Open Mic: [KOTM] Catching fire [KOTM]

Death comes for all, whether you’re meek or stand tough
I can see through that bowler hat, Mr. blind man’s bluff
Bernard’s a pervert, leering at women he finds attractive
Who see his cane and don’t realise his eyes are active
His time will come, but let’s switch the topic
In the cup that I clasp is a drink and every sip is toxic
But I’m gulping it down, yeah, that’s twisted logic
These fools lack the foresight, that shit’s myopic
To see the reckoning that’s beckoning
That those train track clatters are threatening
The cart jolts, sparks vault, mother grabs her child’s hand
Father too concerned with eyeing up the waitresses thighs and…
Thinking wicked thoughts, if only he knew then
What that waitress used to do to crude men!!
Get that kitchen knife, hold it hella hard
And cut up dumb punks like an old credit card
The train rolls on, picking up, gathering speed
They’re all about to get smoked like African weed
That dumb fuck at the back got distracted
Left a tea towel on the stove and that’s not an action
 Far from dire, like bitch, that’s a pyre
And now it’s like the Hunger Games, catching fire
Panic setting in as the smoke’s billowing
Hope glimmering, as they rush to smash the windows in
Then they made that fatal mistake…
Blind Man bluffing grabbed at the emergency brake
As the train hurtled round that wooden bridge, too late
Momentum had already sealed their fate
Train left the tracks at an uncontrollable rate
And trust, from gravity there is no escape

Yeah, this was technically sound. Mechanics are crisp and flow was nice. Conceptually this was a really nice piece. The way you incorporated this blind dude and shit was top tier topical writing. The way you used the picture was really dope. I mean come on Cubez, write more motherfucker. I dont know why you dont want to waste a few hours and give us entertainment man. Fuck sake, Back to the writing. You know you got it, we all know you got it and this was entertaining. Very classy writing sonz. 

Appreciate the feedback guys, thought it was a great topic and just wanted to get an entry in...

Strongly encourage others to get involved before the window closes

I totally forgot about this,i really liked the picture there's just so much happening,
tentacles and the hand round the blinds man's throat and shit,anyways..

This was a real creative piece of writing here Cuba,the blind man's bluff and the actual
placing or giving him an identity was solid,it just added to the mechanics and layering
on the whole,this was impressive on reading,from the perverted blind man down to
waitress and the man on the end who was nondescript was ripe,and all to a setting of
just one carriage on a line and in a line with others,(as train do),your multi syllables
were also present,your content was engaging and easily absorbed on reading also,i
think you did real well capturing this picture overall,and like others have stated (and
time being kind) you should do more drops yourself,as you certainly do give people
entertainment value with each one you've done and I've read thus far,i also liked the
inclusion of giving each character a role or a reason, that was a highlight in itself i
thought,i could go on,or even hash out a few bars,but i won't in fear that i might be
viewed as d/r and damaging my good name..lol..but truthfully Cube's this was a real
real ripe an enjoyable read thanks for posting,(and giving me a reminder about this
picture)...peace.