Text Battle Archive: Rapper T vs Vellum [ text ]...(0-1) |
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Vellum
Standard Member Joined: 07 October 2013 Location: Connecticut Status: Offline Points: 492 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 24-2-1 Form: WWWWWW |
Topic: Rapper T vs Vellum [ text ]...(0-1) Posted: 14 December 2018 at 8:09am |
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House rules Good luck Rapper T I’ll be dropping soon Edited by Crimson Juice - 19 December 2018 at 10:48am |
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Vellum
Standard Member Joined: 07 October 2013 Location: Connecticut Status: Offline Points: 492 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 24-2-1 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 17 December 2018 at 5:53pm |
You want to battle again what the hell is with you?
Shit ... at this rate I’m gonna run out of L’s to give you! I’ll mock his fake sound then I’m beating him down Because I don’t got to play golf to put T in the ground! No one in their right mind would buy an album of this geek yelling .. So You’d have to look in the immune system to find a place where T sellin! (T cell in ) I’ll bruise this opponent it’s a fact this dumb dude isn’t true and I know it Because he stays on some bull shit .. like a magic mushroom when it’s growin! |
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Rapper T
Suspended Joined: 25 November 2013 Location: NZ Status: Offline Points: 1423 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-27-0 Form: LLLWLW |
Posted: 17 December 2018 at 6:39pm |
Vaggum ain't no villain she's a failed phlagellum Fuckin' melons on her swellin' while she's wailin' her ballad Don't mean to fade her but hell if slum gonna sweat on the boards I'm decapitatin' Vaginellum ... love gettin' head from a whore ... N you a deadbeat bore, probly 9th cos of bum buddys Fat piece of shit you remind me ov Al ... um ... BUNDY!!! Can't fuck up T - he God - won't fell the mind of his Neph Vellum (Nephilim) callin' "UNCLE T!!!" but hell if I know kid
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ΔE(t)
Groupie Joined: 28 November 2018 Location: California Status: Offline Points: 50 |
Posted: 17 December 2018 at 8:58pm |
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Vellum, Iiked your first 3 couplets, I thought your first 2 couplets were particularly clever and smooth. "I’ll bruise this opponent it’s a fact this dumb dude isn’t true and I know it Because he stays on some bull shit .. like a magic mushroom when it’s growin!" I felt the flow broke a bit here but I like content. I liked your drop though. Rapper T, I don't know what your first couplet means "Vaggum ain't no villain she's a failed phlagellum Fuckin' melons on her swellin' while she's wailin' her ballad" I don't see how failing as a villain relates to a defective flagellum. Not capable of movement perhaps? seems like it was placed there for structure alone. Completely lost on the second line, seems placed for the sake of internal rhymes not for content progression. Also phlagellum/ her ballad (or just ballad, not sure) was a reach rhyme to me. I think starting like this set a bad tone for me. The rest I felt were empty punches. Just bein crass for the hell of it. Wasn't very captivating. The last line was cringey because the rest wasn't great and then you claim invincibility and call yourself god. Vote: Vellum. |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 25 May 2019 at 11:27am |
Due to how long this battle has been sitting around,I've awarded the win to Vellum
and i'm moving this to the battle archive. Win Vellum. |
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