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Who-Is-You?
Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW |
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Posted: 23 October 2017 at 3:18am |
What up the name is WhoIsYou? in case you’ve never heard of me
Okay Been away but skill still proper like my currency Precision cuts like a doctor when it’s surgery rippin rappers like e’ry day I celebrate the birth of me no courtesy, servin’m sentences for they perjury And any fan that cosigned, convict that man of forgery welcome to my murder spree, the rebirth of me currently got weak rappers is in the state of an emergency Aint ja rule, but certainly, got that murder ink I’m the real deal, so fck what ya heard or think If your weak ass swung at me, i wouldn’t turn or blink Lames on’t worry me. Seen my notepad ya claim it was a sorcery shine light on you like Sun it’s time to learn from me Like ISIS wanna kill Christians, I just wanna murda any, rapper who isn’t worthy why he still livin got bars for any fake welcome to my lyricill prison And when I say kill, know I mean that hypothetically. Yes you keep your soul, aint here for your life just your dignity As I Brilliantly paint the imagery so plain and vividly And call you out on every inconsistency And every sentence be another hit from me viciously chip in at you mentally a different typa empathy cos brother man, I feel you suffering but it bring a thrill to me I don’t call you fake rapper I call you enemy now face the penalty You all suffer, the whole entity of your fuckin peasantry If you know I’m talkin to you, bitch you’re already dead to me After I fuck up your brain gonna need help medically I told ya these lyrics are a complete weaponry Nothin better than - God and these skills God blessing me My match made in heaven is the melody You’re helpless in the face of destiny Always rappin bout your money, Well bitch ya just lost your equity And now you in debt to me got bars for any fake welcome to my lyricill prison |
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Absolute Abomination
Standard Member Joined: 15 May 2015 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 556 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: LLWW |
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Cool drop. Flow was pretty consistent but a few spots where the multies stopped or were lacking and only the end syllable was clearly rhymed (the "ee" sound).
E.g. no courtesy, servin’m sentences for they perjury And any fan that cosigned, convict that man of forgery Only the "forgery" rhymes in the second line. It's nice to see multiple words in the scheme but when one line has 5/6 rhymes and the second, which is longer, has only 1 it hurts the flow. Nothing really wowed me, just a decent braggadocio piece. Which is the general way to introduce yourself. Keep at it. |
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Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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It's decent man.....but decent is were it hits its ceiling......
I can see you becoming a lyrical force with more exposure and practice I don't want you to think I'm being a big shot here, rather you recognise I offering you some constructive criticism for you to use in your endeavours to elevate.. So this is what I noticed you done that made the work seem underdeveloped..... How many end rhymes ended with the letter Y?.....Too many! Imagine rhyming destruction obliteration motivation determination...Constipation...trust me I'm not full off shit That kind of rhyming would get me called out if I relied to heavily on it..., That's what you done homie... You feel me Otherwise keep up brother I like a lot of what you seem to be about |
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
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you got nice rhymes throughout it. nothing jaw dropping. im surprised you haven't dropped any audios yet, I thought that was what you mainly did.
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