Text Battle Archive: Battle Royale #3

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Beans..

Listen fuck boy...
You needed help in a 1 bar battle league! pathetic production of course
Ironic you brought in 'LORD for the long run'.. while real battle HE had you commin up short!

(Beans good opening bar here,it came off as a rugged and gritty personal that hit for
me,plus the punch was directed well and landed also,I thought you worked the angle
well to be honest,a good shot,and the factual element also added weight to this bars
strength..)

& while we on that subject? Ya bars all season werent bout gettin heavy!
Day in & day out You put work into that league! Till I Clocked you out in the Semi's

(this bar here to me seemed kind of like a statement really,and although there was a
punch/personal to be had,its reliance on the link from a already used punch gave this
a recycled feel about it,although it clearly isn't recycled,this bar is strange due to that
link in that I can't decide if that was a creative move or not?,still didn't Really have
the same sprite as your opening bar though,but it still carried merit along with it..)

Vs trizz you hardly edged a win, You've never beat me so go & Tell SYN I sent you
No matter if its 'Votes or bars', YOU've always had to Mention BEANS to see WIN credentials!!^^

(now strangely again here,this bar was a good subtle shot really,like your saying he
gets wins by association to you,or like your his host in some way,so I feel the personal
worked there,the punch was an attempt at heavy blow,which when coupled with your
verses obesity Problem gave it a drawn out vibe,and that's kind of been the problem
with your drop really,your bars have been a stretched affair as of yet..)

I King shit! while you survive off my scraps - RUT, you not a leader
We could 'recruit DTK while he goes ghost' & still you'd always be Empires Bottom feeder

(yeah a good closing bar this,your punch power is back here also,due to a good bit of
wordplay this landed well,the personal was i thought nice too,the inclusion of DTK OM
was in the creative realm I believe,although its still groaning under its weight issue,i
liked this bar on the whole,as it was aimed real well,a nice parting shot..)


RKB..


LP was a food battle, 2nd bars a statement..fake stop that trash
Lies can get you killed n you Always die against Concrete FACTS

(always a good way to open a verse with factual content,that's aided with good punch/personal,the set up was a flip,or at the least sailing on the fringes of being
one,which did for me take some sting away from the bar, on the whole,but it still
landed with weight..)

Levi came in fancy dress as a Mexican n still properly clowned kid
Jokes aside..how you lost that made Empire look like the comedy outfit

(yeah I liked the diss via humour here,plus I remember that battle too,(surprise surprise,i voted in it),a tongue in cheek affair which again is factual,this bar also
had the clowning factor entow also,came off as a simple no frills well aimed bar..)

I didn't vote on you n Ki, it's a good thing i hadn't bothered
Funny you dropped Bombz in your votes, That day you were cannon fodder

(again good bar here,more aimed than the previous one,the wordplay was good and clean also,and yeah the punch/personal found it's target too,a good shot,the slight
sarcastic tone here was a good edge I thought,it added to the bars overall weight on
landing..

King? Been chasing the thrown for 3 years, n this cunts got destroyed
Only way dude get a turn in the chair's as a fucking judge on the voice

(the comic value alone made this a good closing bar,the wordplay was witty and clever really,as it followed the set up well here,the (crunch),sorry I mean punch landed well and the personal was even doing its thing here,a good alround bar this,a complete one
I thought,plus the angle which you delivered played well again on the whole,a good
closing bar that..)

Overall a good battle here,but the winner is for me RKB,here's why,he verse had the
better consistency and humour really,ppl may think that going 2nd is an advantage,
as he did skate close to flipping a couple of times,but he prevailed in the end,Beans
your verse was also good,the difference for me was the weight issue you had with
your bars,and the statement at times tendencies..

Vote..RKB...peace.

Na fam...

I got next

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Rutts
Opening bar: I liked this one it had some nice wordplay, maybe a little indirect but it still lands a hit
Next:Lord plays getting a bit tired so this Only had minimal impact but still was directed well enough for a jab
Next: Liked this one it had a strong dismissive feel and that clowning approach,. Good hit
Closer: You already know I'm gonna call this one too simplistic, you could have dug deeper for the final shot

Lord
Opener: Not too bad here but I would say watch out with this kind of approach, if you start with complimentary wording the punchline needs to be killer.
TBH the 1/2 Concept is already overworked on Rutts
Next: This was good, directed well Concept was dope but with a few tweaks to the wording it could have been a KO
NEXT: Maybe this made sense to you? With all due respect though the actual punchline just wasn't working for me
Closer: You didn't bring this home very well fam, def missed the opportunity to hit Rutt here, a fire personal would have given you a confident win


Both you guys came with a couple hits and a couple of missed shots
Two solid reads with regards to flow can't really say one or the other was better
A close battle here but I do have a preference
For me Rutter had the bar of the battle with his voter of the month play Lord was close behind with his nice rice roll of the dice
BEYOND that I feel Rutt used the rest of his verse to stay hitting at various levels and also showed out on some creative skills with his opener
Lord I feel missed a few with some strange angles like his closer, ultimately his verse was less consistent

Vote Rutter

Well played both though

Let's try this one again...

3-0 KO, onto the FINAL ROUND

Law v RKB

Law drops first. Within 48hrs of this post.
RKB has 48hrs to respond.
48hr voting window opens from when RKB drops.
Voting closes on 48hrs or if KO or best of 7 rule is activated first.

Whole site want piece of this body, it's clear u out grown ya spark
..Nowadays u just treading Waterloo so i'm ripping every Bonapart
You've hit the pits so try butter up those weak plays, stop it dude
Even you know ya bars stink with no Lynx like teenage locker rooms
For a while they defended ya no shows, now it's fuck him, He's weak
Back then you threw dollars at Z's..Now people would pay to see me put you to sleep
Spume..Zin Goose some Cain kid too, the no show struggle doesn't end there
After Beans n Exhale him for just droppin..Its a fuckin breath of fresh air!


expo's 
He's called Louie/Lou
Links/Lynx (Deodorant)
Zin won $100 off law last Identity crisis
Exhale/Ex hail

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I liked the laws opener landed real well nice start
His second bar was a decent shot not as hard as the opener
3rd bar had a nice flow but missing the sting of a good punch
And the closer I liked how he bossed him around nice way to finish

And between ruts opener and the laws I prefer the laws it just landed a lot better
And ruts second bar the set up tied in well with the punch and it was decent but the
You've hit the pits so try butter up those weak plays, was worded awkwardly I think " so try butter up?
3rd bar was a bit stretched out and you already used the work weak
That's a go to concept with law and the no shows so you have to make it work a bit better to do some real damage but props for throwing that IC shot in there I learned something
the closer was a better shot at the no show angle but in the end again I prefer the way the law closed it up compared to rut
So over all I think the law took it at the start and the finish and in the middle it was pretty equal
For all the reasons above
MFVGT: the law

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Rutter wants to be the ICON with 1 bar, well... That kinda died on the spot
Cause when your 'workin with a small frame' it's to easy to size up ya shots

[At first glance this looks dope, but I'm analyzing here so I gotta take a closer look! The link between lines is obvious but I'm seeing a bar that took EFFORT to write and dream up but didn't really punch, the opening line didn't really make sense! That's usually a sign that overly contrived end rhymes and sub plots are more concerning than actual punches.... So this was a miss for me. but I do respect your ability for th clever thought process]

and he decided to drop a King of the Mic, but we did not absorb it
Even he was thinking, Oh God.... Please Stop Recordin (1.50 in) 

[Needed that link here, don't usually like the distraction, this was a decent approach though, it did connect with the humorous side of things and caught him with the clown shoes on,... But I think you could have used some stronger wording! @"He decided to blah blah blah" Should have been getting at him.... You had a dope angle here so finding the right OPENING​line for it is when hay-makers are born.. DECENT hit but had a lot more potential]

Go delete it, or in this 'manny hood' you'll just catch another beatin'
Cause if we locate 'rut land in here' he just moved to the other region

[Gotta APPRECIATE the research here man! I'm from the UK and I never even heard of Rutland...So that pesky link thing had to be utilized once again... So at least now I know it's the other region! But I think you are on to something here, maybe there are other regions also?? That was bad wording man.. Anyways the old classical​ recycled recital of the LAND/PUNCH numberroid, I got no problems with them joints but they needs to be hard hitting or original twist on a clever angle type deals man, even switching a few words around would have improved this! The punch was he has moved to another region? Where was the aggressive approach? Who cares where he lives has lived or will ever live? You should'a been talking bout how he's not gonna be living! KILL people in abattle]

your not in LA Eden, since your a mod technically I'm your boss
and you haven't done a fuckin' thing, you can close this loss!!

[ Wtf is LA Eden??? Am I an Apple short of a picnic here? Wtf is LA EDEN? PUT that to one side for a minute! It's the old pulling rank numberroid here, but is it factually correct? Rutts Been pretty busy in your absence, plus Mods can't close they own battles! Your last bar just proved that... Not feeling this bro]
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Whole site want piece of this body, it's clear u out grown ya spark
..Nowadays u just treading Waterloo so i'm ripping every Bonapart

[So did this really make sense bro?, I been at LA for some time now so I can see what you are getting at with the opening line, next line feels clever I get the treading water angle but the loo bit i just making it look like a failed reach just so you could get the bone bit in! Which I did actually like! So I'm seeing an aggressive over reach here that didnt quite connect fully]

You've hit the pits so try butter up those weak plays, stop it dude
Even you know ya bars stink with no Lynx like teenage locker rooms

[Wow this was a pretty dope rebuttal on most of his verse, it looks original to me and it feels like you are going right at him with this direct approach, should have worded it a bit harder! Though I guess stinking bars is pretty dissmisive, I liked this one]

For a while they defended ya no shows, now it's fuck him, He's weak
Back then you threw dollars at Z's..Now people would pay to see me put you to sleep

[Cos some people know there history some people are gonna get shit better, watch out for that Rutt; Luckily for you I know my history, it was funny and worked around some personal approach but it old news and mainly conjecture I for one would not pay you to put him to sleep! I got enough bills man]

Spume..Zin Goose some Cain kid too, the no show struggle doesn't end there
After Beans n Exhale him for just droppin..Its a fuckin breath of fresh air!

[Prolly an overworked angle on Law, but I like the aggressive nature of the bar, and the approach at clever wording almost worked perfect]


Not the easiest battle to vote on and I know you guys will appreciate the feedback
So after I broke this down I realised you was both just throwing wild punches at each other, some worked most didnt
In the end it was Rutter who took it for me with his more aggressive approach in an otherwise even battle...
Vote Rutter
Good luck to both of you

Hear hear..

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Lawzilla

Rutter wants to be the ICON with 1 bar, well... That kinda died on the spot
Cause when your 'workin with a small frame' it's to easy to size up ya shots

this shit is alright, considering the material, this coulda/shoulda/woulda been the deathblow, but its a solid enough opener.



and he decided to drop a King of the Mic, but we did not absorb it
Even he was thinking, Oh God.... Please Stop Recordin (1.50 in)

haha, this is where you shine. your personals are always significant and potent. nice punchline here, decent research, relevant, good stuff.

Go delete it, or in this 'manny hood' you'll just catch another beatin'
Cause if we locate 'rut land in here' he just moved to the other region

solid enough nameplay, nothing out of this world. but it hit, was direct and added a little change of pace.

your not in LA Eden, since your a mod technically I'm your boss
and you haven't done a fuckin' thing, you can close this loss!!

this wasnt the greatest closer of all time /KanyeVoice but I think that you know that. maybe a King(boss)/kiss the ring/I have the crown type of play. but meh, you had to fire first and you did your thing here.

Rut-Row
Whole site want piece of this body, it's clear u out grown ya spark
..Nowadays u just treading Waterloo so i'm ripping every Bonapart

nice opener. real mean and gritty. idda liked to see more on the spark play ala Jay-Z to Nas..but I digress.

You've hit the pits so try butter up those weak plays, stop it dude
Even you know ya bars stink with no Lynx like teenage locker rooms

meh, this coulda hit better. wheres the tie from bars to teenage locker rooms? feel what im saying. if its a deodorant play, great.. but keep the play intact. this was a cool concept but I wasnt blown away on execution…no pun?

For a while they defended ya no shows, now it's fuck him, He's weak
Back then you threw dollars at Z's..Now people would pay to see me put you to sleep

like the flow until now people.. and also felt the execution missed. I get the Z's (zin)/sleep.. but if anybody noshows more than Zin?..you had so much substance that you left on the table here.

Spume..Zin Goose some Cain kid too, the no show struggle doesn't end there
After Beans n Exhale him for just droppin..Its a fuckin breath of fresh air!


bah.. gotta say this was a no no no from me. a reference to zin back to back is meh. and ex hail.. I get it.. but I dunno. it didnt work for me. as a closer, not sure you did a walk off homer.

I guess in closing.. this was a neat little battle. I felt that LAW had some questionable angles.. but all of them were direct. I felt that Rutter had the momentum in the opening and just let it get away from him. if this was a boxing match.. LAW landed the power shots and Rutter had a great first round.


Vote = Law