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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 12 March 2018 at 9:14pm |
A legend's life's too long I'll break you down like refineries This your home? Too bad you'll lose your life violently 'Coz your days' 'numbered', death I 'owe one' like 'binary' (0-1) Eons no object, just the theme that reasons me to seek gore As your walls close in, the end's as concise as trenches scream war My fists pulsate as I attack on my travels Drown your fam' in so much sorrow it's like they're aquatically grappled You'll try fighting back as 'C flows' with these hits, collapsing your castle (sea flows) But once the 'water? You' come to a 'rocky end' like I'm 'blasting the gravel'. (war-to-you) |
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spume corrupt
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Sup RD?
Good to see you up in here! This is why you was nominated most improved of the year back in the day You grabbed the feed done the math and developed the the tools..Props on that Some of this was dope fam! Tha binary line....great vision The trench line was a fucking WOW moment The gravel line was str8 grimey And the aquatic line despite being a stretch was still dope Very nice work here main delivered perfectly for the WD Good shit |
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Slip
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Nice drop good to see you back on the board
Im diggin that binary play to |
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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people |
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SELF ACTIVATE
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The binary wordplay was super clever. A real stand out moment. Humanity-legends-refineries was also dope. The C-flow line could have been ill. But unless your real name starts with the letter 'C' it loses relevance and impact. Either way, this was dope, Rap. I dug your battle bars.
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Sammy
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oohhhh shit, my man RD handling bidness. this is actually really good. and to echo others, that binary code play was very notable. if i do a mag, i'm definitely puttin that in a quotable. good shit sir.
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The Rap Daemon
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Thanks for the feed, guys..
Really appreciate the kind words. Been taking a lot of the feed and with the challenge, I refined what I knew and did my best to make as polished of a piece instead of winging an idea from the mind straight on to here and tried hard not to get carried away and focus on refining the technical sweetness. I wasn't sure, but I'm grateful for the feed, because it's helped a lot and I guess it's been a working a treat. And yeah, Self, my real name begins with C. |
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You did ya thing on this one, Rap.
And thanks for clearing that up. It makes the bar twice as nice. |
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Lord Puente
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I wasn’t feeling your usage of eons or trenches, but on the other hand you had my fav usage of the world aquatic. But then you had a lot of stretches I wasn’t feeling such as water- war to you. That’s gotta be one crazy thick accent to get that from water.
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The Rap Daemon
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War-to and water is the same pronunciation for me. I didn't play water with war to you. Rather water? You, and war to you. ;
Anyway, glad you felt some of it. I'm appreciating all this feed back. Wasn't expecting this much tbh. |
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Whatever happens fam
I gotta say this You fucking killed that binary line, your thought process with the play on that word was top tier Keep on |
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