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D-NoS
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Posted: 31 May 2019 at 1:54am |
I Aint Gonna Lie, I Aint a Happy Guy, I Gotta Couple'a Worries ina Back of my Mind.. I Aint Qualified for the Jobs I Cant Find, And Like What the Fuck am I Doing With my Life.. I Been Wasting Mine An I'm Running Outta Time, Not Enough Money In An The Waters Run Dry Wanna Live Life Before I Have To Die, No Way's That Happening Until I Make More Dimes I Didn't Choose Rhymes, They Choose Me, I Gave My Life to The Music An I Feel It Owes Me I Was an Addict Before any Drugs I Loves Beats , I'm Like a Fire The Music Is Fuel That Feeds Me I Aint A Criminal If In The Law I Don't Believe, It Is What It Is And That Is My Philosophy Mankind Is Cool N All But Aint No Boss Of Me, I Dont Buy God I Just Trust The Almighty I Wear My Heart On My Sleeve, I'm Starving Hungry, Make Art Constantly, Pray One Day I Can Eat, At My Age I Should Be'a Few Albums Deep, It Aint Never To Late So I Formulate Plans G Take Care of My Health With Fitness Regimes, Prepare To Draw More Wealth From Cash Machines Fall Back On Floors While I'm High On Hash N Trees, I'm Done With Nightmares I'm Realizing Dreams Doing What I Shoulda Done When I was In My Teens, Back Then My Head Was Gone So I Was On Bass N Ecstasy Traumatic Childhood Fucked Me Up Through Puberty, Lost My Brain Went Insane To Much Pain Bothering Me, Got A Job Working In The Fast Food Industry Met A Bird Got a Flat B'came A Dad N Got Clean Fast-forward Nine Years its Y2K19, Been Blasting Doors Off Hinges Like They Aint No Thing
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I like social awareness piece's, especially when they act like Windows into a
person's life struggles, this rhyme was simple in its approach but it worked well for me, you had enough content in there to form a picture when reading, from start to finish your internal rhyme scheme was working well, considering the line lengths,it read quite pacey, nice expression there, enjoyable read..peace. |
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