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    Posted: 16 April 2018 at 1:20pm
Crazy what a kid won't do just to have a father figure
Only the real feel the pain when your daddy ain't riding withcha
Your friends ain't vibin withcha
Mindstate on prime ape
Silverbacks see glory in a land of Allah and killers
Erhamdurrulah brother, I promise that God is withcha
Even when the only shootin star you saw
Was launched from a drone, admire and love the picture
Dont scream allahu akhbar cuz the fucking cops'll kill ya
Trust me, it's all familiar
Instead... Hang it over the bulletholes in your walls
Adorne your temple cuz mentally you're gone
Outside the sirens is going, it's an illigitemate war
This is how it feels when a kid is lost in the dark (woo!)
Between the savings for colder days and the horrific fate that awaits
You can feel the intangible peace coming, but that's overrated
Come closer homie, I operate the golden gate
Doves floating over where the gods'll wait
And all you hear is clapping when the wind stops
Suspicion grows, chin drops. Linen clothes, flip flops
The standing ovation creates silence so profound...
You could hear a pin drop!
But strength is found in poverty
Like a million voices tearing down a monarchy
From the littlest atrocities to commodities, the flow is an oddity
Like being caressed by Baba Yaga - a ungodly monstrosity
But I treat it like my partner, raise her like we figureskating
Its invigorating what the mirrors saying
Little kid turned intimidating...
A single grain of sand turned to a statue of clay and
Solidified his place - victory in a Coliseum
Carpe diem! Among peers an enlightened being
Stand up and be greeted with missiles and flashing... lights (lights)
Burning houses and riots, passion of the christ (ISIS)
Dutty wine it, baby shake it the nicest (nicest)
Stevie wonder blindness, the bars aint hiding the crisis (I is)
Dying from the stench of corpses
Someone hand me the vice grips (and tighten)
The oil lines, we need fire hydrants
Facebook likes don't replace the tanks in our minds (its)
A nice distraction from the bombs falling from the skies (kiss)
My little angel tweeting...
Thousands of distressed blue birds on the rise....

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote daydizzle89 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 16 April 2018 at 1:41pm
This was refreshing.

Not a fan of your views on the subject matter but regardless, you made some valid points and arguments. Some of the bars had the flow chopped but it wasn't terrible. Get back writing and brush the dust off ya shoulders off

Instead... Hang it over the bulletholes in your walls
Adorne your temple cuz mentally you're gone
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This was pretty dope here.


But strength is found in poverty
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Truth in this statement!!!!!


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^ bet
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Still no equipment? 🤔
I can only fall off in space...
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Lmao. I'm the definition of procrastination
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First read felt a bit convoluted
I don’t i ever fully grasped this completely but the pace and rhyme placement really made for a good read
Was feeling that flip flop/ pin drop section
And the figure skating thing....
Yeah all good stuff in content I guess but for me it was the next level rhyming placement and original style flow that was the magic
Btw, once I found the flow I was really impressed
Keep ya End up homie

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Thanks Spume, you the goat.
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