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Cuba
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Topic: [Text] The Law vs Intrikit (3-0) Posted: 23 February 2017 at 10:00pm |
Stalin owns the dead dictators car parking space in the afterlife.
Plus, Law wins by KO |
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daydizzle89
Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW |
Posted: 23 February 2017 at 5:55pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Intrikit - The opener is actually not bad as you put in some factual content. That is a nice way to open this. The second line fell short for me. Again i liked how you brought up his testicles as its another factual statement. The jewish statement was ehhh. not feeling it. not really a good bar here. That alcholic dad line was pretty nice. The smallpox line was pretty good. I actually am enjoying this verse for what it is. Overall Intrikit, this is one of the better verses i have read from you. Not bad. The Law - The finish a race was a nice and subtle punch. Now that second bar was really nice. Good word play and nice factual references. That death toll line was also really nice. Much more punchier and written well. That artist line was dope, many people didnt know he was a little painter that got rejected from ART-School. He couldnt paint people well. Damn, bringin up Hitler going to jail lol. not feeling the bar with Rice the receiver. Nice line on the bunker and his suicide. Ending was nice. Overall - MVGT THE LAW. His verse has more punch to it and his mechanics were on point. He used more wordplay and his flow was on point. It was a good battle and i enjoyed both verses. |
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S Dubb
Groupie Joined: 03 December 2016 Location: Cincinnati Status: Offline Points: 404 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-7-1 Form: LLLLNL |
Posted: 05 February 2017 at 9:39am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Law: Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race" Nice opener, affective punch which was also personal... Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country Dope wordplay and another solid punch So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll Okay personal but just a light jab here Go ahead.. 'Hitler, be creative and paint that picture'... start investing in catharsis and brush aside those thoughts cause you even got rejected as an artist Again just a slight jab ^ got that 'best or greatest' tarnished and confined in what you are 'Landsberg Prison' was the only time this Hitler landed behind those bars Creative, nicely worded and a decent punch My USSR on the battlefield taking the life of believers The whole world was happy to retire this 'jerry' unlike rice the receiver No this was a miss But it was an iron piece and swinging with one ball that sent him under He was always 'sub-par'... first shot by himself and he never "left the bunker" Nice personal and a decent punch He began a fake and fraud, even stole the swastika from the Indians Now ended off his reign as a grammar nazi, thats used as a lame ass idiom Not really feeling his ender, punch missed Overall a prety solid verse.... You had some dope punches and a lot of good personals..... Almost every bar packed a punch, so I have to say a solid verse overall, good drop.... Intrikit: He's as naive as can be... damn right I betrayed this dummy he signed a peace treaty with me and I still invaded his country Not much, light jab Then held your damn son for ransom but you refused to pay up, who cares if if i got one nut? now you have none Swing and a miss, this bar was just filler I wasn't surprised though, always thought you would do this my advisors told me some time ago, you're probably Jewish, Again no landing if one thing is for sure, it's that you rhyme pathetic, fag this abuse is so bad I feel like your alcoholic dad Nothing hard, but a light jab You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox Decent punch, best landing so far You Fancy yourself a cowboy? that's gay as hell. Hey asshole, you should get a lasso and HANG yourself Mostly filler, punch missed Your best quote is one you stole from your ghost writer Mein kamph is better than anything you ever wrote, biter Okay nice jab, light punch, yet this is your best bar I don't respect you, so I talk to you like a bitch My mustache is a must have, you tried to copy the shit Another miss Overall you produced a lot of facts in this verse, but you didn't produce them in the right way to land affective punches...... You had decent set ups but then you fell flat when trying to deliver the actual punch.... You done a great job with research, just should have worked harder on producing solid punchlines..... You had too many misses and not enough landings Punches- Law Personals- Tie Wordplay- Law Flow- Law Creativity- Law Enjoyment- Law Vote- The Law The reason I voted for The Law is because he produced a lot of solid punches..... He came out swinging harder and had just as many personals as Intrikit, but he used them more affectively...... Intrikit just stated a bunch of facts, without using them to produce affective punches...... So in my opinion The Law took this battle easily by simply landing more punches...... |
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Topical Twist League= 1-0
1-2 Punch League= 0-3 Regular Text= 0-1 Alias= 0-1 Topical= 1-0 Horrorcore= 1-0 Overall= 3-5 |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 03 February 2017 at 12:59pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Intrikit your verse was good on the whole,the topic did have factual content within, which was an added bonus here,plus the vibe/tempo was present also,to be honest it was a good verse overall,the gripe I do have is with detail,I would of liked to have read about his WW1 yrs,him getting gassed and his temporary blindness,all that severes as a back drop to his bitter thought process and make up,even his hatred and ideology,it's the lack of imagery that is really the drawback to this piece,brcause with it it would of stood up and out at a reader,I feel you did your homework well but the concept/angles were flat,this verse just didn't have any real ambience about it for me,it seemed to rigid in approach and directness,but i'll stress now it was a good read still.. Law I liked your approach to this theme,you actually turned this into to a character battle,which I thought was creative here,also you incorporated punches to your verse also,which added more weight to this topical,the angles/concept was ripe overall,you even had the bonus of including humour within,I liked how you belittled your opponents character too,you Really did show up for this topical here,and the creativity was off the hook aswell,i would highlight a few lines, but where do i start?,the whole fucking piece is a highlight in truth,from flow/wordplay/punches and slants,all were ripe n humorous, a very enjoyable take and read here.. Overall a good showing and offering from both here,I thought Intrikit did well by using facts with his verse,but Law brought another dimension to his piece with its approach and humour,and for me was a clear winner here today,unlucky Intrikit,Law was just to much for you in this tussle,but props still for a good verse.. Vote...Law..peace. |
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Beans
Superior Member Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 01 February 2017 at 12:55am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. this was an interesting battle....Intrikits verse i felt was just a history leason where law came with some dope punches here. was far more creative than intrikit. Laws start was dope enough to take this "Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race" Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll" Intrikit had this bar i thought was nice You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox but besides that this was one sided all around V/Law |
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 13 January 2017 at 4:37pm |
Hitler started his little brigade but history states this image was fake He'll always be remembered as the guy that ran but couldn't "finish a race" Anne I'm just being frank... It's a clear fact your gaffe couldn't touch me Just like your mustache, I shaved down your troops and took half ya country So Mr. Killer, 'The Great Dictator', the war with the world must've had your head swole Cause when it came down to the numbers, I had 4 times your death toll Go ahead.. 'Hitler, be creative and paint that picture'... start investing in catharsis and brush aside those thoughts cause you even got rejected as an artist ^ got that 'best or greatest' tarnished and confined in what you are 'Landsberg Prison' was the only time this Hitler landed behind those bars My USSR on the battlefield taking the life of believers The whole world was happy to retire this 'jerry' unlike rice the receiver But it was an iron piece and swinging with one ball that sent him under He was always 'sub-par'... first shot by himself and he never "left the bunker" He began a fake and fraud, even stole the swastika from the Indians Now ended off his reign as a grammar nazi, thats used as a lame ass idiom |
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intrikit
Newbie I am Vib. Klean Joined: 11 September 2015 Status: Offline Points: 370 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-4-0 Form: WLLLL |
Posted: 13 January 2017 at 3:10pm |
He's as naive as can be... damn right I betrayed this dummy
he signed a peace treaty with me and I still invaded his country Then held your damn son for ransom but you refused to pay up, who cares if if i got one nut? now you have none I wasn't surprised though, always thought you would do this my advisors told me some time ago, you're probably Jewish, if one thing is for sure, it's that you rhyme pathetic, fag this abuse is so bad I feel like your alcoholic dad You were picked on as a kid, the stress left you with bald spots those scars go even deeper than the ones you got from Smallpox You Fancy yourself a cowboy? that's gay as hell. Hey asshole, you should get a lasso and HANG yourself Your best quote is one you stole from your ghost writer Mein kamph is better than anything you ever wrote, biter I don't respect you, so I talk to you like a bitch My mustache is a must have, you tried to copy the shit All facts...i read his shitty biography |
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 11 January 2017 at 6:01pm |
16 Lines 48 Hours Stalin (The Law) -vs- Hitler (Intrikit) |
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