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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 23 October 2017 at 8:34pm |
Frustrated at the thought of you Jumped & upgraded with what they offered you That’s how you treat me when I did it all for you!? In the cell & wouldn’t answer my call for you Those texts the next day were just horrible We were on the same device, you went an audibled Couldn’t see if you read it, they said they owed you credit? Just 2 years you took that leap of faith knowing it’s a debit?! So what our energy has changed?! Took a lil’ more time for my battery to raise Once I was charged my efficiency was the same Even though my cords were tangled a hundred ways I plugged into the block for you! Took about 20 drops for you! Was by your side in the hospital! It was me who made that call to your pops for you! & I was around more than he ever was Had ya back when you were lost with ya friends & drunk Now you finna leave me dead & stuck Think you got somethin’ better, wish you the best of luck.. I won’t be the first thing you see when you wake up Nah no more that, cuz your loyalty is made up Fake as the LinkedIn account that we shaped up To make you look worth more then what you came from How ironic is that?! You jumpin’ to the next thing in the drop of a hat After takin’ advantage of me cuz my confidence lacks I shut down, need a restart, I won’t apologize for the facts You put me through more than any guy has in past & I’m still here.. on the couch acknowledgin’ I’m replaced By that new phone you bought with the Otterbox case ..Just forget me ...somethin' light & creative...
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daydizzle89
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Damn wigga, switch to T-Mobile. Got that boost plan bruh. This was creative and i liked the way you put this into concept. Defo a nice piece. Mechanics and technical shit on point.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Yeah man.. I wanted the emotional feel of a relationship but it really just be about buying a new phone lol
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DressToKill
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This was lit, the references were dope lol and you made the whole story have that relationship feel. I enjoyed this read 100%
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The original comeback kid
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Thanks D
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spume corrupt
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Mad clever, I was hung up on this one def pressed all the right digits
Gotta appreciate this creative out the box number Props |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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clever feedback, thanks
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Crimson Juice
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Instead of leaving feed saying ripe concept (which it was) and ripe that,i'll just put
my hands together and clap loud and slow,I loved this fresh and highly original contents here,this pieces intentions was cool,almost a rhyme within a rhyme,(now that would be a solid challenge for you my friend),like SELF and CHAIN,you have the skills to pull it off,a complete rhyme that contains within 2 separate verses, anyways really enjoyed this piece it was dynamic really,RIPE WORK...peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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D-NoS
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I enjoyed this too, thanks for sharing it dude
...what more can I say? |
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https://soundcloud.com/dnos_aka_dicey |
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Lord Puente
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lolol I liked this a lot. dope job, dope concept. I like how it all connected and was about a phone lol. smooth as usual, but that's notihign new to you, nice rhyming as always. again, I enjoyed the concept. also made me remember someone battle and android being the theme
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Bazooka bastard
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Yeah this needs puttin on beat - good stuff
I can imagine the "plugged into the block for you, took about 20 drops for you" bit being catchy as fuck |
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