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Bazooka bastard
Groupie Joined: 30 December 2015 Status: Offline Points: 108 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
Topic: [1-3] Bazooka Bastard vs Who-Is-You? Posted: 01 November 2017 at 6:43pm |
And now, coming to you... LIVE FROM THE INTERNET... First to 5 votes or whoever has the most after a given period of time that someone other than myself decides
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Bazooka bastard
Groupie Joined: 30 December 2015 Status: Offline Points: 108 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
Posted: 01 November 2017 at 6:43pm |
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Who-Is-You?
Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW |
Posted: 01 November 2017 at 8:13pm |
Love the intro!
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Bazooka bastard
Groupie Joined: 30 December 2015 Status: Offline Points: 108 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
Posted: 03 November 2017 at 7:53am |
Shout out to my family back at home reading this on the live stream, shouts everyone else - stay sober & enjoy the rest of your day(s) Prepare for more bullshit than sanitation for heifers, You’d class a stationary lecture as a day to remember, I challenge myself by trimming my toe nails in a blender, We don’t mix well like gingers & Arabian weather,
My killer shock value’s anaphylactic, Who is you? A parragramatic wanking fanatic, You’re highly skilled at two things: standing in traffic and watching back to back re runs of ‘cash in the attic’
You can’t hack it, verses read like a computer glitch, Said you’d put NOS in a hospital, bruised n stitched, The way you act ‘ard is like a pugilist, But I don’t buy it - BB see’s Who’s a bitch,
You get zero pussy & if you said that ya do, I’d keep a sceptical view like ‘did we get to the moon?’, Losin your V is proving to be an endless pursuit, Because you stench up the room like Pepe le pew,
People spot my huge arms from an enormous distance, Every shirt I wear’s a fucking awkard fitment, I get asked about diet & sports equipment, But I’m just ambidextrous with a porn addiction,
3 days of sleep neglect, maybe later, Feeling slightly off the wall, radiator, ‘Who is you?’ right now just a mistake of nature, Intently writing the book on wasting paper |
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Who-Is-You?
Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW |
Posted: 03 November 2017 at 10:31pm |
I read his OM's and no jokin, the dude's a clown, a bum! Plus he soft and aint no shooter so when he say bazooka he's talkin bout the gum My every punch a haymaker. I'd be surprised if the man still gets up "bastard" aint had to, face this much trauma since his parents split up This fuckin re-re, for even thinkin he could beat me I feel like I'm 12 again, shooting cans in the backyard, how easy I sink a BB Can't see me. But just my words alone can shut down his whole future Brutal! like a war veteran how official it is when I put down a Bazooka Actually thinks his own skill's cold, but it miserable like a long day sig says he's "born sick", premature prick took 'having a cold' the wrong way 16 bars?? Nobody wanna read all your lines full of rah rah matterfact, parents of infants the only instance of someone sayin 'time for a ba ba' don't wanna fill this with nameplay, every emcee did that 'least once in the past But I aint got too much to bait from, still like a fisherman the way I'm hookin a bas he's a disgrace in the cyphers, homie I'll can ya scar your face, but ya couldn't hit a dope line if you was Tony Montanna I'll win this and you can have a rematch , for losing, yes that's your reward But each time ya do. you gon' keep getting stuck like the X on your keyboard. (see the title for this battle) |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 04 November 2017 at 12:43am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Bazooka the use of 2-4 syllable multi's here was solid on the whole,and it aided the flow throughout this drop too,you had some good subtle personals/shots on his alias and the punches were also present,although I found them to come off as forced and to extent light in landing aswell, you also had some nice wording within plus the placement of them worked well via flow,it was also a pacey read due to your line lengths which is also a plus for me, this drop also had some self- hype included,which is cool and all,but it takes up space where a punch or personal would of been more beneficial in battle,(unless it's a topical battle of course),my main gripe is I feel you only took swipes/jabs at him rather than landing haymakers, but this verse with all its pro's and con's still ended up being a good piece via its plays/ mechanics overall that strangely worked, good verse.. WIY,firstly i liked the way you came out snorting with opening bar,the punch/personal was a good solid shot i thought,that also caused me to raise a smile on reading,and to be honest you carried this on until the end,you showed some creative wordplay/ similes was good,(i do love me some w/play metaphors and similes,I know I know it's the teen in me..lol),this drop had plenty of strong shots within,virtually every bar too, so props there,now the gripe I have with your drop is that it lacks inners/multi's, which if used bolsters flow, with hefty drops like yours and little other than the end words rhyming,or shoring it all up hampers it,you word usage is excessive (try making all unnecessary words redundant),nice drop.. Overall,this was a nice battle guys,both had plusses and minuses,but there has to be a winner right?,and for me that was WIY, here's why,he had more punches/personals that landing more flush/square on the old chin,this was an enjoyable battle to read,& would like to see a rematch at some point,as I feel BB won't come in the same fashion next time.. Vote..Who Is You..peace. |
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D-NoS
Groupie Joined: 10 October 2014 Location: UK-Wales Status: Offline Points: 207 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-6-0 Form: LLLLLL |
Posted: 06 November 2017 at 4:20pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Bazooka! I enjoyed the funny opener. The second segment was the hardest imo, i enjoyed the way it read but it wasn't a true personal (as far as I understand them) this was more of a name-calling insult but ya know Respect for the mentin! bar 6 is cool; You act like a Pro Boxer but you don't fool me I see you don't wear any, kinda thing haha Bar 7, thats funny (and good display of multi(?) ..idk, i'm not too technical when it comes to this stuff) Bar 8, Pep le pew, lol, fucking lol - ain't seen in years, thanks for bringing up lol at segment 5.. funny Bar 11, three day tug session? lol Closing bar, I liked the word choice here, Intently writing the book on wasting paper haha funny stuff. I enjoyed the read and reference's, Not a very punchy verse but you already know that. Who-Is-You?! I like the flow here, I'm a fan of your writing style, I like the simplicity - reminds me of my own. bar 1-4, came out swinging, this was live and direct. bars 5-6, made me chuckle "Can't see me. But just my words alone can shut down his whole future Brutal! like a war veteran how official it is when I put down a Bazooka" <--- fucking A "Actually thinks his own skill's cold, but it miserable like a long day sig says he's "born sick", premature prick took 'having a cold' the wrong way" <--- Clever personal bars 11-16 were all okay but none hit as hard as the first 4 imo, entertaining still. 17-18, Great closer and sums up this piece really... relevant, on point and as BB said 'thought-out' which it was. There were more punches that landed and clever ideas in WIY's verse, I liked both ofc, BB's verse flowed well and had alot of laughs in it, better luck next time my man, ..but in comparison.. being battle verses... my vote must goto... Who-Is-You? Thanks for battling! |
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Ridley Squat
Street Team Joined: 20 November 2015 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 830 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-6-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 12 November 2017 at 3:44pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Now this is an interesting one ... W dropped a decent solid verse, full of personals. Rhyming was loose in places but mostly consistent. 'Still gets up / parent split up' doesn't work ... shame as it woulda been decent. 'Homie I'll can ya / Tony Montana' was dope though. Nothing that blew me away ... but enough to win the average battle. And I fully endorse anyone's decision that LA's usual voting style means this has to be the outright winner. But this is where I'm torn ... cos BB's verse is more the shit that I like, and how I would write if I could get away with it. But most people will judge bar by bar even if written in quatrains or longer schemes, and consider punch count to be the be all and end all. Maybe they are right, but I go more for the rhyming artistry and overall entertainment value... which was rife in the BB verse. Sections 2, 4 & 5 were fucking genius The closer was dope too, and "slightly off the wall, radiator" was legendary (though I can't read it with hearing it in the voice of O'Shea, lol) So that's why for me MFVGTBB That said it's up to you Juiceman if this is "Vote: Disallowed" based on what I said... but you do owe me, cos you recently marked one of my Excellent votes as Good. Peace. |
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m1k3
Groupie Joined: 27 June 2014 Location: USA Status: Offline Points: 171 |
Posted: 25 November 2017 at 7:15am |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Prepare for more bullshit than sanitation for heifers, You’d class a stationary lecture as a day to remember, I challenge myself by trimming my toe nails in a blender, We don’t mix well like gingers & Arabian weather, Decent setup but not much of a punchline. My killer shock value’s anaphylactic, Who is you? A parragramatic wanking fanatic, You’re highly skilled at two things: standing in traffic and watching back to back re runs of ‘cash in the attic’ Feel like the bars are all over the place with no relevance to each other. You can’t hack it, verses read like a computer glitch, Said you’d put NOS in a hospital, bruised n stitched, The way you act ‘ard is like a pugilist, But I don’t buy it - BB see’s Who’s a bitch, So the punch is BBC (BB see's) / Doctor Who (Who's) ? If that's
correct, it could've been worded better and more effective. Your setup
lines are decent here. You get zero pussy & if you said that ya do, I’d keep a sceptical view like ‘did we get to the moon?’, Losin your V is proving to be an endless pursuit, Because you stench up the room like Pepe le pew, Multis flowed well.. but not much power or cleverness to the punchline.. the multis are really well done here though. People spot my huge arms from an enormous distance, Every shirt I wear’s a fucking awkard fitment, I get asked about diet & sports equipment, But I’m just ambidextrous with a porn addiction, I find it funny.. doesn't hit your opponent though.. again, I like the way you put multis together.. 3 days of sleep neglect, maybe later, Feeling slightly off the wall, radiator, ‘Who is you?’ right now just a mistake of nature, Intently writing the book on wasting paper Your setup was more clever than the punchline, but the punch had some humor to it.. I read his OM's and no jokin, the dude's a clown, a bum! Plus he soft and aint no shooter so when he say bazooka he's talkin bout the gum Decent.. could've been worded better to flow better.. My every punch a haymaker. I'd be surprised if the man still gets up "bastard" aint had to, face this much trauma since his parents split up I get the bar, but the way it's worded hurt it. It's still solid. This fuckin re-re, for even thinkin he could beat me I feel like I'm 12 again, shooting cans in the backyard, how easy I sink a BB I think this is pretty clever and well executed.. a little wordy.. Can't see me. But just my words alone can shut down his whole future Brutal! like a war veteran how official it is when I put down a Bazooka Again, I feel like this could've been worded better and would've hit harder.. Actually thinks his own skill's cold, but it miserable like a long day sig says he's "born sick", premature prick took 'having a cold' the wrong way It's not bad.. the wording of it could've been better.. doesn't come across as well as it could have.. 16 bars?? Nobody wanna read all your lines full of rah rah matterfact, parents of infants the only instance of someone sayin 'time for a ba ba' I'm not impressed or entertained much by this one.. ba ba is kind of a stretch and it didn't flow well.. don't wanna fill this with nameplay, every emcee did that 'least once in the past But I aint got too much to bait from, still like a fisherman the way I'm hookin a bas Good wordplay.. connected with opponent.. solid he's a disgrace in the cyphers, homie I'll can ya scar your face, but ya couldn't hit a dope line if you was Tony Montanna Nothing special but a light jab that still connects.. I'll win this and you can have a rematch , for losing, yes that's your reward But each time ya do. you gon' keep getting stuck like the X on your keyboard. (see the title for this battle) Relevant.. moderate hit.. I think the wording is on the sloppy side though. Bazooka's
bars flowed a lot better, but to me, that's not the primary factor for a
battle. It's a factor, just not primary. Some of his bars didn't even target Who-Is. Who's punches were more
creative and consistently connected with his opponent. I don't feel I
have to be long winded here cause I did write a blurb for each bar. I'm giving it to Who-Is-You |
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
Posted: 01 December 2017 at 8:49am |
The battle states first to five but votes are lacking. I'm giving this 24 hours for the remaining votes.
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
Posted: 02 December 2017 at 5:27pm |
So the W is going to Who-Is-You due to lack of votes. Locked.
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#Bananas
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