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Cuba
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Topic: Battle Royale #3 Posted: 02 January 2017 at 7:43pm |
BATTLE ROYALE #3
CONTESTANTS (this is the running order) #1 Spume Corrupt #2 S Dubb #3 Kiki Spirez #4 Slip #5 Rutter Knows Best #6 Trizzy Tre #7 Beans #8 Law Reserve list If you want to be added to reserve list, please see thread in News & Announcements RULES
ROUND 1 Spume Corrupt drops by MIDNIGHT 4th January S Dubb drops 48hrs later Voting closes 48hrs after S Dubb drops (or if there is a 3 vote KO / best of 7 applies) These are UK times. My decision is final. Edited by Cuba - 03 January 2017 at 6:16am |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 06 January 2017 at 12:01am |
This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely!
Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits" Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon Stupid...... |
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S Dubb
Groupie Joined: 03 December 2016 Location: Cincinnati Status: Offline Points: 404 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-7-1 Form: LLLLNL |
Posted: 08 January 2017 at 7:48pm |
You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In...,
Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks... You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished... Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished... I'll deliver the "L!" Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League... I'm smoking this herb! No roll up needed, Dutch Free... Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"... I'm choking this joke, squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple... |
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Topical Twist League= 1-0
1-2 Punch League= 0-3 Regular Text= 0-1 Alias= 0-1 Topical= 1-0 Horrorcore= 1-0 Overall= 3-5 |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 08 January 2017 at 8:42pm |
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Rutter knows best
Senior Moderator Joined: 15 March 2014 Location: Manny hood Status: Offline Points: 4529 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-12-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 09 January 2017 at 12:21am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me I fuck with the reference, decent angle. I would of put the even after win. I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again okay reference- felt it coulda been executed concept harsher though S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits" Didn't like this Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon Had to google doubloon. it ties in okay and the name plays there. could've been tightened up. Stupid...... Your the champ. I seen better and you know you can do better. First two lines took this for you. It did the job and pretty convincingly. Could of been tweaked a little and would've added a lot still. vs Post Status: -- Unmarked -- You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In..., Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks... Tying in a set up to punch would of helped here. The fact yur lines are stretched makes this loose weight here You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished... Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished... okay personal in the set but not sure if true. Punch wasn't there though I'll deliver the "L!" Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League... I'm smoking this herb! No roll up needed, Dutch Free... nice personal in the set up but you followed it with the most played concept done through the ages Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"... I'm choking this joke, squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple... Potential in the set up, but just followed wih descriptive text. Overall there was a pattern to your verse. You fall into the topical hole of doing a lot of describing. You aren't tying in your 1st and 2nd lines. On a personal taste level your punch has more room to work with and carry's a punchier feel when it's longer than your set up. You gotta forget the usual sensibilities of writing a bit and work on the punch. Everything come second to the punchline. Vote Spume |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 09 January 2017 at 7:00pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again (I liked the way you opened here,nothing to heavy I thought,but it still had merit via the personal attached,so yeah decent first bar,however the 2nd bar was much better,a nice bit of wordplay/personal which just added extra weight,plus you used the OM he did in a collab with Damage well overall,good punch..) S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits" Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon (yep another good personal here but the punch itself read flat really,the wordplay was good again I thought,it just seemed to lack any real power really still it all counts still, however you did mess the wordplay up some though,by typing the 2 Ss and then "Hits" lessened the overall blow,I would of just typed "hit" so the 2 Ss would of fitted better, 1 s at the start and 1 at the end,but I do get the angle you was a typing there,I've no quirms with the play on closing though that was good,a nice punch to end with,the set up seemed to look redundant at first,but it does tie in on the whole,and to cap it all,the flow was good too..) You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In..., Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks... You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished... Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished... (liked the simile in the first bar there it was quite creative really,stretched/bellies and pregnant chicks,as personals go this was aimed well also,nothing really to heavy as punches go,but still a punch all the same,but the 2nd bar was worded well and again served as a good personal,and the punch for me seemed more of a jab also,it was no swing or blow..) I'll deliver the "L!" Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League... I'm smoking this herb! No roll up needed, Dutch Free... Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"... I'm choking this joke, squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple... (OK I get the concept and theme here about cannabis and "L's",but this didn't work for me as he was up there in the contenders spot when the league was winding to a close, so it makes he's earlier losses seem irrelevant,the 2nd bar also had like Spume some nice aggression entow,and the running back in circles was good,the next line had some decent multi's too,didn't quite match up or marry with the first line though,but still it had merit,good verse..) Overall pluses and minuses for both here,and to be fair quite close aswell,I had to read them both twice before I made this choice,and for me Spume gets this just,here's why,I thought he's personals were better aimed and more of them also,S Dub you held your own here,but this is all called see that separated you both,unlucky dude.. Vote...Spume.peace. |
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Beans
Superior Member Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 10 January 2017 at 6:59pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me This was decent..needs to be worded better i think. so this was light I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again this was nice. I too just used a damage concept but not as a personal directed at him. S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits" nah...not a fan of these bars. stretch for me Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon Stupid...... this was ok. nothing wowing tbh vs You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In..., Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks... This is one of the most played concepts ever bro... not to mention so many rappers have said this shit before. Miss You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished... Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished... Basic punch here. nothing really hitting here I'll deliver the "L!" Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League... I'm smoking this herb! No roll up needed, Dutch Free... Another played concept bro...Think about how many years ppl been doing this. basic punches like that have been done to death Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"... I'm choking this joke, squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple... Nothing hitting here. too statementish. nothing clever that makes me think about shit Overall - One sided battle but i've seen better from spume. Dubs you gotta come up with more clever shit bro. Fresher concepts. like use current events and try to flip them in to a angle with some humour or aggressive shit bro. But i got spume taking this easy for better punches,personals everything
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 10 January 2017 at 7:12pm |
3-0 KO...onto the next one.
Spume vs Kiki. Kiki drops first. Within 48hrs of this post. Spume has 48hrs to respond. 48hr voting window opens from when Spume drops. Voting closes on 48hrs or if KO or best of 7 rule is activated first. |
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Kiki Spirez
Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4374 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 12 January 2017 at 6:14pm |
Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got,
No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today, Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth.. |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 14 January 2017 at 6:18pm |
You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled
That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing" |
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S Dubb
Groupie Joined: 03 December 2016 Location: Cincinnati Status: Offline Points: 404 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-7-1 Form: LLLLNL |
Posted: 15 January 2017 at 5:09am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Spume: You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle decent opener, light jab, good multi Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach not feeling this one, not much of a punch more of a light jab This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison decent punch, good metaphore This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing" bad closer, flow was off and wasn't feeling the set up or delivery on this one Overall it seems to me that you rushed this verse.... I wasn't feeling it at all, one of the worst I've seen from you..... Your punches weren't landing hard, you didn't use any personals, and even your flow was off in the end...... Poor showing from you here homie...... Kiki: Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, Good opener..... I like the personal, it landed a nice punch.. This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, Decent personal, more of a jab then a punch though Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today, I like the humor of this, good punch Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth.. Eh, not really feeling this closer, the whole spume froth lines are played Overall this was a good verse though..... You first bar was what sealed this battle for you, that was a hard hitting personal...... You came with a lot of personals and landed more punches..... Good verse.... Opener- Kiki Closer- Tie Punches- Kiki Personals- Kiki Flow- Kiki Wordplay- Spume Creativity- Tie Enjoyment- Kiki Vote- Kiki Reason- I feel he wanted this battle more..... I feel like Spume didn't put no effort into this battle and dropped light..... Kiki came with some good personals that landed some solid blows..... So this was an easy choice for me..... good battle guys.....
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1-2 Punch League= 0-3 Regular Text= 0-1 Alias= 0-1 Topical= 1-0 Horrorcore= 1-0 Overall= 3-5 |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 19 January 2017 at 10:56am |
More votes please. I want a minimum of 3 to progress onto the next one.
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Trizzy Tre
Superior Member Joined: 28 March 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5101 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 30-7-1 Form: WLWLWW |
Posted: 19 January 2017 at 4:47pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Kiki Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, ....Nice opener and personal which you used well. 3/5 This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, ....Nice flow on this, set up was cool decent punch. 2.5/5 Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today ....This was cool. Again nice flow which pushed the punchline. 3/5 Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth.. .... I see you went to use some defense on the closer. lol not really much impact. 2/5 Total: 10.5 Spume: You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle ....Ok'ish opener. No real tough angle on this one. 2/5 Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach ....This was just decent, nothing to hard hitting. 2.5/5 This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison ....Lol this was funny, decent play, so far the best line you've landed. 3/5 This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing" ......Meh...Not really feeling this one bro. Thought it missed completely. 1.5/5 Total: 9 Overall: Keeks did his thing. The angles were worded much better then Spume and used the angles much more effectively. Spume my dude, this wasn't anywhere near your writing ability. Felt more of a quick key then anything. Have to go with Kiki on this one as bad for bar he was sharper. MVGT - Kiki |
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Rutter knows best
Senior Moderator Joined: 15 March 2014 Location: Manny hood Status: Offline Points: 4529 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-12-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 19 January 2017 at 11:39pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, Decent opener, no complaints. This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, didn't connect the personal in the set up to the punch effectively, second line okay jab Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today, i see the angle your playing off could've been better but a current angle still Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth.. i thought it was an okay play nice turn of phrase i haven't seen before vs You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle i thought the angle was okay but it wasn't presented well. Could of same with much less Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach i thought this was a decent personal play, i would've prefered crowns out your teeth personally This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison rhyme felt a little off when i read it but it's an kay play i just feel once again u could of said it with less This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing this was an okay attempt at a flip just wish once again you refined it more. Tbh i though both had a similar level of play/personals going on. Not much difference between on the creativity i thought they both had a nice mix. No haymakers but no real misses. At the end of the day though fell like kiki presented his better. Spume i feel your execution overall was a bit sloppy, rushed while kiki you kept it all fairly tight. So yeh vote kiki.
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 20 January 2017 at 9:35am |
Thanks guys, appreciate that.
3-0 KO...onto the next one. Slip vs Kiki. Slip drops first. Within 48hrs of this post. Kiki has 48hrs to respond. 48hr voting window opens from when Kiki drops (min 3 votes required). Voting closes on 48hrs or if KO or best of 7 rule is activated first |
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Slip
Standard Member Joined: 04 June 2013 Location: St Johns. N.L. Status: Offline Points: 1612 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 14-33-0 Form: LLLWLW |
Posted: 22 January 2017 at 2:57am |
What kind of grown ass man gonna sit there calling himself kiki I guess a cocknocking donut punching faggot thinks it's easy The truth is sinking in, Keeks defenceless against the laughter This hypocrites an actor ,a gay white supremacist claiming to be a rapper A fucking klew klucks klan fan with all those Kays he kicks around Kiki's kratos kind sounds like a racist joke put together by a clown this blokes lifes hoax I'm feeling bad for Alice and Endeavor Having to follow someone like kiki when they can really do better |
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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
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Kiki Spirez
Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4374 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 23 January 2017 at 7:54pm |
Your name means 'failure', so just quit with the slick shit, Insult to injury, you're the only time they don't 'feel' a 'Slip disk', You cling to your partner like you were married to him! Fact is, you've only had 5 stars when you were carried by Crim, Like people speak to YOU when they need a word with the bosses, Leader? You're responsibile for a third of their losses, He stands for some causes, but i'll make a cunt sit, Telling Spume who to defend against, when he's never won SHIT.. |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 23 January 2017 at 9:28pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. OK guys lets do this.. Slip,I liked the personal clowning approach you came with here,in fact the whole verse was personals really,you had some nice concepts here too,the KKK play was a good shot also,and the fact you added humour brought another level to this overall,from gay supremacist to him being an actor,you certainly made the most of your ammo, even down to a cheeky shot at his crew,the angles you came with were good,some not to orignal though but you made the most of what you had,I also like the fact you didn't try to make this a complex piece,a plain and simple drop with good direction/ aimed contents coupled with a good flow/vibe,your punches were present also via the personals/humour,shit there was even a little wordplay to be had here also,so props on the whole for delivering a piece that stayed constant,good work.. KiKi straight out the gate you came with an approach that was not only personal,but direct with punches also,your drop had some nice directed aggressive come backs entow,your wordplay did its job well by adding some depth here too,this piece seemed to have a cold vibe running alongside it that made it stand up and out,and like Slip you also had some lol moments also,the bar about Spume and the belts/and the 3rd of the losses lines was real creative,not only in the obvious battle record,but crew members too,your flow/tempo and vibe were good and seem to add weight overall,and the angles you came with were ripe I thought,you seemed to be up for this battle aswell which does nothing but add to the concepts..good work.. Overall a good battle here,I feel Slip did well with his offering and the angle in which he came with,both had a good flow popping too,but for me there is a winner here and that was Kiki,here's why,he had all the same sort of elements that Slip had,but then some,not only did his punches land harder,but his aggression and partly factual content took it for me,Slips sorry to be voting against you here,but I know you'll appreciate my honesty.. Vote...KiKi..peace. |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 23 January 2017 at 9:48pm |
Gonna break these short verses down bar for bar as I see em
Slippy 1..So opening up bro and first thing I noticed is the lack of tie in between line 1and2....That should be fundamental at a certain level? "Cock knocking dagnat" WTF Is that mean End rhymes was weak! This was not a great start man... 2.. Second bar...Wow, just wow... Slippy my bro, it is simply not good enough to fabricate on some major bs I mean I know for a 100%Fact that Kiki is not a white supremacist!!!!! See how this bar falls flat on its ass? 3..See above why this one could never work! I get the angle with the KKK Thing, but you have done nothing to make it work, no clever play or tie in 4.. Attempt s at good end rhymes thru out and some nice internal s made this read bearable, but the punches was AWOL, this closer had Nathan's my bro Think about it ... Alice and Endy don't have one quarter the experience with LA As Kiki does, plus he's like top tier and top ten of all time or some shit.. That shit had no mileage.... Mate, I kept it real with you! I was a lil dissatisfied with this one! Feel like you took a step back Let's hope Kikadontis dropping the ball eh Can't see it though Back soon |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 23 January 2017 at 11:32pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Kiki S I will keep it real with you to bruv 1.. Opener, it's classic Kiki here, Or at least one of your downsides! All the work in the second line was obvious..So the result is a forced overall feel...Think about it! If line one wasn't forced than why don't it makes sense?.... Slip does not mean failure! Punchline was dope as fuck though, really get it 2.. This bar!!! Perfect example of the first bars problem....Here you tie them in perfect Funny.... Insulting.... That's a recipe 3.. This is Kik rolling with the punches Factual, Insulting, Funny 4...What can I say? I mean you have compared him with an ameaboa to a champ! When you yourself are only second to him!..... Lol I jest you fam Overall 60%dope Against 7%dope VOTE,... Kuki for the more experience drop start to finish |
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