Open Mic: [WD#7] Coming Back

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   Off the rip... I have to commend you for your flow. It was silky smooth from start to finish, which in my opinion, is a feat in and of itself given the awkwardness of some the key words. So props to you on that end. As for the content ... well, it was pretty good. Especially given the fact that it was able to hold my attention after reading and feeding a million different entries that have flipped, tossed, and run these words into the ground at this point. However, personally, I prefer the less abstract approach when it comes to imagery. Although, I could follow your train of thought, it was, for the most part, a little less clear/concrete than I normally like to read. But, everyone has their own style I suppose. Still, tho, it was certainly a nice showing for a first time around. Keep droppin. Peace.

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SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: [WD#7] Coming Back Posted: 27 December 2016 at 3:54pm
	Off the rip... I have to commend you for your flow. It was silky smooth from start to finish, which in my opinion, is a feat in and of itself given the awkwardness of some the key words. So props to you on that end. As for the content ... well, it was pretty good. Especially given the fact that it was able to hold my attention after reading and feeding a million different entries that have flipped, tossed, and run these words into the ground at this point. However, personally, I prefer the less abstract approach when it comes to imagery. Although, I could follow your train of thought, it was, for the most part, a little less clear/concrete than I normally like to read. But, everyone has their own style I suppose. Still, tho, it was certainly a nice showing for a first time around. Keep droppin. Peace.

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	Adamant depravity, what are the odds of honesty?, A mirage of chronological relics of what he ought to be, Audible words shaped to detonate; Grab the tourniquet, The onomatopoeia left him burned & split to learn to quit, But thoughts spurned with grit yet churned with wit, He's earned it quick; Back to attack & crack the whip, With tactical grip & a placard plastered with quip, Back at her hip... Sanguine energy through a genuine vent, Her pulchritude skewed by notions of discontent, Plenty of fish in the ocean but it's focus whale spent.