Open Mic: Wildfire ft. Nigma

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🔥 Wildfire 🔥
featuring Nigma & Smooth




-Smooth-

I was sitting, thinking..
What is it I'd like to do this evening..

I mean,
What are limitations really but a theory..

I mean is,

I've been off the chain since poppa came an *cough* claimed that pac was gay.
Talking game since joplin sang of ball and chains in monterey..
It's music when I prop a page - students on an opera stage..
I'm soon to be a doctor since it's truly how I operate.
I fuel the need to compensate for people that are less than me
I'm flyer than a missile and I'm seeking out my destiny.   
My style is so crystal and it has to be supremacy
I don't believe in records and achieve them accidentally.
I need a peaceful melody.. exquisite when I'm kickin back.
This effervescent morning was invisioned in a different rap.
You revel in the presence of a visionary - picture that.
Im never in the 'present' but it gifted me the gift of gab.
Never have we ever but if ever we had history..
I'd sever every tie and semper fi in my own victory
I wrestle back and fourth from time-to-time about this theory too
nearly dried my teary eyes but dreary lies the evening dew

Breath..
Now let's go again..

It's merely time you hear me rhyme severely fly through digi screens
I fear you might adhere in an endearing-like affinity
It clearly is a win to me but listen I am not the one
I'd rather handle business from a distance in this autumn sun.
I dedicate my mornings to a meditative atmosphere
known to step and levitate according to the stratosphere.
This forum was a special place but what the hell has happened here?
Ohio when this mother fuckin forum needs a cavalier
Im out.



-Nigma-
Smooth, he’s back and clearly standing here to prove himself
Packaged heat he passed me has emphatically removed the doubt
The sap that keeps this family tree intact has dug it’s roots in ground
They’re camping at this reenacted peak to bloom and sprout  
Nothing left is sacred so we shred the page to mask the fear
Myriads of thoughts are cropped on top of us like chandeliers
The dampness in your pants is a reaction to the panic, dear
You’ll shrivel from existence like the dripping of Atlantis tears
Drift away. It’s the same way eyes of the blind fade
Brightness of the mind changes as a true sights gained
Embrace the light and grow darker, not in a violent way
Define your fate and find a pinky crimson from a lighter grey
….
Ignite. Insane. Inside, innate. It’s time, invade, I eye the prize
The price is paid. Alive inside, you finally made it. Psych.
You fake it. Life has was to make a change, caged inside a maze
But I take pride in finding ways, survive unscathed inside restraints
I leave you...
Leashed in chains, receive the plague, swollen and scarred...
Reading my substance leaves ya soul feeling starved...
Like it’s growing a hole in ya heart that is moldy and charred...
Deepest statements feel abbreviated, it’s the molten mark...
So go and
Open LA’s Times and tell me who’s the chosen centerfold
Take the time to pause for your suggestions... And it’s closed
Fuck your food for thought, I got the proof that you all edible
I’ll handicap these faggots just to eat my fruit and vegetables


9-24-18





Edited by Smoothtung - 25 September 2018 at 2:05am
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Myriads of thoughts are cropped on top of us like chandeliers
The dampness in your pants is a reaction to the panic, dear
You’ll shrivel from existence like the dripping of Atlantis tears


god damn Nigma.. you fucking alien you.


and that closer was mean as shit too. hot damn.
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Originally posted by Smoothtung Smoothtung wrote:






-Nigma-

Myriads of thoughts are cropped on top of us like chandeliers
The dampness in your pants is a reaction to the panic, dear
You’ll shrivel from existence like the dripping of Atlantis tears
Drift away. It’s the same way eyes of the blind fade
Brightness of the mind changes as a true sights gained
Embrace the light and grow darker, not in a violent way
Define your fate and find a pinky crimson from a lighter grey






so flames bro.. appreciate being able to going in with you like back in the day. You're always among my favorite people to write with. You didn't disappoint here. 🔥
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Originally posted by Smoothtung Smoothtung wrote:


What are limitations really but a theory..

This effervescent morning was invisioned in a different rap.
You revel in the presence of a visionary - picture that.
Im never in the 'present' but it gifted me the gift of gab.

This was a pretty clean verse Smooth. Wording was on point, and as per usual, you've been known to pack multis in bunches and this was no exception. You have a bounce to your bars that allows the sounds to come off crisp. The above quotable was my favorite of your verse.

Originally posted by Nigma Nigma wrote:




The sap that keeps this family tree intact has dug it’s roots in ground
They’re camping at this reenacted peak to bloom and sprout  

Myriads of thoughts are cropped on top of us like chandeliers

Define your fate and find a pinky crimson from a lighter grey

Ignite. Insane. Inside, innate. It’s time, invade, I eye the prize

But I take pride in finding ways, survive unscathed inside restraints

Nigs, nice work here. Your verse was pretty polished as well. It had the familiar Nigma verse written all through it as you guys have similar styles. Multi packed and really delivering on content with each bars. Your quotables are above as well. 

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smooth, i'm definitely becoming a fan of yours man. this was flame. Nig, well u already know my fanboyism of your shit so we'll keep it on the light, son, haha.

Talking game since joplin sang of ball and chains in monterey..

im not gonna lie, i'm a juge fan of Joplin and saw the video of that concert recently (about 2 weeks ago). She was on some other level even Momma Cassie was amazed, in the video lol. This verse was also on some other shit, bro. the verse was smooth. wordplay was subtle making it very effective in my opinion. some of the lines were adrenaline boosting swag..

I'd sever every tie and semper fi in my own victory 

dawwwwgggg

nigma - himself/doubt...am i missing something there? maybe it wasnt' meant to be a rhyming couplet. maybe if i was canadian..... lmao, i'm buggin bro. that aside, this was dope. mask the fear/chandelier...ahhhh thats the nigma i know. crisp rhyming. nice balance of topical and text (if that made sense at all lol). that pinky/grey line was def envy-worthy. 

good collab guys. i really didn't have any complaints. salooooooo 





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prove himself//remove the doubt

Assonance rhyme, close enough imo. 

Ty for the feed bros
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TRASH AS FUCK YOU WORTHLESS CUCK FAGGOT 
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Fuck your food for thought, I got the proof that you all edible
I’ll handicap these faggots just to eat my fruit and vegetables

laughed my ass off Ma.

Smooth I ain't read your stuff before, I think, but this got me hooked.

"It's music when I prop a page - students on an opera stage.. 
I'm soon to be a doctor since it's truly how I operate. 

You revel in the presence of a visionary - picture that.
Im never in the 'present' but it gifted me the gift of gab.

Never have we ever but if ever we had history..
I'd sever every tie and semper fi in my own victory 
I wrestle back and fourth from time-to-time about this theory too
nearly dried my teary eyes but dreary lies the evening dew"


heeeeeeeeeeeat bro.
Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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Smooth: Your style, your consistency of scheme and ability to combine certain words (like the monterey bar) is really, really nice. It's actually the highlight of your verse. It felt natural and made for a very smooth throughout. Favourite lines were the 'effervescent morning' and 'never have we ever' parts. I've read a few of your verses by now I think, and it's always up to your 'standard'. This was another demonstration of just that. 

Nigma: Glad to be reading another verse from you. From 'chandeliers' onwards, it was a great presentation of every aspect I appreciate in your writing. The balance of (a slightly) poetic tale with direct references and your, at times subtle, unique schemes makes the read even more authentic for me. The 'Atlantis tears' segment was another highlight. Enjoyable read. 
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