhymes there were good so was the bar. And the Nig continued from there in a fashion that you wouldn't be able to tell if it's really different people that wrote the stuff. We got calm features, rock ya sockets with illusions we bring Invalid money order, need reality checks to be lucid in dreams I don't really know but this is like a play on words to me. The money there made me think the checks also could be cheques(double entendre). And man, you really good and clever with wordplays, nig. The Doctor of dope shots, take a look at my Needle Pack Peak beneath the mask, tactics thirty-three degrees advanced A line from each and yet, we've got something that you could 'damn'. Guess that's why you both are among the top writers in L.A. This is a veteran work. |
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daydizzle89
Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW |
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LAW 1st Segmant- Nice play and the i liked the end rhymes. they tied together well. Dope opener here brothaman. Nigma 1st Segmant - Woah, Nigma dropping bars with swag. Nice rhyming and internals here my friend. You transitioned laws segmant well. Dope start LA 2ND Segmant - Dope reference on this bar. Liking the way you guys transition each others lines. This is more difficult than it looks Nig 2nd Segmant - This was nice. False Teachers? Im lost but i still like the feed reference, diet... Nice Law 3 segmant - Met,SpeedBall, Tom Seaver? DOPE SHIT THERE. Loving the choice of end rhymes and how they connect to the previous one. This whole segmant was dope as fuck. Good shit Nigma 3rd segmant - Loving the way this came off. The Invalid money order thingy was slick. caught it and smirked Law 4th Segmant - lmfao JESUS CAMP, Is Mission attending? Nice bar here Nigma 4th Segmant - Fuck i loved that Demon Cat in Sabrina. That cat was cool as fuck. Only cat i can see myself being around. That fucker had a cool voice also. Good shit Law 5th Segmant - Wasnt getting this line. Sorry. flew over my head brotha Nigma 5th Segmant - You a con? Why you taking peoples cash like that. You con artist Law 6th Segmant - PENIS REFERENCE GETS CON'D EM'd Here on LA. This was pretty funny. Im liking the one bar transitions at this part of the verse. Dope shit Nigma 6th Segmant - Dayum, im liking this bar. Creative and you guys both have the same flow going throughout Law 7th Segmant - Great Bar here. Doctor, Dope shots, Needle pack all in one bar is pretty cool. Nice tieing that together with coherency Nigma 7th Segmant - Masonic Reference done well here. I liked this shit alot here. Good bar Law 8th Segmant - Im loving this back and fourth shit. Guys hit a good stride here and the way you complimented eachother previous lines. Dope Nigma 8 segmant - woah, That last bar was sick shit man. That was a nice way to end your rhyming. Defo enjoyed this piece Law - WOAH, AGAIN NICE WAY TO END THIS SHIT. Overall - The flexing here with Meta's and Similis were hot as shit. So many references and connections between each bar. Flow never fell flat and thats hard to do while putting a verse together as you did here. You guys complimented eachothers lines with transitions very very well. This was a nice piece. Those metas and similis though were slick. Good work you two this was a enjoyable read. |
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The Law
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Thank you for the feedback, we appreciate guys.
That bar you didn't get, was a reference to danny glover and lethal weapon.
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Goryo.
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The lines that stood out the most to me were the lucid dreams one, the Jesus Camp one, and the last bar. All simple yet accurate and effective punches. There were a lot of clever little tie-ins with words throughout it (especially in the lines I mentioned) and I think that's what made this drop what it was. Both writers came equally as hard. As mentioned above it can be difficult to make a drop like this work especially if both perceive the flow a little different but the way I read it there were no problems on that front. A lot of content and references kept it away from the monotonous 'rapping about rapping' vibe and overall it was an entertaining read. Keep it up.
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Sammy
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"abrupt paus" lmao!! niiice! this was sick, guys.
this was dope yall. the in and out play was crazy; the chemistry was very telling here. We got calm features, rock ya sockets with illusions we bring Invalid money order, need reality checks to be lucid in dreams Words are our weapon, glover knows we got them Lethal Raps Auction off our followers, we con’d ‘em, sent ‘em seeking cash A little puff of the smoke, a shot of that bombita Met with a speedball, ain't talking about Tom Seaver Dropped the mag in the streets like I walked up to Don Diva With a Five Knuckle Shuffle and gave em that John Cena fiyah. wish it was longer, haha |
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Crimson Juice
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Yep you both nailed this,very creative Overal,on reading i got visions
of that rap duo Binary Star,the way you bounced off each other,it's a hard thing to do at any level be it text our audio,plus the while piece was cohesive,the metaphors were Ripe,as to the contents,ppl who posted before me have highlighted what I believe are my favourite lines,and I'm in agreement with them,this was well worth my time to read,as it would be for anybody else,there is a problem here though, it just wasn't long enough,Ripe guys pure Ripe..peace. |
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The Law
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thank you guys for the feedback.
We appreciate it.
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