Text Battle Archive: [BL4] LA Battle Royale (solo) - Law vs Ill Scriptz |
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Cuba
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Topic: [BL4] LA Battle Royale (solo) - Law vs Ill Scriptz Posted: 26 July 2017 at 8:32pm |
BLOODLINES 4 Presents: Battle Royale For the Battle Royale title (we need to speak to someone in Marketing) CONTESTANTS Law Ill Scripturez Neek Scotty32 Concrete Ridley Squat Rutter Knows Best Lord Puente Minus: Whoever wins the tag title Contestants will fall into this event as they are eliminated from the Tag Battle Royale The Law, as incumbent champion, has elected to defend his title & therefore will be first up and has to defeat the entire field to retain his title. Rules 8 lines MAX Both battlers have 72hrs to drop from announcement of battle. No waiting for the other team. Max one 24hr extension per contestant during entire event Best of 5 votes OR Best of 3 votes if 72hrs have passed following final verse drop This is the battle thread. This is where you drop. |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 30 July 2017 at 12:11am |
Law standing there like
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 02 August 2017 at 7:00pm |
Let's get this party started...
Law vs Scotty32 Deadline = Midnight, Saturday 5th August Neek to battle the winner
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 04 August 2017 at 9:58pm |
A two-faced gemini tryna manage his identity, with an air of enmity from the sheriff's deputy the henchman attacks desperately, full of jealousy for the leader of this confederacy, Fuck this potassium addict, leave ya verse derelict from the shots i throw at it You must be coconuts tryna evict this fascist, goin up against ya leaders becomin a bad habit A despot ruler fears nothing from a lone minion, fallback or wake up in a Siberian prison The Kraken has risen an ya lack the vision, to defeat this monstrous written After I extinguish the Flame, ya won’t be advancing in this game, the literal definition of the domain name, punches so hard they take down LAs mainframe
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 05 August 2017 at 2:59pm |
It's been known that your cheap, 'opening this door' and now ya brought bargained keys
They'll all see 'scott tradein losses' and it's not from stock market fees (scotttrade) Battling the Law you put in place? Scotty knew he was fucked from the start The dictator never lasted his Architecture, cause he's always sucked at the art ^ I don't know why you keep trying, everything that your typing is trash That why 'Scott soft lines' have only been enjoyed with wiping your ass A sad lonely soul creates a community, it's easy to breakdown ya life After another loss... get ready for this threats to takedown the site. |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 05 August 2017 at 5:55pm |
32ski
1/ its a long bar here, I don't mind long bars but the filler should be hitting the opposing and aiding the flow I didn't see this landing a punch really, you def had a potential punchline concept if he is a Gemini because the two facething is believable, but it needed working better not to mention moving from the start of the bar to the end of it This was a missed opportunity 2/ Again this never really happened as a punch, the only potential thing in this bar for punch material was the banana angle but tied into how the fuck the binding properties of such fruit are the reason he is so full of shit! But you didn't so another miss 3/ this was bragging not punching....... 4/ erm, no this was more of the same so another missed opportunity Good to see you writing here scooter, I can see you had fun with it the work wasn't awful but it did need some refining A decent effort though. Well done |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 05 August 2017 at 6:22pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Lore 1/ well it's a more traditional looking verse here so on first read it is easier to connect with, as a punch it was basic in its approach, maybe if I understood how/if the opening line was relevant to the punch "bargained keys"? So a light contact lands here at least 2/ Its a short battle and you the hot fav so I get you have not put your full weight into this, so I really liked the Architecture Art angle but you already know it could have been presented much better...Still it's another hit and it's stepping up the gears a bit but still quite low impact 3/ this one I did not like,for me it backfired and left you looking like you was saying you enjoy to wipe his ass!, Despite being a workable concept the outcome was shitty 4/ not the greatest way to close out, not really seeing the punch here So you came in here and dropped a couple light punches and a couple of missed attempts It was enough to beat Scotty ...mainly because he failed to make any contact with his work No doubt we will see you needing to step it up in the coming rounds Vote Law |
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Sky Scrapur
Standard Member Joined: 21 October 2014 Status: Offline Points: 1133 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-1-0 Form: L |
Posted: 05 August 2017 at 7:45pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Scott A two-faced gemini tryna manage his identity, with an air of enmity from the sheriff's deputy the henchman attacks desperately, full of jealousy for the leader of this confederacy, "This intro did not pack a punch and that made it weak." Fuck this potassium addict, leave ya verse derelict from the shots i throw at it You must be coconuts tryna evict this fascist, goin up against ya leaders becomin a bad habit "The idea is there but the opportunity is wasted. You gotta punch to take down your opponent" A despot ruler fears nothing from a lone minion, fallback or wake up in a Siberian prison The Kraken has risen an ya lack the vision, to defeat this monstrous written "You got flow. The minion idea was an opportunity but i think you didn't make good use of it" After I extinguish the Flame, ya won’t be advancing in this game, the literal definition of the domain name, punches so hard they take down LAs mainframe "Punch attempted but didnt go well as i would expect. Flame? but we fightin the Law here so i think you could done better " Law It's been known that your cheap, 'opening this door' and now ya brought bargained keys They'll all see 'scott tradein losses' and it's not from stock market fees (scotttrade) "Ok opener. The punch is there but i feel it could've been executed better" Battling the Law you put in place? Scotty knew he was fucked from the start The dictator never lasted his Architecture, cause he's always sucked at the art "Yeah lol this is what im talking about. Relevant shxt, i liked the opener, good humor and the punch did land for me" ^ I don't know why you keep trying, everything that your typing is trash That why 'Scott soft lines' have only been enjoyed with wiping your ass "ok i just don't get this" A sad lonely soul creates a community, it's easy to breakdown ya life After another loss... get ready for this threats to takedown the site. "ok this too didnt punch for me" Overall soft battle. Best bar for me was from Law, the Artchitecture bar hence vote Law |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 05 August 2017 at 8:58pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. OK gents.. Scotty.. A two-faced gemini tryna manage his identity, with an air of enmity from the sheriff's deputy the henchman attacks desperately, full of jealousy for the leader of this confederacy, (yep i like this approach here playing the Law/rebellion angle,the punch although light landed true enough,but the damage was more in the personal/play on words here,its Like a reminder to stay in your lane bitch scenario..) Fuck this potassium addict, leave ya verse derelict from the shots i throw at it You must be coconuts tryna evict this fascist, goin up against ya leaders becomin a bad habit (seems as this is your 2nd encounter with Law in the space of a week or so gave this a current vibe,again a reminder/personal via its slant here,again I liked the wordplay,i feel a lot of ppl are missing your angles,this is because your contents are on the subtle side plus the fact they don't seem forced also aids that fact..) A despot ruler fears nothing from a lone minion, fallback or wake up in a Siberian prison The Kraken has risen an ya lack the vision, to defeat this monstrous written (lol..you clown him,i liked the humour in these bars,again showing who's boss this is a concept i'm quite happy you ran with,it shows your focused and coherent,plus getting at via his work was a nice inclusion too..) After I extinguish the Flame, ya won’t be advancing in this game, the literal definition of the domain name, punches so hard they take down LAs mainframe (on the bragging and selfhype vibe these bars here,still they had merit attached via the undertones of his alias without actually typing it,quite clever really,liked the way you've directed this verse on the whole,you've shown in parts some nice creativity,your plays/ similes also added and bolstered up your piece too,good work..) Law.. It's been known that your cheap, 'opening this door' and now ya brought bargained keys They'll all see 'scott tradein losses' and it's not from stock market fees (scotttrade) (good opener here i thought,liked the name play/flip as well,it came off as cold and mean,(smiles trading losses),yep you've got some sprite and creativity cracking off. .) Battling the Law you put in place? Scotty knew he was fucked from the start The dictator never lasted his Architecture, cause he's always sucked at the art (well aimed and directed i believe,and the punch hit too so win win there,a clever approach with a streak of gritty-ness entow,i feel you got at him well here,and the personal was subtle but present too..) ^ I don't know why you keep trying, everything that your typing is trash That why 'Scott soft lines' have only been enjoyed with wiping your ass (nah I wasn't feeling this bar here,kind off read like a filler really,there wasn't anything too heavy or damaging within,it didn't miss as such it's just seemed flat & nondescript compared to the other bars your displaying..) A sad lonely soul creates a community, it's easy to breakdown ya life After another loss... get ready for this threats to takedown the site. (lol..best bar of the battle and in a very very loose way relatable,this did make me smirk I liked it a solid personal/punch here,and a really nice closing bar too,nice parting shot on the whole..) Overall good tussle guys,but i do have a winner here and that's LAW here's why, although he had a bar that was waisted via it being a filler I had it even up till this point,but his last bar saved him from getting a L from me,he also had good bars through out that struck more of a cord with me,unlucky Scotty.. Vote..LAW.. peace. |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 06 August 2017 at 12:17am |
Well that was unexpectedly quick, 3-0 KO and onto the next one...
Law vs Neek Deadline = Midnight, Tues 8th August Winner to battle whoever drops out of tag event next Edited by Cuba - 06 August 2017 at 10:31am |
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Neek
Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW |
Posted: 08 August 2017 at 7:06pm |
this is david vs goliath, I need the luck of the Irish - Law a Behemoth with the raw shit
left the priest at the alter, see chink in his armor - cause even rap daemon said that he garbage you the homie, but I promise - lately Ive seen you struggle like dress on percussion you just messed up with fuckshit, taggin with a clown screamin "#ModSquadCorruption" but thats cool.. we still besties at the end of it you can get drugged for now, like a messy invention is law keep it thorough, im just better with the sentences go team go, hope you take the title and you triple it |
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#Bananas
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 09 August 2017 at 5:14am |
I had plans with Neek, But I'm getting a new Coach for EVO
This 'Street Fighter' will end when Law starts quotin' RICO We know he attacks those, with pictures exposed... but it's declining to matter Cause if we really saw he's "Dress to Kill", it'd be from dying of laugher So show yourself, stop evading, what is really behind ya, Neek? Stop being LA's Cockroach looking to feast, but than run out playing hide and seek This gonna be third time crushing him and have this insect, weakling repelled ^^ Cause LA been my 'stomping ground'... and This line speaks for itself
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
Posted: 10 August 2017 at 11:25pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. neek, first punuch was drawn out imo, too long. I just didn't really care for it. second one was dope, I enjoyed it. third bar I didn't really get, did you mean intervention? 4th bar you rooting for Law lol, this your strongest. law, first bar... I don't play street fighter which I think is what your refrence is. I don't know what the rico thing means. random note, for some odd reason in my head I said E.V.O and rico I said RE. C. O. it still rhymed lolololol second bar, I liked it minus this "declining to matter", iunno, I get what you saying, but it don't make sense grammatically. third bar was funny, nothing hard tho fourth bar is the bar of the battle. I loved this line and how it ties into the cockroach. MVGT Law. why? because I liked it better.
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
Posted: 16 August 2017 at 2:34am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. this is david vs goliath, I need the luck of the Irish - Law a Behemoth with the raw shit left the priest at the alter, see chink in his armor - cause even rap daemon said that he garbage Hi Neek, I thought this bar was lackluster. If I were to be quite frank with you, which I must insist upon doing, I'd tell you this was a poor way to start a battle Mr. Sir? What do you have to say for yourself? Nothing. Because I'm typing this to myself. 1/5 you the homie, but I promise - lately Ive seen you struggle like dress on percussion you just messed up with fuckshit, taggin with a clown screamin "#ModSquadCorruption" I see your concept here, unfortunately for us both it was like a jogging suckerpunch of the bystander of the fight and judges award you 0 points for your effort. 0/5 but thats cool.. we still besties at the end of it you can get drugged for now, like a messy invention is ah, i see you directed this at your opponent you dingus, good job. 1/5 law keep it thorough, im just better with the sentences go team go, hope you take the title and you triple it i dont know if i enjoyed the lack of a punch of lack of rhyme better here. this sucked. 0/5 Neek, 2 points. At no point in your rambling, incoherent attempts at attacks were you anywhere close to anything that could be considered an insult. Everyone in this thread is now dumber from having read it. I award you 2 points, and may God have mercy on your soul. I had plans with Neek, But I'm getting a new Coach for EVO This 'Street Fighter' will end when Law starts quotin' RICO k. no, unkay. highfive on the SF refskies tho. 1/5 We know he attacks those, with pictures exposed... but it's declining to matter Cause if we really saw he's "Dress to Kill", it'd be from dying of laugher See feedback for Neeks innocent bystander bar, but imagine the knuckle skimming the clothing of his opponent en route to hitting the bystander in the nose. 0.5/5 So show yourself, stop evading, what is really behind ya, Neek? Stop being LA's Cockroach looking to feast, but than run out playing hide and seek I think if I were to hear you say this out loud, I would cringe out loud somehow. 0.5/5 This gonna be third time crushing him and have this insect, weakling repelled ^^ Cause LA been my 'stomping ground'... and This line speaks for itself yay you did one good one. thanks bro cool concept transition and then doing other good stuff liek progression of a coherent choo choo train of thought and made it ineresting and stuff. 2.5/5 Hey guys so I know for a fact that Law's number total is higher and I like, really don't wanna go back and add everything up so I'm just gonna say I vote for Law and leave the thread. Thanks +1 Law
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Stalin
Site Moderator Joined: 24 November 2003 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 2587 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 34-12-2 Form: LNWWLW |
Posted: 16 August 2017 at 7:05am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. this is david vs goliath, I need the luck of the Irish - Law a Behemoth with the raw shit left the priest at the alter, see chink in his armor - cause even rap daemon said that he garbage Flow was great there until the said that he garbage part. you the homie, but I promise - lately Ive seen you struggle like dress on percussion you just messed up with fuckshit, taggin with a clown screamin "#ModSquadCorruption Not the hardest but a decent punch. but thats cool.. we still besties at the end of it you can get drugged for now, like a messy invention is As others have said I'm assuming you meant intervention is. Decent line but not s hard hitter. law keep it thorough, im just better with the sentences go team go, hope you take the title and you triple it I know you could've came way harder on a closer neek! I had plans with Neek, But I'm getting a new Coach for EVO This 'Street Fighter' will end when Law starts quotin' RICO Nice personal with the street fighter, We know he attacks those, with pictures exposed... but it's declining to matter Cause if we really saw he's "Dress to Kill", it'd be from dying of laugher Not a great punch could've done much more with this. So show yourself, stop evading, what is really behind ya, Neek? Stop being LA's Cockroach looking to feast, but than run out playing hide and seek Simple but a decent punch with a good flow. This gonna be third time crushing him and have this insect, weakling repelled ^^ Cause LA been my 'stomping ground'... and This line speaks for itself Rhymes were solid decent punch that tied into previous line. Overall I gotta say I expected more from both, you both know your better than this. But overall I gotta go with law for having a harder hitting verse with a more direct approach. Vote law |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 23 August 2017 at 10:22pm |
Law vs Ill Scripturez Deadline = Midnight, Sun 27th August
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iLL ScriptureZ
Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW |
Posted: 28 August 2017 at 2:54pm |
..whoops forgot about this.. lmk the deal
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 28 August 2017 at 3:01pm |
Don't know. But if it's still gonna happen, it's gotta be pushed back. I have some shit going on with my family right now.
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iLL ScriptureZ
Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW |
Posted: 28 August 2017 at 3:41pm |
Hope everything works out.
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
Posted: 01 December 2017 at 8:38am |
Locked this due to cleaning up the battles.
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#Bananas
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