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Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Posted: 16 April 2018 at 1:20pm |
Crazy what a kid won't do just to have a father figure
Only the real feel the pain when your daddy ain't riding withcha Your friends ain't vibin withcha Mindstate on prime ape Silverbacks see glory in a land of Allah and killers Erhamdurrulah brother, I promise that God is withcha Even when the only shootin star you saw Was launched from a drone, admire and love the picture Dont scream allahu akhbar cuz the fucking cops'll kill ya Trust me, it's all familiar Instead... Hang it over the bulletholes in your walls Adorne your temple cuz mentally you're gone Outside the sirens is going, it's an illigitemate war This is how it feels when a kid is lost in the dark (woo!) Between the savings for colder days and the horrific fate that awaits You can feel the intangible peace coming, but that's overrated Come closer homie, I operate the golden gate Doves floating over where the gods'll wait And all you hear is clapping when the wind stops Suspicion grows, chin drops. Linen clothes, flip flops The standing ovation creates silence so profound... You could hear a pin drop! But strength is found in poverty Like a million voices tearing down a monarchy From the littlest atrocities to commodities, the flow is an oddity Like being caressed by Baba Yaga - a ungodly monstrosity But I treat it like my partner, raise her like we figureskating Its invigorating what the mirrors saying Little kid turned intimidating... A single grain of sand turned to a statue of clay and Solidified his place - victory in a Coliseum Carpe diem! Among peers an enlightened being Stand up and be greeted with missiles and flashing... lights (lights) Burning houses and riots, passion of the christ (ISIS) Dutty wine it, baby shake it the nicest (nicest) Stevie wonder blindness, the bars aint hiding the crisis (I is) Dying from the stench of corpses Someone hand me the vice grips (and tighten) The oil lines, we need fire hydrants Facebook likes don't replace the tanks in our minds (its) A nice distraction from the bombs falling from the skies (kiss) My little angel tweeting... Thousands of distressed blue birds on the rise....
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daydizzle89
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This was refreshing.
Not a fan of your views on the subject matter but regardless, you made some valid points and arguments. Some of the bars had the flow chopped but it wasn't terrible. Get back writing and brush the dust off ya shoulders off Instead... Hang it over the bulletholes in your walls Adorne your temple cuz mentally you're gone ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This was pretty dope here. But strength is found in poverty ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ Truth in this statement!!!!! |
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Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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^ bet
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D.Von Doom
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Still no equipment? 🤔
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I can only fall off in space...
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Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Lmao. I'm the definition of procrastination
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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First read felt a bit convoluted
I don’t i ever fully grasped this completely but the pace and rhyme placement really made for a good read Was feeling that flip flop/ pin drop section And the figure skating thing.... Yeah all good stuff in content I guess but for me it was the next level rhyming placement and original style flow that was the magic Btw, once I found the flow I was really impressed Keep ya End up homie |
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Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Thanks Spume, you the goat.
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